This story contains the history and true identity of The World burning beast know as simply the cou-...*Crash*"Oh hello there writer, I see you're writing a story about me, so I've come to read it." But it isn't done yet Count I'm just now writing the Long description for it."Hm, that's true, that is true."I suppose I can wait, I'll just go cause some chaos and pandemonium while I wait for you to finish it."Okay whatever just don't plow up any power stations near by, because then I wont have power or WiFi, and that means I can't finish this."Okay I wont."*Another crash as he exists.*
Chapters (2)
i liked the way it seems that your talking to the audience in some points. Your grammar is good and I like that you didn't spend ages dragging scenes out. However saying that... I think you could slow down the pacing a bit. I know that you want to get the story out but I think it would be more enjoyable if you explained what was happening a bit more because at some points I got a bit lost. But overall good first story.
7834834 To which points are you referring to, because I can go back and explain them in greater detail.
This is really good !!!!!
7946627 Thank you for reading, care to give any feedback?