The First Day
Rarity was hard at work the next morning. Her sewing glasses were on and she was busy sewing away at a new gray-colored garment. Next to her lay a couple of finished dresses.
“Whoo,” sighed Rarity, swabbing some sweat from her forehead. “Having twenty dresses spread out over the week is actually sounding fairly desirable right now. Still, this is the stress that comes with the job. The only way I’m going to make this an enjoyable experience is by putting all my passion into this task.”
“Still, I really would like to know why Tonia Spoonsworth needs a dozen dresses from my newest line by the end of the day, and on such short notice. These will likely take me the whole day to complete. Now to add a pocket-stitch here...” She fumbled around in her fabric drawers, but was dismayed when she couldn’t find what she was looking for.
“Oops, out of red fabric,” said Rarity with drooping lips. “Guess I’ll have to get some more from the store later.” She took this moment to observe the clock behind her. It was nearing 11:00. “Hmm, Sweetie Belle hasn’t come down yet. I wonder if she overslept again?”
Rarity pondered to herself, still gazing at the clock. “Well… this is probably the only break I’m going to have while Sweetie is still home. Now’s probably a good time as any to finally have that talk… and I have just the thing for it!” She began walking down her hallway, flashing a very wide grin as an ingenious idea ran through her noggin.
“All she needs is a stronger push in her aesthetics, a bit of eye candy as it were. If she applies herself to the same degree as I once Spike returns from Canterlot on Thursday, he will undoubtedly notice her and bring his heart from me to her! This plan is genius! Too bad he won’t be back in Ponyville in time for Hearts and Hooves Day, though…”
She carefully opened a door tucked in the very back of the boutique. “And I’ve made the perfect dress, just waiting for this day! The day when Sweetie Ophelia Belle finally found her soul mate, and required the help of her big sister to charm his ultimate desires and win him over! And it all starts with the masterpiece crafted by moi!” she exclaimed, patting her mane. “The cutest and most exquisite dress in all of—”
But she stopped talking when she opened up a tall white cabinet and saw only a single clothes hanger dangling from the rack.
“…Where is the dress?”
I just can’t believe she actually had this awesome dress that just happens to be fit me perfectly!
Inside her room, Sweetie Belle stood high upon a stool, powdering her face. Her hair was done up in multiple beads and she had even put on purple eyeshadow, that she… “borrowed” from Rarity.
However, the real highlight of Sweetie’s appearance was the dress she wore, also “borrowed” from her sister. Its main color was a deep navy blue, while the band that ran around the middle was a lighter shade of blue. A lacy white frill draped over the back of the dress, while the torso was covered in sequins. The very bottom showed off a row of light blue diamonds that looked similar to the ones on Rarity’s Cutie Mark, and smaller diamonds also graced the band and upper straps. They were cast perfectly so that the dress cast a gleam from any angle.
And not only did I find a dress that fits me just right, but Rarity’s been showing me how to put on makeup and make my hair all nice and stuff!
Smiling at the lipstick tube with glee, she decided to use her magic to try to levitate it over to herself. Squinting her eyes shut, she focused all her effort into her horn, pointing it directly at the tube and concentrating as hard as she could.
A magic glow surrounded the tube, and it even levitated a millimeter or two above the table. However, the strain was too much and she quickly gave out, dropping the lipstick tube back onto the table. With a disappointed sigh, she glumly picked the tube up manually and spent a minute applying the cherry red cosmetic over herself.
“This will be perfect!” she exclaimed, reveling in the genius of her plan. “Spike has a crush on Rarity. So all I gotta do is make myself look really nice like Rarity always does, and then go to the library… hope that Twilight isn’t there, and then ‘butter him up’, like my sister’s romantic books say! Sweet-talking him and stuff.”
She reached into her saddlebag and pulled out a string of mistletoe. “And then, I’ll hang the mistletoe above him while he’s not looking, and… and kiss him.” Just thinking about it made her blush a little, and she began rubbing her hooves together in nervousness.
