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That ending was too funny
the ends hillarous poor terumi
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Edit: weeeeell not anymore
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Guess Celestia didn't make up a false story about Hazama/Terumi and that it was an honest truth about their history with him? But she's still keeping an eye on him, for both Luna and Hazama's safety. the thing about siblings and first love...make the youngest cry and your going to get fing murdered by the eldest.
Apparently Hazama's Actions hasn't just captured the heart of a princess, he may have captured the hearts of "Generosity" and "Kindness". Should we expect them on trying to ask Hazama on a date, even though he has Luna?
I Can't tell if it's either honesty or a façade, but I would still remain cautious with Terumi. Apparently it's gonna get even more fun for Hazama now that he has a third roommate in his mind with Terumi.
I Get the horrible Feeling that a certain prince, will already get on bad terms with Hazama/Terumi right on the start in the next chapter.
7602424 I love how you can guess how I was going to start my next chapter..
But it doesn't matter, what does matter is that both Rarity and Fluttershy wont be asking Hazama for dates, I did however, drop a hint or two as to who might try.
In case you absolutely need need to know. I will put it down here.
They get along rather well for people who just met
Came
Twilight has a Pink stripe in her hair, not purple also, how can one have a stripe the same color as the rest of her hair?
Two
what? I don't understand what that means...
their
This is the same with every spot where someone introduces themselves.
You mean "name's", names has a completely different meaning.
Her, not here
Again, that means something else entirely. That should be " repercussions"
Good god i must have spent over half an hour moving back and forth this chapter to put all this here.
That is why i so rarely do these things on a phone
There are still spots i didn't put here but those spots are just words that don't need capitalization in a sentence.
Anyway.....
This was a good chapter though
It will be interesting to see how Luna and Celestia will react to the partial merge the elements did and the thing Hazama needs to do to literally have a alive and healthy body.
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Oh Jeeze, I didn't notice any of those..
But thank you, they've been fixed.
I'm starting to wonder if I should try to find a Beta or something
7602803 please do
I don't know if i can do thos everytime
And i'm trying to get sleep now. But i can't catch it.... trying but failing
That was not expected, also I liked this chapter and so I'll continue reading.
Still loving the story, even with the wrong forms of words ( there, their, they're, its, it's etc.) While writing just try to remember the uses:
There- a place or general direction
Their- possessive; showing a state of belonging to "them"
They're- contraction of "they" and "are"
Its- possessive showing off belonging to "it"
It's- contraction of "it" and "is"
I hope this helps you out!
I loved the ending and the edit was good can't find any mistakes. Anyway love the story an that Hazama has to feed his body with energy and strong emotions, but you had us a small hint of feeding on negative emotion. Hehehe
I find that hilarious.
so he's like a changeling emotion feeder crap now?
ughughughugh
just found this story last night.. terumi is about to get bucked in a bad way isnt he
Doesn't that he's dieing slowly
Sure just forgive someone for somewhat eternal imprisonment, having your own mind temporarily murdered, almost causing death to the world. He was probably too busy being beaten down to even have time to forgive her while he was on the moon.