Fellow Railfan Brony who thinks characters like Spike and Flash Sentry need more love.
With the Canterlot High Christmas Party coming soon, everyone's buzzing with excitement... except one. Poor Flash Sentry has lost his Christmas Spirit and prefers to avoid his friends on the holidays. Will a Christmas Miracle make him change his mind and show him the importance of Christmas and Friendship?
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I'm sorry, but I had to stop reading this.
The dialogue was WAY too weird. 
Please decide on a speech pattern. I can't take Flash seriously when he's speaking in Dickensian English. 
Dude, it's March.
Also, where did Lyra come from? You never mentioned she was here until she spoke.
It took 2 guys to write this and neither of thought of that?
7996034 I was too lazy to upload it sooner.
7995899 Everyone's always making up excuses to complain...
7996065
I agree with 7995899 in that Flash's dialogue is poorly worded. In some cases, he goes into a cross between old English and Bible-like English for no reason. Word choice pulled me right out of this one. Also, it took two people to write this?
Proofread aloud before you post.
EDIT: Who the heck is Class's?
7996264 Okay then. I just felt like they were making up excuses to hate the story just because it had Flash in it.
7995899 I changed some of Flash's words. You can give it another chance if you want. I just assumed you didn't like it just because it featured Flash Sentry.
7996625 Are you kidding me?
If Flash wasn't a fictional character, I'd want to be his best friend. 
7996677 Okay then. Sorry if I was snappy.
Okay. Definitely better than the last time I read it. Definitely worth a like. The parts that you left in Dickensian English are still incredibly weird and difficult to take seriously, but they're not as cringe-y as before. By the way, who are Flash's other siblings? Did his mom remarry? I don't know how he can have four younger siblings without his mom remarrying.
Sorry, but when the father's spirit steps on stage Flash sounds like Ebenezer Scrooge, or rather Flash trying to play 'Ebenezer Scrooge', not like Flash at all until the end. Now if this was a stage play of Flash playing Ebenezer Scrooge, the dialogue would work better.
7997782 I think the other siblings are OC's from another author. They're siblings in that person's fics as well.
7996677 you really can't blame him for thinking that. A lot of people just hate him so it will happen where we think it's the character.
Well this was an interesting fanfic. It had a lot of hiccups everyone's already pointed out the dialog, but parts toward the end were charming and added a certain level of cheese that was enjoyable. Although at the start it was annoying.
Adding Flashlight is always a plus.
Anyways, this was an enjoyable little story.
8026049 Thank you very much.
I can't believe it's April and I am reading a Christmas fic.
8066023 Such as life.