“…Yeah. A-and then, he’ll be… what’s that word the books used again? ‘Swooned’? Yeah, he’ll be swooned and he’ll be in love with me instead of Rarity, and I’ll finally have him as my very special somepony— err, special somedragon I guess, just in time for Hearts and Hooves Day!”
She made a huge leap of excitement, but was shaken solid when a knock sounded at the door.
“Sweetie Belle? Are you awake?”
Sweetie looked at her ensemble frantically. I can’t let Rarity see me like this! “Um… yeah, just a second!” She pulled off the dress and quickly stuffed it into her saddlebag. “Hang on!”
Rarity waited patiently at the door for a minute, before Sweetie finally opened the door for her. She kept her back to Rarity and had tied a sheet of brown cloth around her face to conceal her prettied-up mane and face.
“Good morning, Sweetie Belle. I was just hoping that I could get a chance to— Oh!” she said, noticing Sweetie’s saddlebags. “Were you… getting ready to go someplace?”
“Yeah, um… the Crusaders! I’m supposed to meet the Crusaders today so we can try to find ways to earn our Cutie Marks!” said Sweetie, starting to sweat nervously. I gotta get out of here; all this sweating is going to ruin my makeup. “And I really need to get going now. See ya, sis! Sorry I didn’t come down for breakfast!”
She began to back out from the room, still keeping her face turned away from Rarity. Rarity’s face was one of confusion and anxiety. “Oh but, are you absolutely certain that you must leave now? I really wanted to have an important talk with you and, and… why are you wearing that brown fabric over your head?”
“Because we’re, uh… monks! Yeah, that’s it! We’re going to try and see if our special talent is being monks! Yeah…” She looked around nervously before turning around and trying to leave as quickly as she could. “Sorry, sis! I guess that talk will have to wait later! I need to leave now or else they’ll both be really mad at me again!”
“Sweetie Belle, wait!” Rarity called. But the sound of the door closing confirmed that she had fallen on deaf ears, and Rarity responded with a grunt of frustration and a stamp on the ground. “Why does she have to keep making this so difficult?”
But as she calmed down, her anger shifted into regret. “Better yet… why didn’t I take the chance to talk to her sooner?”
As Sweetie Belle cautiously exited the house, she accidentally bumped into Scootaloo, knocking off the brown fabric around her head.
“Oof!” They both cried, tumbling to the ground.
Apple Bloom stood behind them. “Sweetie Belle!”
“Oh my goodness! I’m so sorry, Scootaloo!” Sweetie Belle anxiously blurted, helping Scootaloo up.
“Ugh… it’s okay,” said Scootaloo, dusting off her mane. “We were just about to come in and check up on you.”
“Yeah. How are ya feeling? And whatcha got in that bag?”
Sweetie began to sweat again. She picked up the cloth and tried to pat off some of the sweat without disturbing her makeup. “Um, well… it’s, I-I had some ideas for our…”
But she was interrupted by Scootaloo. “Whoa. And what’s with the fancy mane and makeup?” she asked with a raised eyebrow. Sweetie clenched her teeth, feeling cornered by their questions. They both looked perplexedly at her and she was getting so nervous that her hooves were trembling again.
Why do I keep feeling trapped every time someone is asking me stuff? When will all of this stop so I can just go back to the way things used to be?
“Oh, um… my sister was giving me some more beauty lessons this morning! She was helping me do my hair and teaching how to put on eyeshadow…”
“Ohhhhhhh!” Sweetie gave a small phew after they both seemed to buy her story. Glad that worked.
“Wow, that’s really cool. Sweetie Belle!” said Apple Bloom. Scootaloo just rolled her eyes, and this made Sweetie giggle a little. She probably still doesn’t get why a pony needs to worry about their looks. At least she isn’t complaining out loud like the times when Rarity and I have actually had beauty sessions. Maybe now I can just leave without there being any more—
“So, are you ready to go crusading today?” Apple Bloom cheerfully asked. Sweetie winced as soon as she said that.
“I-I’m sorry, girls, I’d really love to,” she replied, already starting to walk away. “But I need to go do something else with… another drago— I mean, another pony, at um… another place. But maybe I’ll see you later! Bye!” she called.
