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Arkidonius


College student, 24. Big time fan, long time writer, learning how to Fan Fiction <3

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The three Sirens Sonata Dusk, Adagio Dazzle, and Aria Blaze are powerful to say the least. Ancient beings from a time now lost in Equestria, they were banished to a far off land in another pocket of space and time, doomed to wander for all of existence. They have made a home for themselves, embracing their imprisonment as best as one can. Until the night they see the magic, EQUESTRIAN magic. They now see a way to grow strong enough to return to the land they came from. But a vision comes to one of them, showing them what is to be. They will need help to go home, and Adagio might just know how to get it to happen, and prevent themselves from being defeated at the hands of seven good friends.

(In short, this is my own spin on Rainbow Rocks. I loved the movie, but the simple concept of fighting with music and defeating three, what I believe to be, POWERFUL MAGIC FEMALE DEMI-GODS was too much of a buzz kill. In this tale, they have MANY more abilities, as I think they should have. There is more magic, more drama, more fighting, and an OC I am throwing in not as a mary sue, but as a secondary antagonist for plot reasons.)

I have done a few weeks of research trying to get most of my facts together, including appropriate timelines, and as such, this is my first EVER fan-fiction. I'm nervous but ready to stop reading and try and get enough creative juices going to get this out. AS such, any and all criticism is accepted and wanted. And I guess as a thrown in, though it might be assumed, this is non-canon, and takes the place in the timeline that Rainbow Rocks did.

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Comments ( 6 )

I like it please continue

Excellent start to this. These three are probably my favourite villains in the movie series, except maybe Sunset. Of course, she's not a villain anymore, but you know what I mean. They definitely sing my favourite songs in the movie series, so it's good to see them have more attention.

The only thing I can really say to work on is try to separate paragraphs out more, like at the beginning. Maybe have one line at the start as a sort of grabbing line to hook the reader into the story, and then carry on with longer paragraphs. And of course, the ever elusive grammatical error. I saw a few, but not too many, so it's fine. I should know about this, I'm still finding my own errors in things I've written.

Other than that, I really enjoyed it. It was well worded all throughout and I like the idea of them having more powers than what was in the movie. I'll be keeping an eye on this story. Really well done for a first work. Thank you for writing it.

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