A Portal of... What?

by DashCamp(IDBrony)

Part 3 - Everything Went Better Than Expected

Part 3 – Everything Went Better than Expected

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Equestria – Ponyville outskirts

“so.. Butterscrotch, you said that this place is very different from before.” Fluttershy served two cups of jasmine tea on the table. “Yes... after checking the strange thing on Everfree forest, everything seems to be, different..” he sipped the tea and continued talking,”The Prince sent us on a mission to check about a strange thing in Everfree forest.”. “Can you tell me more?” Fluttershy took a sip and then poured another cup, “Rainbow Blitz crashed into the thing and me and my other friends went into the strange thing, and then, that thing disappeared, when I got back here, everything become different.”. Butterscrotch emptied his cup in one sip, “Another cup?” Fluttershy offered with her low voice, “Oh, thanks. Everything was the same, with only one different I think.”, “What the difference?”, “it’s like everypony has swapped gender”.“Er... I just don’t know, maybe we can ask Twilight about this problem.” , “And maybe I can ask Dusk too, since me and 5 of my friends also got here together.”. They then finished their tea and trotted together to the library, in the way, Fluttershy felt something warm but also chilling on her back, a shy pony just learned something.

Equestria – Canterlot Castle

Luna was bored, she then trotted to the basement where Celestia was doing a ritual, the sound became louder. “What is Tia doing down there, it doesn’t sound like a magic ritual”, Luna tried to peek into the basement, but something black was blocking her sight. “Tia! It’s night already, what are you doing inside?” , “Wait, Luna. I.. almost.. finished.” Celestia answered with low tired voice. “Tia! What’s happening inside?” Luna knocked on the door loudly, “Wait... Luna.. Please... just... wait...” Tia almost lost her voice. “Tia! I don’t care anymore I’m coming in!” Luna then started to dispell the locking magic, from the other side, Luna could hear her sister telling her to stop, but Luna didn’t care because she was worried about her Sister. “I’m coming in”, Luna managed to break the spell, and then she opened the basement door. Luna was shocked when she saw her sister, with an alicorn colt inside the redecorated basement, “WHO ARE YOU AND WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO MY SISTER, YOU’RE GOING TO FEEL THE PAIN OF ETERNITY OF WHAT YOU HAVE DONE TO MY SISTER”, “Wait.. Luna... I can... explain.”, Tia was panting very hard, but it was a bit late that Luna has casted the spell.

Etopia – Canterlot Castle

Prince Lunar was wandering alone in the throne room, the meeting in Griffon palace took longer than he had expected, but that wasn’t what worried him. “My brother is gone and his students too, what just happened” , Lunar wanted to search for them, but his current duty limited his movement for the day. “Nirvana, come on... it’s night already”, he already asked the guard to search for the seven of them, but not a single clue was found.

Equestria – Ponyville Cloudhouse

“How did you do that? That was awesome!” Rainbow Dash asked Blitz while they both were fixing the cloud wall, “You can do it too! That was awesome”, “It is you who is awesome”, “No it’s you”, “I think it’s you”, “No, you!”. Both of them were arguing while tank was still watching with his goggles on both of his eyes, the two rainbow ponies got along very fast. *ring-ring* they heard a doorbell from the front door, “I’ll take care of that”, Dash then trotted to the front door, she was shocked when she opened the front door. “Uhm... Hi, Dash. Meet my new friend, um... Butterscrotch” ,Blitz recognized a voice, “Butterscrotch, is that you?”. “Blitz! I don’t know that you were here” Both of them hugged in joy, “We were going to go to the library to discuss about a problem with Twilight Sparkle, Fluttershy’s friend”, “Yeah” Blitz replied “I also wonder about all of this clones thingy”. The four of them then fly together to the library.

