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>Time set to a few years after the Nightmare Moon incident, just to make sure she's old enough.

nice. i'm liking this story even more by the chapter

You reached out a mane and ruffled her mane playfully, which went back to its original un-ruffled form, and she pouted. You grinned, “Well that’s good to know Archer. That’s good to know.”

You reached out a mane and ruffled her mane...
You reached out a mane
a mane

I hope you meant hand.

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Brain derped. No idea how I missed that. Thanks for telling me

You thought walking around with an arrow on your back made you look like Legolas from Lord of The Rings, but decided that Archer was right.

"Arrow on your back" I assume you mean bow.

Loving the story so far.

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Thanks for the note, edited

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To be honest, I am quite new to archery, so I'm not really that clear on a few things. I'm totally blind when it comes to tournaments The only targets my coach's been telling me to hit are 30 and 40 metres with a 36 pound bow. *shrug*
Thanks for the enlightenment though everything was at rough estimations when I wrote that part of the fic.

Post more please! im enjoying this story alot. Can't wait till the next chapter
Rate: 10/10

it's party time lol I want more

I'm enjoying it.

Everything is a little better this chapter. It's less mechanical, you have some character development and it seems to flow a touch nicer. I like that. There is still room for improvement, their relationship feels... rushed. Probably because you didn't work much about it into the previous bits. I found a weird tense issue:

"You had no idea how she had learned to make clothes so well, but one day, you vow to go to her boutique and thank her personally."

This whole story is past tense, but you threw in a present tense thought. The sentence it is in even starts as past tense. You could fix this by re-wording it to past tense somehow, like "but you vowed to one day go to her boutique and thank her personally." There are a few different fixes for this. Be careful about tense in stories, it can get difficult sometimes.

I'm still reading this, and enjoying it. It's no masterpiece, but it's entertaining. I always like to throw in constructive criticism where I can, so don't take my comments too hard.

Awesome chapter!