Flash Sentry is not the most attentive student in Canterlot High. He is not the smartest or the fastest or the most assertive. He is not a lot of things, but he does try to be a good boyfriend, and an even more normal teenager.
But one fateful day he becomes the only person on Earth to have a talking pony in his closet. A pony only he can see. A pony that is incredibly, stupendously annoying.
The incredibly dangerous, stupendously powerful things that followed him to Flash's world, though... those are another matter entirely.
Chapters (7)
Excuse me I do believe you need the appropriate music:
WELP
I'm hooked.
Ooh, ponidox story. Color me intrigued. I especially like your portrayal of pre-reform Sunset.
*haven't read it, just going by the title*
Actually he is, isn't he?
Because... In the first Equestria Girls if he didn't get proof that Twilight was innocent, then Sunset Shimmer would have gotten the crown with the Element of Harmony inside it
And then using her new dark powers, would have taken over both worlds
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Is he like the only one who can see himself?
I like Bitchset Shimmer. The way she micromanage Flash just shines a light on how pathetic he is.
Let the Bradical Adventures begin!
I don't know what this is, but it amuses me. Have a +1
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I'm not sure what it is, but I think I liked it and I wan't to read more of it.
Is it bad doctor?
The sparkle...
All rigth, that was fun, carry on please!
Ps: I think you qualify for a comedy tag, why not include it at this point?
Alright...
Ya got me.
Watching this.
--Spade
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Of course! Thank you for reminding me.
Everyone, you should click that video whenever you start reading a new chapter and pretend a super-dramatic "LAST TIME IN THE LIFE OF FLASH SENTRY" segment plays.
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I tend to only include tags if the story in general is centered around a particular theme. I never considered this story a comedy, in that the whole point of it is wackiness on par with, say, my Button Mash fic, but I see where you're coming from. I may go ahead and add it.
Pony Flash is now 'Brad' I love it.
Also Pop Fly is a cool name for that baseball colt. Home Base makes it sound like he's some kind of school yard pimp. Pop Fly has much more personality to it.
Omg hai Remy. Lol you'd think if a rat is smart enough to talk to a human then a rat should be smart enough to not fall for the obvious cartoon rat trap.
And this just went from a blend of funny and sad to potentially apocalyptic. If I weren't already interested, I certainly would be now. Eagerly looking forward to more.
Ok, I was not expecting the story to take a turn like this, but I'm certainly not complaining that it did. Like Fan up there, I was in this for the sad humor, but shit just got real. I'm looking forward to the rest of this story even more now.
God damn it Brad!
Huh. Not sure what this could be, really. I can't really picture the sirens just casually dismembering animals for kicks, or even really any monster in MLP. Maybe a timberwolf that somehow managed to avoid people?
Depending on how much bloody murder of animals keeps happening, this story may need a dark tag added to it.
I didn't know exactly what to expect going into this story, but I really love the direction you're taking it. I particularly enjoy the balance you're striking with Flash, one that many stories try and fail to achieve. Many times, the main character is either, on one hand, "already mostly heroic and/or awesome" to begin with, with maybe just a few token flaws to have development on, or else on the other hand "kind of unlikable and annoying to begin with" which can be a trudge to read through until they start being more likable.
But I really like how you've balanced Flash's character here. On one hand, he's very much "not a hero yet" with a lot of clear flaws and foibles and he's really kind of a doofus. But at the same time, you've really managed to make him come across as extremely likeable despite that, and I'm really looking forward to watching his character grow as he faces the in-way-over-his-head situation that you've thrown him into.
Sunset is also excellently written. She came across as a little bit more one-note at first, but that only helped to set up the deeper look even better. The scenes with the statue and the rain really got me in the feels. You really capture both how nasty she can be, and also the strong, compelling, touching parts of her character that are in many ways the flip side to that. I'm waiting with baited breath to see what direction you take them both, in this version of what happens to them.
The comedy was great too, and "Brad" was hilarious. I particularly liked how you tied it all together with his reaction to the revelation of the darker aspects right at the end. This is some really high-quality stuff, and I can't wait to read more in how this all turns out! Thanks very much for sharing it with us!
"Oops? What do you mean, oops? And I better get an answer, or we're taking a little trip to the bathroom and we'll see if you're a seapony."
"A seapony? I'm a pegasus. I have wings."
"Yeah, but we're only going to find out for certain if I hold you underwater. Or you talk."
No need to be jealous, Shim-Shim.
