After becoming a Princess, Twilight discovered a forgotten spell that was left uncompleted. She completed it and it had unforeseen consequences, now six months later most of the mares have disappeared including all the princesses.
good concepts, and if the prose and pacing got a good tweak it would be much more engaging. Seeing the formula; bad stuff in forest+ writer forces character into bad forest= very stale. There's little to no hook to keep me reading. I know each character is going into the forest, and each is going to be changed.
7992304 now we move on to chapters focusing on each of the three corruptions Succubi ponies, Vampire Ponies, and the Timber Ponies. Ill write up a blog with info about each one ASAP and I'll also post around how long it will take before the next release.
I was interested in reading this until I noticed that each "paragraph" in the description is one sentence... They're also missing a lot of commas and are least one spot that should have a period just doesn't.
Yet it had changed everything over the next six months Mares all around Equestria disappeared it begun with...
Mares is even capitalized, signifying a period.
I'm sorry, but if the description is this bad, I'm not sure I want to read the actual story.
7992222 yes, they do so far all take place in the forest all drawn their and originally I had them all going their however, and you have also enforced this, I'm currently thinking of a new place for them to be corrupted, besides Fluttershy's group in the Crystal Empire the rest are in the Everfree Forest.
And of course it would be boring to solely focus in one area at a time, I always planned that latter on some ( if not all ) would move away form the setting's of the Prologue. Please be patience as the story moves forward slightly faster as we catch up with the current time.
After all this all took place Six months ago. (Prologue wise.)
good concepts, and if the prose and pacing got a good tweak it would be much more engaging. Seeing the formula; bad stuff in forest+ writer forces character into bad forest= very stale. There's little to no hook to keep me reading. I know each character is going into the forest, and each is going to be changed.
So what happen now?
Now Its time for a new era to begin.
It begins!
Who sky stinger?
7992351 Sky Stinger is the male Pegasus form season six episode Top Bolt who's best friends with Vapor Trail.
7992304 now we move on to chapters focusing on each of the three corruptions Succubi ponies, Vampire Ponies, and the Timber Ponies. Ill write up a blog with info about each one ASAP and I'll also post around how long it will take before the next release.
7992367 ok
I was interested in reading this until I noticed that each "paragraph" in the description is one sentence... They're also missing a lot of commas and are least one spot that should have a period just doesn't.
Mares is even capitalized, signifying a period.
I'm sorry, but if the description is this bad, I'm not sure I want to read the actual story.
7992222 yes, they do so far all take place in the forest all drawn their and originally I had them all going their however, and you have also enforced this, I'm currently thinking of a new place for them to be corrupted, besides Fluttershy's group in the Crystal Empire the rest are in the Everfree Forest.
And of course it would be boring to solely focus in one area at a time, I always planned that latter on some ( if not all ) would move away form the setting's of the Prologue. Please be patience as the story moves forward slightly faster as we catch up with the current time.
After all this all took place Six months ago. (Prologue wise.)
7992394 thank you for the valuable experience Im relatively new to writing, this is all good experience and lessons to be learned.
I'll fix asap.
7992380 ok and what will happen when succubus twilight succubus rarity succubus luna vampire fluttershy vampire rainbow vampire chrysalis vampire cadence weretimberwolf applejack weretimberwolf pinkie weretimberwolf celestia weretimberwolf bon bon/sweetie weretimberwolf lyra meets eachother?
7992417 we'll we will see, that's sort of a plot point so I don't want to hint or give it away.
We'll besides the fact that its a plot point other then that wait and see.
7992419 ok