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A Torn-Up Note


We were wrong about it all. The end is never the end and they showed us that.

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Ink Blot had returned to her old drawing grounds to meet a friend and fix a wrong. However, when she arrives, she finds the place covered in ink and her friend nowhere to be found. Not only that, but all this talk about an ink machine and appeasing 'the gods' have put her on edge. Now she must race against a creature of her past to find out what has happened over the past Twenty years she's been gone and why 'the creator lied to us.'

This is a crossover story with 'Bendy and The Ink Machine.' It would be best that, before you read, you go check that out to get an understanding of where I'm coming from. :twilightsmile:

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Comments ( 20 )

A bendy and the ink machine crossover? This should be interesting.

Again, it was fun to edit.... I might check the game out myself!

8111107 You got the reference! :pinkiehappy:
DAGames is a cool person! :twilightsmile:

I was wondering when someone would make a Bendy and the Ink Machine Crossover

Before I decide to read this or not, I wonder only if it is simply an obligatory pony character reliving the events of the game as seen, or if it's something more than that.

Hi! I'm Falconwolf1116! I'm the very first Bendy and the Ink Machine crossover writer. I absolutely love the story so far! Keep up the good work!

8115673 Is it bad to say that I enjoyed TheLivingTombstone remix of that song better? Cus I did...

8115739
Ich preferred ze original because it vas more fitting to ze setting, but it's just my opinion :twilightsmile:

8115768 You can have your own opinion, I don't mind....

8111554 I made one first. But this one I have to admit has way better detail. Keep up the good work Raven!

Before I read this, what is the Gore, Horror and Dark tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?

8128472 you just love asking that lol:rainbowlaugh:

8129219 it's because I want to know

8129732 well did you find your answer, was it bad hmmmm

Hmm... the plot is still same as that of the game, but I have to say, you describe really nicely and with eye for detail. Also, the thoughts of Ink gave it a nice horrory feeling :pinkiesmile:

Also, I know you were attempting to mimic the sepia colour with the letter, but the result is quite hard on eyes and not all that great to read against the white background. Besides that, the only issues I noticed were a recurring little bits of punctuation and capitalization problems with direct speech, as well as some tense inconsistency. You slip into present at times, just like here:

She said to herself, while she swings at the planks again.

All should be in past.

Yesh, this was a fun and scary read. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Cool:pinkiecrazy:
Then we will have dinky(Rainbow Dash) being boris. I like Boris

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