Like previously stated, this was written because my mind would not shunt the idea to the side so I could continue my other story. Not that it wasn't a pleasant idea, but it got annoying that it just wriggled around in there, begging to be written. Review is widely accepted, and thank you for reading.

Okay! Being a heterosexual (but open-minded) male, I felt it would be good to read this so I could review this without being too emotionally attached.
Unfortunately, my plan failed, since your writing is good.
Okay, but seriously, this is good so far. Your writing and your grammar are both sound, a few errors here or there, but nothing that prevents this from being a comfortable read. The only real complaint I have to offer is that Dusk's feelings about Bubble kissing him are somewhat meager. I feel you should give his thoughts more detail in the future, make it clearer that Dusk is honestly confused as to why this is happening all of the sudden.
Overall, a fine read and I'm certain that people out here that are serious fans of subject matter such as this will like it even more than I do. Keep it up!

You, my friend, have successfully hooked my attention.

You made gay ponies seem okay, that's hard, and I mean hard to do. Great work.

P.S. I don't know why, but lesbian ponies are totally okay, hell, even bondage seems a little less "the fucked up?" with ponies.

But gay... it's still...

I don't get it... Ponies make just about every kinky thing semi-okay apart from a select few, but gay... is still gay.

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Ah, yes, thank you. I had a feeling that there was something off about that. I promise that I'll try to delve into that in the next chapter. Let's just go with the excuse that Dusk was too drunk to think too much for now, eh?
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Ah, THAT double standard. You wouldn't believe how many people I've heard say that female homosexuality (lesbianism) is okay, but male homosexuality (gayness) is revolting. Honestly, the human psyche is a cruel, cruel, discriminate thing sometimes.

I found a little error right as Blitz was leaving:
She stood up and walked out of the club, leaving the two colts by themselves in the bouncing-loud place.
SHE stood up and walked out of the club, leaving the two colts by themselves in the bouncing-loud place.

But otherwise the story was great!

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Ah, thank you. The little things are what annoy me the most; so easy to make and miss. Rainbow, why do you have to be so gender-ambiguous?

cool story bro

a very great lol at the end, please do make more of this
Even if it's dudes, it's still a good story, want to see how it turns out!

Yaoi is my kryptonite.
My only complaint is a lack of sexy times....
Do more damnit!

Awwww yea! Stallion shipping, good comedy, a good conflict and the R63 version of one of my favorite couples.

It's funny. I don't even know why I decided to use alcohol as a general premise. I have little to no knowledge of the stuff myself, being 14 and all. Maybe it seemed like that the best way to get two colts kissing was getting the crazy one drunk.
My mind, sometimes... I don't even know.

Prince Celestius approves!

Well well well, the R63 ponies get a chance to shine. This'll make for some "interesting" times...

Well, aside from the facts that there weren't any fireworks and the purple part of this prose was sadly lacking, I have an interest in this story, and it is, so far, maintained.

I like the intro with the scientific name for alcohol and ol' Dusk Shine's comments about it. I also find it incredibly appropriate that his large brain can only slosh around in so much alcohol. I would have preferred it if he didn't suffer from drunken silence; an inebriated colt spouting obscure, scientific nonsense is somehow more entertaining to me than a stupefied smarty-pants.

The part about Berry's multitude of drinks could have gone with a lot more description. Some more descriptions like how one of the drinks was on fire, that it resembled a lava lamp complete with the bizarre globules, or that it seemed to... wail disconcertingly, would have been more enjoyable to read than general descriptions of what the Pink Party Pony was knocking back with reckless abandon.

The beeper was slightly off. It would have been more Equestrian level if there was a member of the Weather Patrol out rounding-up his or her compadres from the usual pony-plastering-pitfalls, and added an interesting scene with Rainbow Blitz trying (and failing) to prove that he is sober enough to handle a few more drinks. Failing that, a bartering scene would have been interesting.

As said earlier, the lack of metaphorical fireworks in the kissing scene and the necessary unnecessary wordiness to enhance the mood and the "Pow!" of The Kiss was kind of disappointing. The end hook was also kind of embarrassing and painful to look at. Still, the meat of the story lies within the drama in the aftermath, so I'm holding my breath for this to get better.

A word of blunt honesty: I'm probably only reading this for the r63, gay Twinkie.