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Inspector Brown


I am here to sharpen my writing skills. My objective with each of my stories is to create a narrative that dovetails with the show as seamlessly as possible.

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The residents of Ponyville know that the Ponyville Millionaire's Club exists. Who its members are, where they meet, and what they do when they meet are some of the best kept secrets in the history of this small village. It seems the only way to find out what secrets the Club possesses is to join their ranks. And the only way to do that is to become a millionaire. Now, having just earned the very last bit that pushes her net worth into seven figures, Rarity has been invited to join the cloaked cabal of capitalists. She's been looking forward to this for a long time, and now, she'll finally learn the truth.

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Comments ( 13 )

I think she's going to be surprised as to who its members are, since so far I only see Filthy Rich as being one.

Well, I have another guess, but I'm not telling you... :raritywink:

Oh, maybe Filthy Rich, but then maybe not. I expect AJ or some other apple as long as it isn't a bad organization. Hmm, maybe octy, and prolly ocs idk. It's hard to imagine. So far so good, and I look forward to the rest.

I agree on Filthy Rich, if nothing else since his family has been around, as they said, just about as long as Ponyville itself. I wonder id Diamond Tiara is a member? Or maybe somepony in Silver Spoon's family?

Either way, tracking to see where it goes.

Ugh...you're going to make me wait a whole other chapter, at least, to find out who they are. Okay ni but seriously this was good. The questions were good, I am guessing that dash is in the club, and I can't wait for the next bit.

Nice and intriguing idea.
It would be an interesting conflict, but only if you don't set Twilight as the bad guy of the story.
Show that Twilight do have reasonable reasons to be suspicious of societies like the PMC: even if the PMC itself *is* harmless, other societies could not have been, so Rarity would have to give good arguments to change Twilight's mind (and they would have to be really good one, after all it is Twilight...).

You know, a lot of RD's self-centered entitlement makes perfect sense if she's stupid rich.

You write the characters well

Please don't stop writing this story, it's really starting to get interesting now, in fact, it even rivals spot that changeling, which is probably my favourite mystery story of all time.

8112158 I'm not sure. The longer I go without writing, the harder it is to get back into the swing of things. I have an ending in mind, and I do want to finish this story, but that seems unlikely at this point.

This is a really fun, albeit short read.

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So, should I finish the story, or what?

“Okay, you want full disclosure? Here it is: I received an invitation to join when I first moved to Ponyville. I don’t know why, maybe they thought I had a secret trust fund from my parents or something. Either way, I threw the invitation out, and never gave it a second thought. I got another invitation right after my coronation, and I threw that one away too. I haven’t heard a word from them since. And if I never hear from them again for the rest of my life, it will be too soon. I may be a princess, but that doesn’t mean I’m better than anypony else. The last thing I should be doing is joining some exclusive club of self-absorbed ponies who think that they are. Does that convince you?”

THATS WHAT A MEMBER WILL SAY!

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