“Huh?” they both said in unison. They exchanged confused glances at each other, and continued those glances as they watched their fellow Crusader approach Roseluck’s flower stand.
“Wow, really? Two whole days all by myself in Ponyville? Of course I’ll accept that! That sounds awesome!”
The Ponyville train to Canterlot was emerging from a tunnel as it rolled down the track through the mountains, on its way to the capitol city of Equestria. Inside one of the passenger cars sat Twilight and Spike, sitting across from each other on their own individual beds.
“Are you sure now, Spike?” said Twilight with a nonplussed face. “You sounded so excited about spending the whole week at Canterlot. I was actually expecting you to be a little disappointed about this request.”
“Oh come on, Twilight,” said Spike, resting his head on his arms. “That’s because I’m always excited to go to Canterlot. But I get to go there on royal business all the time. That would actually be kind of cool to stay behind in Ponyville for once while you’re up in Canterlot.”
“Well, this was much easier than I thought. I’m glad you’re up to it, Spike.”
“And besides,” Spike mused. “With you and your parents just sitting around talking for hours, I’ll probably be bored out of my mind anyway.”
“Ha-ha, very funny,” she replied, lowering her eyebrows. “Don’t forget, you’re still going to be with me for the first three days, so you’re going to have to meet them eventually, whether you like it or not, especially since they sounded so excited to finally get the chance to meet you in person.”
Spike responded by scoffing his hand in the air. “Ehh. It’ll be worth it, if I get to spend two whole days being Rarity’s assistant.” He lovingly sighed to himself, about to get lost in yet another daydream about that lovely Rarity. Twilight sighed and rolled her eyes.
Some things just never change…
Some time later, everything was quiet and peaceful on the Express. The train was circling around another mountain, and Twilight and Spike were both pleasantly napping. Or at least, they were, until…
“YAAAAHHHH!”
Spike immediately sprung up in bed, but upon seeing Twilight asleep across from him, he covered his mouth.
Uh, oh. I hope I didn’t wake her. Twilight stirred a little and made a noise, but then she simply turned over to the other side. Spike flicked his forehead in relief, but then he felt troubled.
What the heck? That was a really weird dream. I was fighting the Japonyse Samurais while they were holding Rarity captive. But then when I looked back at her, she had become Sweetie Belle. And when I looked away again, there was Rarity.
And every time I looked back again, she was either Rarity, or Sweetie Belle. And finally, I vanquished those mean old samurais and went to go kiss Rarity... and there she was again.
I don’t get it. Why do my dreams about Rarity keep turning into dreams about Sweetie Belle? I used to dream about Rarity all the time, the pony whom I love. So why is Sweetie Belle suddenly in my dreams? How does—
Oh, no. Oh no. I can’t be… OH, NO.
Frantically, Spike grabbed his knapsack from the bagging shelf above and pulled out two drawings from it.
“You gotta be kidding me. I can’t be!”
The first drawing was a simple sketch of Rarity he had made the other day after he came home from the Boutique. But the other drawing was the one he had accidentally made the other day… of Sweetie Belle.
He held that drawing in his right claw and the drawing of Rarity in his left. His eyes darted between the two as all the clues finally began to click together.
Am I— Am I in love with Rarity… AND Sweetie Belle?
Back in Ponyville, a certain little filly was proudly trotting down the road to Twilight’s library. She was wearing the studded blue dress again, and now she was also clutching a bouquet of blue roses in her mouth. A tag attached to them read in neat cursive writing, “For Spike.”
Alright… let’s do this!
As Sweetie Belle approached the library, she stopped in front of the orange sign outside the abode to check her appearance.
Shoot, I didn’t bring a mirror. I hope all that sweating didn’t ruin the makeup too badly. Let’s see… hair’s still perfect, dress isn’t dirty, eyelashes are still plucked… She lightly tapped her lip with her hoof. …lipstick hasn’t worn off, and… still got the mistletoe. Great! And so she triumphantly started walking towards the front door, though she wasn’t feeling as triumphant in her mind.