Equestria – Carousel Boutique

Elusive and Rarity just finished another dress when she saw her friends fly by in the sky, “A minute, Elusive.”. Rarity rushed to the front door, “Fluttershy, can you please help me a bit?”, the four pegasus on the sky stopped their flight and landed. “Oh there are four of you... what’a coincidence, me and my ‘partner’ just finished some dresses and suits, maybe two of you and your... boyfriends can help me to test it.”, “Ah... No, no no no. Blitz is just.. a friend I met” Dash’s face turned red by a sudden, but Fluttershy and Butterscrotch’s face were red-er. “Rarity, did your friend just say Blitz?” Elusive asked from the inner workshop, “Elusive? What are you doing here?”, “Just doing my usual, where are you all going?” Elusive asked a short question to his passing by friend. “We’re going to the library, to ask about this strange incident” Blitz answered, “Back about that thing ,huh? Well... I’m also curious about that, let’s go since me and my Lady Rarity just finished our project.”, Rarity covered her face with a fan “Oh you...” she replied with an embarrassed face.

Equestria – Sweet Apple Acres

“y’ said that you got transported by a strange thing in Everfree forest?”, “Ah think so” Jack bite the apple on his hoof and continued, ”since it’s very different here”. “Strange thing huh? Ah don’t know any natural phenomenon which looked like that.” Aj scratched her mane with her hoof, “Well.. let’s ask my friend who’s expert in magic, Dusk Shine, if he ended here like me, he should be in the library.”. “Good Idea, Jack. Mah friend, Twilight, who is an expert in magic also live in the library”, “Let’s go there then” Jack finished the rest of the apple with one bite, and both of them went to the library.

Equestria – Ponyville Library

“Dusk, are you sure with this?” Twilight asked nervously, “Of course yes, I have read a lot of books about ‘that’ stuff”. “I trust you then, please be gentle..”, Twilight laid down on her bed, Dusk got on the top of her and started rubbing. “Ahh... a bit too rough there”, “here maybe?”, “Ahhn... a bit better, you’re good at this”, “Well.. I just followed everything the book said”. Their ‘fun’ was disturbed by a sound of banging door, “Twilight, ah need some explanation here? Twilight! What in the hay are you doin’ there”.

“Oh, hi Applejack. We read a book about massages, it said that a colt’s hooves are better at massaging than a mare, since Ponyville spa only have mare massagers, I tried it with Dusk.” , Dusk then continued to rub Twilight’s back. “Ah see..., well.. Twilight, Ah need some explanation about sumthin’ happened in Everfree forest”, Dusk stopped massaging, “You mean a portal?”, “Looks like that” Aj replied. “Well... let me grab books about portals then.”, Twilight slowly got down from her bed and started searching in her bookcases.

When they were searching, a knock was heard from the library door, “Come in”. The six ponies went into the library, “Ah... Twilight, We need to discuss something with you.” Rarity started her talk, “About portal?” Dusk asked her, “Yes, Dusk” Elusive replied to him. “Ah... here it is, can anypony describe to me about the portal?”, “Well.. the portal was big, white and shiny, and round. And... when we entered the portal, we were blasted from the impact.”, Twilight carefully searched through the pages, but not a single description match with the portal. “How about we ask the Princess? The Princess sure must know about it.” Rarity suggested, “Good idea... let’s go to Canterlot” , Fluttershy asked with her low voice, “How about Pinkie?”, “Don’t worry Sugarcube.” Applejack replied, “Pinkie! Come here right now.”, Blitz started to shout too, “Bubble Berry, come here ASAP”. In approximately 5 seconds, both of the pink ponies popped out from the light bulb, “You called?” asked Pinkie and Bubble. “We’re going to Canterlot”, “Okie Dokie Lokie”, “They sure really match, don’t they?” Dash whispered to AJ, “Ah think so”.

Equestria – Canterlot Castle

“He was just giving me a massage, nothing more, Luna. I read in the books about colt massager, and strangely, there aren’t any colt massagers in Equestria.” Princess Celestia tried to convince her angry sister, Luna was still holding the capture spell on Nirvana. “If that’s true, why are you hiding it from me?” Luna was really angry, so angry that Celestia couldn’t answer her sister. The throne room went in silent,the unconscious Prince, The Scared Princess and her angry sister, an abnormal day in the castle.

