Stuck In The Middle With You

by CoffeeMinion

The Eye That Floats, Silent and Unblinking, in Petunia Paleo's Sandbox - [Random] [Comedy] - May 2017 Flashfic ("Laugh so you don't cry")

“AAAAAAAHHHHHHH!” shrieked an unseen mare.

Many ears perked at the sound, but only one pony sprang into action, dropping his groceries and dashing down an alley off Ponyville’s market street: The Doctor.

He rushed around the corner of a wooden privacy fence, spotting a small blue filly playing gleefully in her sandbox. A terrified mare stood at their nearby home’s back door.

A giant disembodied eyeball floated between them.

He cleared his throat. “Now, I thought we'd agreed we wouldn't just drop in on the material plane unannounced?”

The eyeball’s pupil seemed to flatten and undulate before reverting to normal.

“Ah. I… can't fault you for that.” The mare looked at him plaintively. “Her contact fell out during her last dimension-jump. Needs help finding it. Thought it landed somewhere over here.”

The filly giggled and tossed up a hoofful of sand.

The mare tittered humorlessly for a moment, then fainted.

Author's Note:

This originally appeared in the May 2017 Flashfic contest, which had a limit of 150 words. It was written for Posh, who wrote this and gave me this idea (and later the one in the author's note here) after I wrote this.

Comments

[Griseus]

God damn it. Hate it when links in comments send me to random chapters in another story. Have a god damn upvote.

(I blame Posh.)

[CoffeeMinion]

8190115 Actually, thank you very much! That finally gets me to 10 votes on this thing.

[mastermenthe]

i also thank Posh for linking me to this chapter.

Coffeeminion, your style seems familiar, are you a contributor to the Oversaturated universe?

[CoffeeMinion]

8191518 Thanks for checking this out! Sadly no, I've heard of the Oversaturated world and I know it's a thing FOME oversees but I've neither delved into it much nor contributed.

But I've been around for a couple years now and I try to release new stories about once per month, so it's possible you might've come across something of mine before. Here's a handy guide to my stuff if you want to check anything out!

[CoffeeMinion]

8196953 Thank you kindly! It helped that I had the idea rattling around my head for months with no good place to put it prior to the Flashfic group being born.

[CoffeeMinion]

8203323 This is definitely "canon" from the perspective of To Serve In Hell and its nightmare takeover AU. It doesn't show exactly what happened to Celestia, but it does get a little into her headspace on the night before Nightmare Moon returns. And of course things aren't good in there; she feels alone, and she has serious doubts about whether she can win. And as we know from the story, she doesn't win.

Of course then there's also a fundamental question of whether the AU even existed before and after Twilight and Spike dropped in. Because it wasn't technically an AU in the show; it was an alternate timeline created by Starlight's meddling. So you could argue that it should cease to exist as soon as Twi&Spike left.

And I'm all like, that makes sense but I'mma go tell my story there anyway.