Well,I wasn't expecting this night would end so badly for Vinyl, it was still fun seeing her struggle with keeping it in and have her losing it for good. I wonder what will happen next for her to rethink about going back their again. I think she will need a lot of consoling and cajoling to feel good again, still at least she is at their level now and can't be disgusted about them and think that she is better then them. Wonder if she will start mingling with the reset of the crowd now? I thought the pacific used as a cork to limit how much they are allowed to dring was interesting. I will be looking forward to the next chapter.
8745284 Are you looking for a proof reader for your comments? Cause you should . Also if the pay is good... I mean it's wearing diapers and using them or hearing Octavia nagging all the time, hard choice
loved it. I knew Scratchy couldn't hold it. I wonder what'll happen when she needs to do something else in her diapey-waipey I mean, if she was crying after wetting herself, she's gonna bawl after making a stinky in her diapees
8746552 That makes me think it is gonna come to that So exciting, I cant wait for later chapters I like your stuff, but its always nice to see something lighter, it has a nice charm to it
Great chapter as usual. The details you go into, both on the useage and Vinyl's feelings and reactions towards the whole thing in general just makes it better. The detail with how they make use of the pacifiers was a fun touch to put in there. Definitely gonna keep reading! Though I have a feeling Vinyl will go through a punishment in some shape or form for drinking that bottle...
“Oh, well that’s plenty of time to give you a changie--” Vinyl winced at the word “--so don’t you worry about it.”
As a general thing, you should use en-dashes or em-dashes here. They're largely interchangable for your situation and the differences when it comes to writing are very niche, although I would personally recommend the use of em-dashes. Double hyphens are never proper to use, although single hyphens would probably be fine if exposition was choping a single word in half, to indicate a fast aside interrupting someone. Been a while since I brushed up on my dash use, though, so don't take my word as gospel.
Another solid chapter. Alcohol remains the lubricant of plot development, but it's fitting for the scenario and character so whatever. Grumbles about how no one uses salt despite being the canon inebriator. I do like how the addition of 'Just one more drink' is probably going to let things develop, though. It's a good, character-driven mistake.
Looking forward to the next chapter, where I'm sure things are going to let loose, in one way or another.
8826615 HOPEFULLY SOON, I GUESS, MAYBE!!! I definitely won't have it done until April, and then the pre-readers gotta look it over, so it'll be a while.
Going back on your word already, Vinyl? You're going to regret that free beer.
well she did use her diaper for the first time so she should be able to do it again and be okay with it and not to hold it
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She won't be ok, it's way to humiliating for her,
Really enjoyable chapter dude! I really felt for Vinyl, her embarrassment and shame was well honestly adorable. Keep up the good work!
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Oh, she just might
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Use her diaper a second time? No way, Vinyl's too cool for that.
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Thanks! I'm really glad you like embarrassed Vinyl, cause she's not done yet.
Well,I wasn't expecting this night would end so badly for Vinyl, it was still fun seeing her struggle with keeping it in and have her losing it for good. I wonder what will happen next for her to rethink about going back their again. I think she will need a lot of consoling and cajoling to feel good again, still at least she is at their level now and can't be disgusted about them and think that she is better then them. Wonder if she will start mingling with the reset of the crowd now? I thought the pacific used as a cork to limit how much they are allowed to dring was interesting. I will be looking forward to the next chapter.
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Are you looking for a proof reader for your comments? Cause you should .
Also if the pay is good... I mean it's wearing diapers and using them or hearing Octavia nagging all the time, hard choice
Awesome thank you for posting needed something to read.
I predict the beer that she is drinking will have a laxative effect. At least I hope that happens.
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The night isn't over yet! Vinyl might just be able to turn it around.
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Maybe that beer will push her over the edge, or maybe it won't. You'll have to wait to see
loved it. I knew Scratchy couldn't hold it. I wonder what'll happen when she needs to do something else in her diapey-waipey
I mean, if she was crying after wetting herself, she's gonna bawl after making a stinky in her diapees
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Vinyl will manage somehow. You know, if it comes to that.
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That makes me think it is gonna come to that So exciting, I cant wait for later chapters I like your stuff, but its always nice to see something lighter, it has a nice charm to it
Great chapter as usual. The details you go into, both on the useage and Vinyl's feelings and reactions towards the whole thing in general just makes it better. The detail with how they make use of the pacifiers was a fun touch to put in there. Definitely gonna keep reading! Though I have a feeling Vinyl will go through a punishment in some shape or form for drinking that bottle...
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Thanks! I'm glad you liked it so much.
And I have a feeling that your feeling might be on the right track.
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Oooooh, excitement
As a general thing, you should use en-dashes or em-dashes here. They're largely interchangable for your situation and the differences when it comes to writing are very niche, although I would personally recommend the use of em-dashes. Double hyphens are never proper to use, although single hyphens would probably be fine if exposition was choping a single word in half, to indicate a fast aside interrupting someone. Been a while since I brushed up on my dash use, though, so don't take my word as gospel.
Another solid chapter. Alcohol remains the lubricant of plot development, but it's fitting for the scenario and character so whatever. Grumbles about how no one uses salt despite being the canon inebriator. I do like how the addition of 'Just one more drink' is probably going to let things develop, though. It's a good, character-driven mistake.
Looking forward to the next chapter, where I'm sure things are going to let loose, in one way or another.
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Glad I've still been able to keep you interested. And thanks for the tip on dashes, I'll definitely be using them more often in the future.
Go home Vinyl, you're drunk!
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Aw but she can't go home yet! Not when the party's just getting good.
I don't like to pressure anybody, but when can We more or less expect a new chapter?
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I really don't know when it'll arrive. The next two weeks look pretty busy for me, but after that there could be more time to write.
WHEN'S THE NEW CHAPTER GONNA COME???
The suspense is killing me!
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HOPEFULLY SOON, I GUESS, MAYBE!!!
I definitely won't have it done until April, and then the pre-readers gotta look it over, so it'll be a while.
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well I'm done proofreading
Wait, did Berry think that Vinyl was pleasuring herself in her diaper?