“Twily, it has been 2 months since we last met in my wedding.” Shining armor greeted her sister at the Castle Gate, “B.B.B.F.F? you were placed here?” Twilight was shocked of her own brother. “Ah... no Twily, you see, my job is getting busier, and I have less time to meet you. Since I’m the Captain of the royal guard, I exchanged my place with Key Gate, the Lieutenant, so I can meet you more often” Shining Armor explained his reason straight, “So... I see that you and your friends already have special somepony huh? Maybe we can hear the wedding bell right away”, “B.B.B.F.F, stop that” Twilight’s face turned red in a sudden, surprisingly her friends and the six colts were the same too, “It seems that I just triggered everypony’s heart. hehe...”, Shining armor continued teasing Twilight and her friends.

After they ‘escaped’ from Shining Armor, the view in the Throne room was more shocking. “Prince Nirvana?”, Dusk Shine rushed to Prince Nirvana captured body, “Who had done this?”, “Are these colts all your students? You colts, I think all of you need more manner lesson.”, Luna prepared her spell and pointed her horn at the colts. “Wait, Luna.” Princess Celestia tried to speak to her sister, “you got it wrong.”, Luna then stopped the spell “Huh?” and she was confused.
“So.. you see, I was reading a book about massaging, and strangely, I see there aren’t any single colt massager in Equestria. That’s why I casted the portal spell, ‘Lover desire’, it is said that the portal lead to the life of another gender, that’s why I tried it.I’m sorry Luna I didn’t tell you about this, because I was messing with ‘another world’, I don’t want to involve another pony in this. I’m sorry that I’ve troubled all of you.” , It was very surprising because it was the first time for all of them (except Luna) seeing Princess Celestia cry .

Luna released the capture spell and apologized to Celestia, “Sorry, Tia. I should have listened to you earlier.”, “I’m sorry too, Luna. I should have told you about it earlier.”, The Princess Sister hugged together. “Sorry to interrupt your highness, but how do we go back to our world? Prince Nirvana is currently unconscious and Your Princess, is currently exhausted.” Blitz cut the moment, “I can do it” Princess Luna answered to them. The 12 ponies cheered in joy, and also sadness, they have to release their ‘one’. The ponies celebrated a last party for all of them, a farewell party, hosted by the double party pony. “Come on everypony, we can still easily meet them, right Princess Luna?” Pinkie tried to cheer her friends up, “Well... Maybe If I want to have a massage”. Butterscrocth relieved that his wish came true, “Everything went better than expected”.

The end

Author notes:
Think of something crazy they said, then write it down they said. I just don’t know anymore

Comments

[insightguy]

not bad.

Just Needs 2 major things

1. SPACING!!!

2. some rewriting and in depth detail would be great

[Colt .45]

it was a... massage!

[DashCamp(IDBrony)]

848761
1. oh? alrighty then.., my eyes are more comfortable with this spacing, so.. what's the recommended number?
2. more detailed? Okay

848860
walls? spacing problem? sorry, but my eyes are more comfortable with that kind of text, spacing number suggestion please?

thank you everypony for spending some of your minutes to read my shitty fanfic, I need to work more on grammar, so.. I'm sorry for the mistakes inside. And because my eyes are more comfortable with the tight text, so.. I'm sorry if my habit annoy all of you on reading.

[insightguy]

break off every 3-4 sentences and 1-2 for long ones

[DashCamp(IDBrony)]

848966
Okay, gonna try it in my next story

[SterlingNomad]

848976

And for dialogue as well.

Every time a new character speaks, drop a line. Its standard literary protocol and its makes reading a tonne more enjoyable for the reader, trying to keep track of who says what.

[DashCamp(IDBrony)]

849274
thanks for the advice, I usually write a story without dialogue, so..yeah. I need more training urgh.. fail me

[DashCamp(IDBrony)]

852894
make music? eh.. what? did you mean take part? Yes he did, but Luna's spell made him unconscious. Sorry but I'm lost at your question I suck
*Edit : Did you mean the band 'Nirvana'?

[DashCamp(IDBrony)]

890897
I know I know.. I'm still learning, I'm sorry that my fics make you blind, English isn't my first language, so.. yeah. I need to study more English

[FallingInDarkness]

You must make a new paragraph each time the speaker changes like rainbow blitz to rainbow dash you know and the male version of Celestia and luna name is Solaris and Atremis and royal Canterlot voice is like THIS you must bold it.