For years there has been an uneasy peace between the Human Kingdoms and the other nations of Equis, The humans being focoused on themselves due to thier many wars between eachother. But when one day they unite and turn thier might to claim their own.
I would continue reading, but the grammar is turning me off...(freaking grammar nazi brain) so,yeah, what you got going here was kinda cool, i'll probably read it again if i see it took off for more than 10 chaps, bye!
You should have wrote the speeches it would have gave this chapter the more impact and the story as whole more depth to it. I mean come on give us a reason to why we should care about these humans and why should we support their cause.
No one can write a good speech. The best speeches that people tend to remember the most are ones that are not planned and written out, but spoken from the heart and soul. A great example would be the ‘I Have A Dream’ speech. He may have a piece of paper to help him, but I don’t think it was completely written until the night before.
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Interesting, Interesting, Interesting.
FUCK YEAH!!!
For humanity!!!!!!!!!!!
*shoots tracking-dart* Keep going, this has my attention.
Can you do more please
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Writers block plus having 2 stories I want to continue writing is a biiiiitch
I would continue reading, but the grammar is turning me off...(freaking grammar nazi brain)
so,yeah, what you got going here was kinda cool, i'll probably read it again if i see it took off for more than 10 chaps, bye!
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Thanks for the feedback, yeah I know my grammar is terrible
You should have wrote the speeches it would have gave this chapter the more impact and the story as whole more depth to it. I mean come on give us a reason to why we should care about these humans and why should we support their cause.
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I would have if I could write a good speech.
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No one can write a good speech. The best speeches that people tend to remember the most are ones that are not planned and written out, but spoken from the heart and soul. A great example would be the ‘I Have A Dream’ speech. He may have a piece of paper to help him, but I don’t think it was completely written until the night before.