This is a very interesting story so far and I really like the relationship between Flash and Brad. the conversation between Flash and the rat. I can't wait to see the next chapter of this story.
What did you let escape, Brad?
Only two chapters so far, but this has been ... odd.
Also, is there a reason for the Human tag? Equestria Girls humans aren't supposed to get the Human tag.
This seems very eighties in the way it mixes whimsicality with brutality, comedy with tragedy, with a decidedly large dose of unhealthy relationships and unrealistically-deep teenage pocketbooks. Like some sort of young adult urban fantasy novel series, or a lost Roald Dahl story.
It's weird and ponderous and leaves me with all sorts of strange new emotions.
I must like it.
And just when I was telling myself "Dang! This one turned to be another of them dead fic...", you've got a great sense of timing!
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You're going to hate me later then. >.>
Poor Flash needs a real friend. Will Scootaloo be that friend? Lets hope so. Near the end Flash seems so pitiful and yet defiant of his current circumstance of being "the friendless nobody who is only popular through the tenuous strings of his girlfriend"
8163279 Meh, I don't hate for so few.
On the other hand, I migth be very disapointed by you.
We should frame this and hang it on a wall for posterity.
I thought this story is dead but not anymore!
Words can not express how much I love this story. The way you characterize Flash and Brad is just fantastic, especially the amount of depth you give them. I'm super excited to see where you go with this.
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I'm actually wondering if Flash will end up meeting the human Elements, or at least a few of them. If the key to being able to deal with all this is the Sparkle, that spark of magic that so few people seem to have, they're right at the top of my list for humans that might have it. And friendship kind of is their thing.
I think Flash is in over his head. And I don't trust Brad at all.
Good for Flash. He is a good person at heart—just look at Brad—and now he's starting to make good choices. Let's just hope he gets through his first paranormal investigation with minimal damage. Especially since odds are the Kindly One has targetted his girlfriend. It's not like there are many other extraplanar grudge-makers in the area... though the sirens are unaccounted for. Still, Sunset is the simpler solution.
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Right now, they aren't quite so friendly, at least not with each other. It remains to be seen if being divided and conquered will have an impact on their Sparkle levels.
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There's always the possibility of Flash preempting Twilight's thing in this world. Brad's presence is changing him is ways he never did in canon, so who knows? He is the savior of the universe and all that. But now I'm curious to see if Sunset's little games are dimming the Sparkle in the people she's victimizing. That would certainly be an interesting twist.
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I mean, considering they've survived for so many centuries in the bodies of teenage girls on a hostile and dangerous planet, I assume the Sirens can take care of themselves.
This is getting ridiculous, possibly epic too. Please carry on.
Pidgeon Pony. (snerk!)
I'm in love with this story so much. Equestria is described as such a silly (yet strangely dangerous) place by Brad. I can't help but wonder if Flash Sentry will ever make the trip there, to sort of complete the cycle since Brad came to him thus far. All the magical animals only make it much weirder. The world Flash Sentry lives in can be just as magical, if one only has the right mindset and Sparkle to notice everything. And I do wonder if Flash Sentry really is unique in this regard, or if it's because Brad was the one who came.
This story is really fantastic. As Canary mentioned, I adore the picture you've painted of Equestria, and the layers you've added to the human world are amazing. I really wish I could upvote this story more than once.
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Careful, you don't want to end up in Camp Compassion.
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I was listening to this when reading this chapter. How apropos.
(Brad Sucks - Making Me Nervous)
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So, would this be considered blackface levels of offensive to Equestrians?
Flash is the next Willard?
Later that day, Flash went home and burned Pop Fly's copies of Resident Evil and Outlast video games
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Way more offensive. It would be like suggesting a pony who is currently singing their heart out in public secretly rehearsed!
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Rehearsed? Rehearsed?! That was just uncalled for! That's fighting words where I come from!
8657826 Them's Dance-Off Words!
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A proper Battle of the Bands there, possibly escalating into a full-blown Musical. Things could really spiral out of control if the authorities do not restore order promptly and then we could be facing a city-wide Opera!
The Rat Pact did well, but there's only so much Ocean's Eleven Hundred can do when you have to face down a sadistic embodiment of cruelty and malice. And also one of the Furies.
Eagerly looking forward to more. Especially since it's unclear if Alecto has any caise to harm either Flash. (Well, other than "I feel like it.")
Jennybeans is a byotch. Like all cats.