Okay… here we go. Just going to start talking to Spike, butter him up just like the books said, hang up the mistletoe, kiss him… She gulped. …and then, he’ll be in love with you instead of Rarity. Simple! Oh please don’t be home Twilight, please don’t be home Twilight, please don’t be Twilight…
But once she got to the door, she noticed a note taped to the door. “Huh? What’s this?”
“Gone to Canterlot on a royal visit until Saturday.
Sorry for any inconveniences.
- Twilight Sparkle”
Sweetie exerted a happy gasp. “Oh, wow! How lucky is that? Twilight’s gone for the whole week! Not only can I make Spike my very special somepony today, but I could spend the whole week with him, just the two of us! This day’s turning out AMAZING!”
Pushing the door open, she peered around the empty library. “Hey, Spike! Are you here? …Spike? Hello?” Stepping fully into the house, she looked all around, not particularly noticing that several books were missing from their shelves. “Spike? Hello? Is anypony in here?”
Hmm, I guess he isn’t home right now. … Or maybe he’s up in his room and didn’t hear me come in. I’d better go check just to be sure.
She hurried up the stairs and knocked on the door to Twilight and Spike’s room. “Hello! Spike! Are you in there?” After not getting a reply, she carefully nudged the door open, only to find the room seemingly empty. Upon walking into the room, Sweetie immediately had to shield her eyes from the sudden blue gleam of light.
“Oww! What the— Huh?” She looked up as best as she could to see that the shine was being cast by the giant gemstone, still perched on the high shelf.
Hey, there’s the sapphire that I gave Spike! But… why did he put it all the way up there? It’s kind of hurting my neck to look at it. UHH! And my eyes!
“Hoot!”
“Huh?” She turned to her left, where she saw Twilight’s pet owl holding a feather-duster with his talons. “Oh, hi Owloysius! Just cleaning up around here?”
“Hoo, hoot!”
“Huh? Well you of course, silly!”
“Hoot?”
“What? I— Uh, never mind. Say, you wouldn’t happen to know where Spike is, would you?”
Owloysius nodded. “Hoot, hoot!” He flew out of the room and then eventually returned with Twilight’s note that Sweetie had seen on the front door. He pointed to it with his wing.
“Wait… are you trying to tell me that… Spike went with Twilight to Canterlot?”
He nodded again. “Hooooot.”
“…Oh.” Her ears drooped and she kicked the floor. “Well, that wasn’t in the note. Spike’s gonna be… gone for the whole week, including Hearts and Hooves Day? … Darn it.”
“Hoot?” uttered Owloysius, pointing to her mane and dress.
“Huh?” she replied. “Oh… all this? It’s just for— well… I guess it’s just for nothing now.” Yeah. I snuck this dress into my room without Rarity noticing me, and then spent a whole hour making myself all pretty… for nothing.
“I’d better go home and wash all this makeup off…” She turned to leave, but right before she walked out, she looked to her left again and noticed something.
“Huh. Spike left one of the drawers open.”
“Hoot!”
“Don’t worry,” she said to Owloysius. “I’ll go close it.” She walked over to the drawer to close it. But once she got there, she was stunned.
Inside the open drawer were a large pile of Spike’s drawings, and most of them… depicted Rarity. Her eyes became increasingly wider as she laid them out on the table to get a better look.
Some showed them dancing together, and some were candid sketches Spike must’ve made of her simply sewing dresses. She even found one of Spike proposing to her with a large diamond ring. Perhaps incidentally, a green prism-shaped emerald also lay in the drawer.
Sweetie’s heart started beating faster the more she gazed at all of the drawings. It was all increasingly becoming too much to handle, because all the pieces were finally coming together in her head all at once of just how much Spike was infatuated with her older sister.
It’s like an obsession. He’s totally obsessed with her. That’s why he has all these drawings. That’s why he’s always been coming to our house to assist her! That’s why he always follows her around everywhere when he’s not with Twilight! That’s why he hasn’t noticed me! Because he can’t ever love ANYPONY ELSE BUT MY SIS!
