Well it's not bad but it's really generic and well.. it reads like an FFA script.

*Sees the mention of Sephiroth.*

Dawning realization

While I now hate you with a burning passion even Satan would be scared of. I'll abate it to focus on your fic. It's...not bad, but take out the pictures, describe WHAT THE FUCK is happening because I for one, don't know about FFA three thousand and nine and YOU as an author explain to peons like me.

Seen the concept before, but that doesn't change a thing. Great writing, maybe needs a bit more description and leave out the pics (though I don't hate the pics). I love the FFVII universe and anything surrounding it is just a bonus. And did I mention.

867108 thanks. I could use a co-author, if you're interested. I've used this line before but that makes it no less true to me: I'm not much of a writer, but I still write, because I enjoy it, even if what I write seems like, or is, shit. I don't do it to gain approval.

oh dear lord no.

FF, and Ponies...there are just some things that shouldn't be crossed..unless written well. Also nothing over 7.

867011 Even I dont know a single fuck that's going on, and I played the FF games, for better or for worse. (8 and up KILLS the series, BTW...)

this only proves that many people cant write for beans. Like this guy.

867136 I would consider doing such, but I do not know your characters and do not wish to ruin your story. Thanks for the offer, though.

867189 No worries. If you change your mind, PM me, and I'll give you a brief rundown on the two of them.

I happen to be a big fan of Final Fantasy but first off who in the world are these two! OCs as SOLDIER 1st class that is next to unforgivable but the names make it too much I mean who names their kid Die? Next too much flashback and a daydream in a flashback needs pro skills to write. Unique mataria no just no. Finally certain things seem like they have been too much while at the same time they are not polished.

Over all not interested

One more thing please go through VII from before crisis to derg of errr..... Avendent Children complete

867506 this is as horrible at FF13.

867527 13 had good characters but had a downer plot and poor battle system.

Edit In my eyes 9,10,and 12 were good but in varing ways 9 was a lighter and more idealistic from 7 and 8, 10 was great in gameplay and story voice acting... not so much 12 had the best plot except maybe 4 or 6 the change to realtime fighting however was the worst possible thing.

867581 no.

downer plot? Dont just about ALL of them from 7 and up already have that? Why yes, it gets OLD REAL QUICK.

okay, no. you are not a Final fantasy fan, you're a Narrow Hallway simulator fan. that's what the games were, there was NOTHING to them, and it's pretty damn fucking hard to get lost in a straight line.

12? good plot? have you even PLAYED 7 and DOWN? All of them. ALL of them. Play ALL of them. THEN come talk to me about good PLOTS.

8 and UP KILLED the series. KIIIILED it.

867690
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Hey hey, woah there. 8 was pretty bad ass. 10 was k, 10-2 was fan service and everyone knows it, and 12 was decent, i like 12. (You know even though)The final boss was VEEEEEERY disappointing (and using swords when freaking guns were abundant, but they had that in the others as well); but i mean c'mon, all in all they didn't KILL the series. That's just way to(o) harsh.

867786 In a world, no, a universe filled with wonderful background stories, wonderfully colorful character, epic music, and a fuck-ton of other things, from the NES, Gameboy Games, and even the Super Nintendo, these games were literally the pinnacle of the series. But from 8 and up, they literally throw all of that away.

8 had QUITE alot of plotholes. Let's take this for instance.

So you're playing through the game, and your objective is to turn off an anti magic field...so you cant do magic.

outside of battle. How are you STILL able to do MAGIC. IN. BATTLE.

that's so fucking stupid, if it's an anti magic FIELD, you should not be able to cast magic ANYWHERE inside the field. things like this kill the believability of a game, and ruins the world little by little. also, the characters are cardboard cutout horrible personalities. I can give you quite alot of reasons as to WHY. I can also give you quite alot of other reasons why 8 killed it for many people.

I've played this, reviewed it before, and many others before me have preached about this, but nobody wakes up to realize how horrid the series from 8 and over are.

I cant think of that much to say, as a critic, other than this:
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however, this is probably because i am dead tired, even though i woke up only 3 hours ago

Also, something tells me that one of them is going to be a lunar guard, and one a solar guard, correct?

930369 you would be correct in assuming that. Still haven't decided whether or not Noctis and Die should end up in a relationship with anypony. Any opinions on whether they should or not, and if so, who?

930379
*Ahem* THOU SHALT NOT SHIP PONIES WITH HUMANS.
The ONLY exception to this rule, and i mean ONLY, should be when the humans have BECOME ponies themselves and since i dont know if they have become ponies, or stayed in their normal bodies, i have no opinion.

930418 Still human, but that's only temporary while they adapt to their new surroundings.

930444
so they WILL eventually become ponies, just not immedietly?

930472 yeah, my co-author has suggested they become pegasi, since they still have their materia, so they wouldn't need to become alicorns to use magic. Plus they still have their backpacks filled with other materia. The only question is what materia did they take with them

930479
Oh, well in that case, worry about shipping after they become ponies. On the note of what materia they should have, they would have brought at least cure/cura/curaga, maybe a few summons, some elemental ones, as their are enemies that solar and lunar based attacks wouldn't be too effective against, example: water elemental, i don't know that many different kinds or examples, as i haven't played too much final fantasy myself, want to though, the problem is i haven't got any good emulators for it. :P
There are two ways you could have their materia shown:
1) Have them go through their stuff.
2) Have them pull their shit out as they need it.
I personally would go with option 1

930581 alright then. Thanks for the advice. Hey, if you ever have more ideas and want to share them, PM me and I'll give you a link to the folder.

K, I have nothing better to do really, so i will send you any ideas i have related to this.

Calling it now, they become immortal ( it is the only blessed curse I can think of) also flashback within a flashback... Flashback-ception