She’d come in direct contact with his cum, so eye contact was no longer required.
MIND CONTROL JIZZ!!
I'll hand it to ya, I typically don't care for fetish fics (hypocrit, since I've basically written one) but I kind of liked this because of the concept, and it's fairly well written. Just a Stallion that can rape and mind control whoever he pleases.
Go rainbow dash. Interesting enough the mind control was different between the two mares. The mayor was acting like a slave while Fluttershy was still herself.
I'm sorry, but this is very unoriginal concept wise. Besides that, rape is a terrible thing to happen, not something you want to base a story on. Good luck in your future writing endeavors.
7587657 It was incredibly obvios this was a rape story so why exacly are youu commenting about it. Saying something about how fast it is happening is one thing but just because rape is involved is way worse
Eh. Get a track.
MIND CONTROL JIZZ!!
I'll hand it to ya, I typically don't care for fetish fics (hypocrit, since I've basically written one) but I kind of liked this because of the concept, and it's fairly well written. Just a Stallion that can rape and mind control whoever he pleases.
When do we get to Celestia?
Go rainbow dash. Interesting enough the mind control was different between the two mares. The mayor was acting like a slave while Fluttershy was still herself.
7587296 That's because the mayor consumed his cum, but Fluttershy hasn't yet. I might go back and try and make that clearer.
Sorry about my first post. Computer's acting up.
Nice story and I wonder what's going to happen once Domino gets control over both Fluttershy and Rainbow
This is really good! I'm actually impressed with how good this is.
(Also as for things to do could you do something with feet? o3o)
I'm sorry, but this is very unoriginal concept wise. Besides that, rape is a terrible thing to happen, not something you want to base a story on. Good luck in your future writing endeavors.
Ho, The classics.. ~
Cautiously watching. I'm not a fan of instant control, and the way it's used here is a reason, but we'll see.
Great make more chapters
I like the looks of this. Keep it up even with the nice darkish stuff.
A corruption story? I'm interested to see where this goes!
It'd be fun if all the mane six were secretly into being controlled
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7593211 That would make it way to easy
whens the next chapter coming out?
7607645 I'm a slow writer, but hopefully within a week
7608798 fair enough
7587657 It was incredibly obvios this was a rape story so why exacly are youu commenting about it. Saying something about how fast it is happening is one thing but just because rape is involved is way worse
Gawd, he's everything I'd want to be in a pony world.
Minus alicornhood