Feather Duster, weeks after acquiescing to Luna's advances, now must teach Luna how love has changed over the millennium, and how one shows it. Although behind closed doors, the line between 'teacher' and 'lover' is blurred... to a pleasant degree.
The pussy hole looked tight, almost like a moist vice, and Feather momentarily wondered if any stallion ever had the gall to have sex with the princess. Was princess Luna a virgin in this regard? Feather pushed the question back. It would be a question for another time.
8851671 Glad to know! It's a little easy admittedly to do the whole 'fish out of water' style of humor for her character, but I think it just works with how I've written her. Anywho, I hope you're enjoying it.
8851801 That makes me glad to hear. I'm happy to give it out too. Personally, I don't think chapter 2 is as good as 1, but you might it enjoy it all the same. Hope to see you back soon for its eventual release.
You've done a wonderful job, I can't get enough! Please continue this story, I really wanna see where it goes. Maybe Celestia will have a change of heart and join them?
8857098 I'm glad you're enjoying this, that makes me happier and encourages me to work even harder However, I am sorry to disappoint but Celestia won't be involved intimately in their relationship, not that I am opposed to the idea of polyandry, but it goes against the sort of love that Luna holds for Feather. Apologies.
Wonderful. Really looking forward to the date, as it was something I've been hoping for. The story seems to be going somewhere, as opposed to it just being thin packaging for clop -- that's also assuming Celestia and the bullies will have some relevance later. Although, at the same time, I don't feel like Luna has all that much to learn, really. To me, she's more... 'different,' rather than plain doing it 'wrong,' so I wonder how much further you can pull the theme. Feather could also learn a lot from Luna, me thinks.
I do think the story could do with another good look by an editor (if you care for perfection, that is), as I've spotted numerous small errors. This was probably the most unique one, in that it wasn't a typo or grammar related.
Whilst Luna excelled in their occasional intercourse, this is where she believed the monarch excelled.
8859490 You kind of hit the nail on the head there. Who said the title is referring strictly to just Luna Although it doesn't truly get reinforced until only chapter 3. As for the story
going somewhere
, I tried to reign in how ambitious I initially wanted the fic to be. I did consider wanting to delve into making it something deeper, but - and I am sorry to disappoint - it doesn't become something grand or epic, except maybe a strong theme of selflessness towards the end. I am intending for this to be my longest fic to date, and I didn't want to wish screwing it up by fumbling a profoundity. Also, thank you for pointing out that error to me. I loathe not seeing simple mistakes like that. I rectified prior to posting this comment. I should really go over it multiple times before posting, I apologize. For spelling, it could be my UK spelling vs your assumed US spellings? And grammar is something I really need to get better at.
8859718 Nah, I'm certainly not expecting some grand epic, so I'm not disappointed. Just showing the characters growing is already ambitious and satisfying enough for me in a clop-centric story like this, which is still 'going somewhere.' It's a small thing, yes, but when you're also going about it in a very entertaining way like this, there's nothing more I can ask of it.
And no, I tend to default to UK spelling as well (although as a foreign speaker I'm not aware of all the differences and get them mixed up sometimes, and I also don't know anything about archaic English, so I can't tell what's right or wrong there). Just talking about some minor typo's here and there that should be easy enough to fish out.
8857152 That's alright, It's your story and it should flow the way you want it to. Not every story with clop has to end up at an orgy. I actually like the idea of an exclusive love story, it's really sweet and makes for fantastic late night relaxing reading. You're doing great and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Inb4 strap-on play later.
Holy shit, this is exactly why it's so scary to write something with the night princess
Can't wait to see more
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Glad to know! It's a little easy admittedly to do the whole 'fish out of water' style of humor for her character, but I think it just works with how I've written her. Anywho, I hope you're enjoying it.
8851801
That makes me glad to hear. I'm happy to give it out too. Personally, I don't think chapter 2 is as good as 1, but you might it enjoy it all the same. Hope to see you back soon for its eventual release.
You've done a wonderful job, I can't get enough! Please continue this story, I really wanna see where it goes. Maybe Celestia will have a change of heart and join them?
8857098
I'm glad you're enjoying this, that makes me happier and encourages me to work even harder However, I am sorry to disappoint but Celestia won't be involved intimately in their relationship, not that I am opposed to the idea of polyandry, but it goes against the sort of love that Luna holds for Feather. Apologies.
Wonderful. Really looking forward to the date, as it was something I've been hoping for. The story seems to be going somewhere, as opposed to it just being thin packaging for clop -- that's also assuming Celestia and the bullies will have some relevance later. Although, at the same time, I don't feel like Luna has all that much to learn, really. To me, she's more... 'different,' rather than plain doing it 'wrong,' so I wonder how much further you can pull the theme. Feather could also learn a lot from Luna, me thinks.
I do think the story could do with another good look by an editor (if you care for perfection, that is), as I've spotted numerous small errors. This was probably the most unique one, in that it wasn't a typo or grammar related.
8859490
You kind of hit the nail on the head there. Who said the title is referring strictly to just Luna Although it doesn't truly get reinforced until only chapter 3. As for the story
, I tried to reign in how ambitious I initially wanted the fic to be. I did consider wanting to delve into making it something deeper, but - and I am sorry to disappoint - it doesn't become something grand or epic, except maybe a strong theme of selflessness towards the end. I am intending for this to be my longest fic to date, and I didn't want to wish screwing it up by fumbling a profoundity. Also, thank you for pointing out that error to me. I loathe not seeing simple mistakes like that. I rectified prior to posting this comment. I should really go over it multiple times before posting, I apologize. For spelling, it could be my UK spelling vs your assumed US spellings? And grammar is something I really need to get better at.
8859718
Nah, I'm certainly not expecting some grand epic, so I'm not disappointed. Just showing the characters growing is already ambitious and satisfying enough for me in a clop-centric story like this, which is still 'going somewhere.' It's a small thing, yes, but when you're also going about it in a very entertaining way like this, there's nothing more I can ask of it.
And no, I tend to default to UK spelling as well (although as a foreign speaker I'm not aware of all the differences and get them mixed up sometimes, and I also don't know anything about archaic English, so I can't tell what's right or wrong there). Just talking about some minor typo's here and there that should be easy enough to fish out.
8857152
That's alright, It's your story and it should flow the way you want it to. Not every story with clop has to end up at an orgy. I actually like the idea of an exclusive love story, it's really sweet and makes for fantastic late night relaxing reading. You're doing great and I can't wait for the next chapter!
This has gone past being just a sexy and funny work to something genuinely enticing!
Finally found some time to read this. Not being quite the artful wordsmith Luna is, I'll just say this story makes me very happy.