After graduating first in his class at a hair styling academy, Zephyr Breeze is more confident than ever that he can win over Rainbow Dash. Can her human friend help her find a solution to get the message across to the stubborn stallion?
8234773 oh good, i was starting to think it had dissapeared from my favorites list completely. Still loving it mobius.
I only have 1 gripe with this chapter (and the original green) and its simply that; the resolution here with zephyr feels a little bit 'too easy' you know? without going into spoilers for the people who havent read it, it just seems that more could have been done with Zephyr all together, unlike everything else in his life he doesnt seem the type to give up easily when it comes to RD, if how he pestered her in Flutter Brutter is anything to go by, he's been at this a while.
I want to say this first. Some of you are way to critical. There are some real bad stories, bad story ideas, and all around bad writing on Fimfuction. However this is not one of them. Sure it’s not Romeo and Juliet or anything but it is a cute, feel good romance, and there is nothing wrong with that. Many of these writers are posting stories here for their own passion they definitely are not making any money off it. Man maybe I’m just getting old and just like to enjoy things for what they are, but serious some of you need to learn to just try and enjoy life. You really have to be some kind of miserable to let a couple miss speeled words in a free to read online story to tweak your tail.
Now I can’t even remember what I was going to say about the story. Anyways I like what your doing I hope you don’t let anyone get you down.
8234725 That's a rather silly reason to skip a fic. And it probably took you longer to write that comment than it would have taken to read a bit further to see if it actually reflected the entirety or was just a minor occurrence.
9736823 Yeah, I think he's forgotten that it takes two to tango. It's not just her, it's him as well.
I know the feelings of inadequacy, they're a dear friend, but at some point you just go with it - "this is happening". No point in backing out, especially not from Lady Loyalty. Not after what happened. What's the point of leaving two broken hearts. She wants it, you want it... I'd understand if one of 'em decided it was a mistake, but... as it is? Fuck it, let's go.
But there's a reason you want to be as close as possible during the early stages of a relationship - it's because it's your natural defense against thoughts like these.
*your
*your
*your
I think that's all of them.
Yeah, I'm gonna pass. Two spelling mistakes in the first paragraph of the description is not encouraging.
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Thanks, I really need to take more time re reading or find an editor.
8234725
Never noticed those. Fixed.
8234773
Also, as for the description:
Rainbow should not be capitalized. You're not actually saying her name there, after all. You're just describing her hair color.
I got a bad feeling that if anon goes through with
Breaking up with RD very bad things will happen mostly to him/reputation
8234725
your lose.
8234773
oh good, i was starting to think it had dissapeared from my favorites list completely. Still loving it mobius.
I only have 1 gripe with this chapter (and the original green) and its simply that; the resolution here with zephyr feels a little bit 'too easy' you know? without going into spoilers for the people who havent read it, it just seems that more could have been done with Zephyr all together, unlike everything else in his life he doesnt seem the type to give up easily when it comes to RD, if how he pestered her in Flutter Brutter is anything to go by, he's been at this a while.
Loving it, keep up the excellent work!
I love the story can't wait to read more this is my most favorite story yet!
I want to say this first. Some of you are way to critical. There are some real bad stories, bad story ideas, and all around bad writing on Fimfuction. However this is not one of them. Sure it’s not Romeo and Juliet or anything but it is a cute, feel good romance, and there is nothing wrong with that. Many of these writers are posting stories here for their own passion they definitely are not making any money off it. Man maybe I’m just getting old and just like to enjoy things for what they are, but serious some of you need to learn to just try and enjoy life. You really have to be some kind of miserable to let a couple miss speeled words in a free to read online story to tweak your tail.
Now I can’t even remember what I was going to say about the story. Anyways I like what your doing I hope you don’t let anyone get you down.
8234725
That's a rather silly reason to skip a fic. And it probably took you longer to write that comment than it would have taken to read a bit further to see if it actually reflected the entirety or was just a minor occurrence.
8762920
Surprise surprise, people are mostly shit.
I think hes forgetting the one VERY important thing. She wanted HIM
9736823
Yeah, I think he's forgotten that it takes two to tango. It's not just her, it's him as well.
I know the feelings of inadequacy, they're a dear friend, but at some point you just go with it - "this is happening". No point in backing out, especially not from Lady Loyalty. Not after what happened. What's the point of leaving two broken hearts. She wants it, you want it... I'd understand if one of 'em decided it was a mistake, but... as it is? Fuck it, let's go.
But there's a reason you want to be as close as possible during the early stages of a relationship - it's because it's your natural defense against thoughts like these.