A Portal to Equestria

by abbiegail200

How it Started

Author's Note:

Sooo this was just an idea I had (*ahem* while taking a shower) and I hadnt made an account yet. So I was like, HEY! I should post this on FIMFiction! so when i went to bed, i started typing this on my phones notes. my mom doesnt have internet. :T THEN i made an account at school AND HERE YA GO :D

"Is it done yet?"

Autumn was in the kitchen making breakfast while Finn was waiting, impatiently, in the living room.

"Um, no! I think you're more impatient than me. Hehe!"

"Uuuugh!"

Footsteps came from the ladder. "What's all that noise?" Jake said groggily.

"Good morning to you, too, Jake." Finn said.

"Soo... Autumn. What's for breakfast?" asked Jake.

"It's a surprise," Autumn said with a grin. "You'll have to wait."

Jake blew a raspberry at her. "Fine."

All of a sudden, a big portal appeared in the living room.

"Hey, Autumn?" Finn called.

"Yeah?" said Autumn, still in the kitchen.

"You might want to get in here."

Autumn put down the pan and walked into the living room. "What is i- oh."

"What is that?" asked a very confused Jake.

"That is a portal. To one of my dimensions. It's pink, so most likely...." She took a deep breath. "Equestria."

"But why is it here? I thought the only portal-opener-thingy was at your house," said Finn.

"It is. So why is it here? The only way that that can happen is if either someone from the other dimension opened it with another opener, or...
someone touched mine... DAD! No, no, no, no, no! Ugh! Listen, I gotta... go?"

There was a strong wind going into the portal, and it was getting stronger.

"I think it's too late for tha-AAAAH!!!" Finn said, before getting sucked into the portal.

"Crud apples! Jake, you stay here. I'll be back soon," said Autumn.

"Uuh, ok?" said a still confused Jake.

Autumn jumped into the portal just as it was closing.

Comments

[clarence112]

my mom doesnt have internet. :T

w8 wut how

"Is it done yet?"

Pretty good opening.

That is a portal. To one of my dimensions.

That's... really unexpected. The explanation that comes in the next line helps a little, but this is still a little jarring.

Overall pretty good for your fist chapter of your first story. it's a little short, but that's ok. /5