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XombieSlayr


Crazy people don't know they're crazy. I know I'm crazy, therefore I am NOT crazy. Isn't that crazy?

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Daring Do's latest adventure finds her searching for Kamara Mista, an ancient city in the clouds once ruled by the griffins, said to contain riches beyond imagining. But that's not all Daring is after. According to a mysterious letter, by finding the city, she may finally be reunited with her long lost father. Will Daring find Kamara Mista? Will she find its treasures? Will she be reunited with her father? Read to find out! :)

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Comments ( 6 )

i love how the story is turning out! just so you know you forgot some spaces in between some words, for example you mainly forgot spaces after comas like this: "ah,here it is" he said. and you also spelled the word shed instead of the word she'd. :twilightsmile:

coco pie sound a lot like pinkie pie, and she acts like her.:pinkiegasp:

“Its Spring break!” Daring finally exclaimed, her voice echoing in the now empty hall.

Well that's convenient.

"Out sick, sir.” He explained. “I’m his replacement, Sharpatalon. I’ll do my best to do you proud sir.” The young griffin saluted Storm who rubbed his chin in thought.

It's not like this is foreshadowing or anything.:unsuresweetie:

It was eternally thankful, Masra’s office was on the opposite side of the building.

I think you meant she was eternally thankfully.

“I owe you one when I get back! I'll help dust off artifacts, or something.” Daring opened the door leading out into the hall.

Or something.:ajsmug:

to notice the shadowy figure that crept through the grass. Not even when it sneaked up the gangplank and hid itself among their supplies.

A stowaway!:pinkiegasp: Foe? Troublesome vrat? Or cooky ally?

We'll find out next time in "Straight Shot Speedway" or "Ship Sank Sunk"!

This was a nice story : ) quite enjoyed it, thanks for the wonderful journey!

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