Berry probably needs to be double diapered with how much she drinks. I get the feeling Vinyl's gonna be just as soaked by the end of the night at the rate she's currently drinking.
I think you did a good job at easing Vinyl into ABDL theme and realistically show the reaction that you would expect from someone that isn't into that stuff in the first place and find good arguments in trying putting up with it for some more. I like the the bottled beer part as a way to show that she has to overcome her own preconceptions on the ABDL in her mind and having her admit that it isn't so bad. Good job on that.
I really have wondered why they never came up with some kind of "adult" "manly" version of nipples for beer and alcohol. The closest I have seen to this idea was from an episode of the Drew Carey show. Also I wonder what kind of diaper the security ponies wear? I have done some security jobs where I was at a door and ID'ed people. I legit wish diapers were a common thing with security.
8722073 Fillyscoots42 made it a while back. I completely spaced on sourcing the image earlier, but it has a working link now that'll take you to the full thing.
8722102 The bouncer's for this club wear medium sized diapers, like Berry. I kinda wanted to have a scene with them early on to show they do their jobs from the comfort of a baby bouncer too (mostly cause I thought bouncers in bouncers would be funny) but never did.
I love this story so much that I literally come back every day to see if there is an update. I usually hate reading in general but you my friend have caused me to do something I usually hate doing. If only schools could make me feel the same way.
Btw, I saw a few errors so I thought I'd let you know.
The legion of diapered dancers who looked like they were at least trying to imitate the Countess’ moves before gave up when the next song came on. I think it's supposed to say "before giving up".
Fine! I feel guilty alright? She bit her lips, thoughts bleeding into her actions. It was a crappy thing to do, I admit it. That’s one me. I think that's supposed to be "That's on me".
She sighed. She shuffled her feet and looked out into the throng of dancing ponies. That should be "hooves" since this has ponies in it and not humans.
Funny that, because now Vinyl was staring at the one mare in a position to do so. And she was staring back. I'm not entirely sure on this last one but I think you could get rid of "that". I think you could also change "that" to "actually" but like I said before, I don't know for sure.
Sorry if I sound like a strict grammar teacher. I'm not telling you this just to make you feel bad, I just thought you should know. ~please don't be mad...umm if that's ok with you.
I haven't really been a proof reader before but if you want some extra help then I'd be willing.
Yay new chapter! I think I see where your headed tho. If Vinyl keeps drinking like this, that XS diapee isnt gonna last very long is it? And I doubt that club has a potty anywhere Cant wait for more
Yeah, I'd love to help. I'm not exactly sure if I'm supposed to be able to edit or how being a proof reader works since I've never done it before (on this website) but just PM me or something and I'll help out. If you use google docs or something similar then I shouldn't have any problems figuring out what to do.
8730372 Berry's one of those ponies who I'd love to see diapered more often. Sadly I've never been satisfied with any diaper fic I've tried to write starring her. Luckily I managed to sneak her into this one once I thought of a way to.
As for your shipping idea, I won't be giving out any spoilers. You'll just have to stick around a few more chapters to find out if you're right or not.
Berry probably needs to be double diapered with how much she drinks. I get the feeling Vinyl's gonna be just as soaked by the end of the night at the rate she's currently drinking.
I think you did a good job at easing Vinyl into ABDL theme and realistically show the reaction that you would expect from someone that isn't into that stuff in the first place and find good arguments in trying putting up with it for some more. I like the the bottled beer part as a way to show that she has to overcome her own preconceptions on the ABDL in her mind and having her admit that it isn't so bad. Good job on that.
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Oh she just might.
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Thanks! Hopefully you'll like the rest of Vinyl's foray into the ABDL world, too.
I must say, the cover art is very well-made. Do you know who made it?
I really have wondered why they never came up with some kind of "adult" "manly" version of nipples for beer and alcohol. The closest I have seen to this idea was from an episode of the Drew Carey show. Also I wonder what kind of diaper the security ponies wear? I have done some security jobs where I was at a door and ID'ed people. I legit wish diapers were a common thing with security.
Loving the direction this is taking! Poofed up Vinyl is among my favorite diapered pones.
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Fillyscoots42 made it a while back. I completely spaced on sourcing the image earlier, but it has a working link now that'll take you to the full thing.
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The bouncer's for this club wear medium sized diapers, like Berry. I kinda wanted to have a scene with them early on to show they do their jobs from the comfort of a baby bouncer too (mostly cause I thought bouncers in bouncers would be funny) but never did.
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I love poofy Vinyl too. Hopefully I can diaper her up in a few more stories after this one too.
I love this story so much that I literally come back every day to see if there is an update. I usually hate reading in general but you my friend have caused me to do something I usually hate doing. If only schools could make me feel the same way.
Btw, I saw a few errors so I thought I'd let you know.
The legion of diapered dancers who looked like they were at least trying to imitate the Countess’ moves before gave up when the next song came on.
I think it's supposed to say "before giving up".
Fine! I feel guilty alright? She bit her lips, thoughts bleeding into her actions. It was a crappy thing to do, I admit it. That’s one me.
I think that's supposed to be "That's on me".
She sighed. She shuffled her feet and looked out into the throng of dancing ponies.
That should be "hooves" since this has ponies in it and not humans.
Funny that, because now Vinyl was staring at the one mare in a position to do so. And she was staring back.
I'm not entirely sure on this last one but I think you could get rid of "that". I think you could also change "that" to "actually" but like I said before, I don't know for sure.
Sorry if I sound like a strict grammar teacher. I'm not telling you this just to make you feel bad, I just thought you should know. ~please don't be mad...umm if that's ok with you.
I haven't really been a proof reader before but if you want some extra help then I'd be willing.
Anyways, keep up the great work!
Yay new chapter! I think I see where your headed tho. If Vinyl keeps drinking like this, that XS diapee isnt gonna last very long is it? And I doubt that club has a potty anywhere Cant wait for more
Poofy Vinyl for the win. I'm really enjoying this story, it's really fun. I'm really looking forward to more.
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Thanks for catching those errors for me. If you are down to help with future chapters, I'd definitely appreciate it.
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Let's just say Vinyl better not think she can get away with holding it all night.
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Glad to hear it, man. Hope you like the next couple of chapters just as much!
Yeah, I'd love to help.
I'm not exactly sure if I'm supposed to be able to edit or how being a proof reader works since I've never done it before (on this website) but just PM me or something and I'll help out. If you use google docs or something similar then I shouldn't have any problems figuring out what to do.
Hope to hear from you soon!
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Cool, once the next chapter's ready I'll send you a gdocs link. Sound good?
Yeah that sounds good.
Fantastic chapter!
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Glad you enjoyed it!
good job vinyl for using a foal bottle now try using your diaper them the party can really get fun for you
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I can help proof read as well, got experience in it even!
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Awesome! Thank you.
If this turns into a Vinyl X Berry ship its going to be super interesting, there really aren't enough Berry stories especially in the ABDL scene!
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Berry's one of those ponies who I'd love to see diapered more often. Sadly I've never been satisfied with any diaper fic I've tried to write starring her. Luckily I managed to sneak her into this one once I thought of a way to.
As for your shipping idea, I won't be giving out any spoilers. You'll just have to stick around a few more chapters to find out if you're right or not.