How attached to this world are you truthfully? Most can't answer this question 100%, but Kyle can. He's not, this world is a prison filled with pain and torture. So, how does one finally escape such a complete prison? Well there's only one way...
This premise is done to death, but just because it's been done so many times that if it manifested into reality, with each story with this premise being a grain of sand, it would be larger than the Sahara Desert, does not mean it can't be good.
However, your writing is, quite frankly, atrocious. You started it off with the main character dying as Twilight shouts his name, then flashback to where he commits suicide because of depression caused by something we don't know at the time, but swiftly learn as apposed to, say, keeping his depression for a while before he's ready to open up to people that are no longer complete strangers. Then he just wakes up in the middle of the woods, have nothing dramatic happen as he walks through, and have him conveniently both meet Twilight and Fluttershy in the season 1 opening and completely forget about his depression, because for some reason you completely loose depression after you commit suicide and wake up in the middle of the woods, where there could be dangerous things that want to eat your face. Then he falls unconscious, wakes up, instantly befriends two people of a different species when one of them is supposed to be a cynical prick that dislikes friendship at that point in time and the other is ridiculously shy. Again, they're complete strangers, different species, and he instantly befriends them and tell the one of his "deep, dark secrets" that he's never told anyone.
It makes no logical sense, doesn't have consistent characters, doesn't have show-accurate personalities, and to top it off, has horrendous grammatical and spelling mistakes. Also, dark, comedy, and romance go together about as well as blood, peanut butter, and flowers on a sandwich. I'll look on to see if it's even slightly better after this.
7903759 Wadaya mean? That's my favourite type of sandwich, don't knock it till you try it. How would you know what people feel after committing suicide? It's not like they can tell you about it... also, MAGIC
I like the concept, very interesting. Hope it continues
This premise is done to death, but just because it's been done so many times that if it manifested into reality, with each story with this premise being a grain of sand, it would be larger than the Sahara Desert, does not mean it can't be good.
However, your writing is, quite frankly, atrocious. You started it off with the main character dying as Twilight shouts his name, then flashback to where he commits suicide because of depression caused by something we don't know at the time, but swiftly learn as apposed to, say, keeping his depression for a while before he's ready to open up to people that are no longer complete strangers. Then he just wakes up in the middle of the woods, have nothing dramatic happen as he walks through, and have him conveniently both meet Twilight and Fluttershy in the season 1 opening and completely forget about his depression, because for some reason you completely loose depression after you commit suicide and wake up in the middle of the woods, where there could be dangerous things that want to eat your face. Then he falls unconscious, wakes up, instantly befriends two people of a different species when one of them is supposed to be a cynical prick that dislikes friendship at that point in time and the other is ridiculously shy. Again, they're complete strangers, different species, and he instantly befriends them and tell the one of his "deep, dark secrets" that he's never told anyone.
It makes no logical sense, doesn't have consistent characters, doesn't have show-accurate personalities, and to top it off, has horrendous grammatical and spelling mistakes. Also, dark, comedy, and romance go together about as well as blood, peanut butter, and flowers on a sandwich. I'll look on to see if it's even slightly better after this.
7903759
Wadaya mean? That's my favourite type of sandwich, don't knock it till you try it. How would you know what people feel after committing suicide? It's not like they can tell you about it... also, MAGIC