The makeup began to drip onto the drawings, as sweat and tears melted down the filly’s face, a wet blend of black and pink rolling over her cheeks. Panicking, Sweetie desperately looked for a way to exert this sudden rush of emotions. Her heart felt like it was beating at a thousand times a minute.
And then… she finally snapped.
“THAT’S IT!”
The quietness outside the library was suddenly disrupted as a bouquet of blue roses crashed through an upper window of Twilight’s library and crinkled onto the ground below.
Sweetie hustled out from the abode as fast as she could and proceeded to violently stomp on the flowers in her anger, pressing her hooves deep into the decaying blue petals. She then picked up the crushed bouquet with her mouth and swiftly hoisted it against the library sign. A small flurry of ripped, wrinkled blue petals flittered in the air around the sign.
“I'm through now! Through with EVERYTHING! No more sweet-talking! No more flowers! No more reading Rarity's stupid romance books or trying to fancy a dragon up, or asking other ponies about their special someponies! From now on, I'm just going to go back the way to the way things were! Everything’s just going to go back to normal, who no more love, no more crushes…"
She pulled off all the beads from her now raggedy mane and fiercely threw them all to the ground.
“And no… more… SPIKE!”
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Sweetie_Belle.png Is Sweetie gonna have to smack a dragon?
I WANT TO READ THIS! But I'm playing GC, I promise to give you details on what I like and thought could be improved later.
Cutest. Couple. Evar!
~ Vinyl Scratch & Rainbow Dash
(That's just me keeping my "Letter" thing... I mean the Spike/Sweetie...)
sad chapter next chapter please
Uh-oh. Jeez, Spike, stop leaving your swagger on, you heart breaker!
This'll be a Hearts and Hooves Day to remember, fo' sho'. Poor Sweetie Belle.
The sudden realization occurs:
I just watched "A Canterlot Wedding: Part 2" again- the picture of Spike dancing next to Sweetie Belle and her laughing in the end- I found your inspiration, sir!
SWEETIE NOOOOOOOOOOO!
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I don't see any reason why you can't do your own story. It's not like I called 'dibs' on this ship or anything.
820627
...Except that I started writing this story LOOOOOOOONG ago. If I remember correctly, the first chapter was done last November.
820658
Eh, let them revel in their ignorance. They're probably just jealous.
Oh crap.....
B-b-but why?! Why did it have to be a cliffhanger? Oh well, I've enjoyed writing too many cliffhangers myself to get mad at you for writing one.
But, I have to say that this chapter was great, and that from this point on things are going to get GOOD!
820658 Make it 3--err--4...? Okay, I clicked it and it went from 2 to 4 but whatever, yeah...
I changed my mind... I don't like this anymore...
Now, this is an... alright fic... in the beginning. But the pacing is terribly fast; it went from Sweetie being unsure of her feelings and just sort of leaning towards liking Spike for about two chapters (which I thought was really nice because it was realistic) all the way to love after a single conversation with her sister. That kind of bothered me due to the fact that it was very unrealistic...
The other thing is that, as a Grammar Nazi, this fic bugged me to death with the amount of mistakes in it...
At first, I was enjoying it and looking past those mistakes but then, somewhere around half-way through chapter 3, I just sort of stopped reading and went to a different fic... I just couldn't stand it anymore...
Anyways, my point being, I think that this story is meh, but not really worthy of the attention it's getting in its current form...
Mind you, the premise is good and the characters are decent and all that, but the writing itself and the pacing is just far too... sporadic.
So, I'm glad you got Featured and all, I guess... but yeah, those are my two cents. If you fixed the pacing (which you can't really go back and do, but improve on in the future) and just made sure to either edit it yourself one more time after every chapter or get an editor to help you, then I think this fic could probably turn out wondrously.
Also, I'm not trying to be a bitch about this or anything, so sorry if I come off that way. I'm just trying to give (albeit somewhat harsh) constructive criticism...
Good day.
Well it looks like Sweetie Belle found out the truth without Pinkie Pie accidently blurting it out, Rarity is going to have a hard time when she fianlly has to give that TALK.
Ouchy ouch! That's what I said when I read the latter part of Sweetie Belle's library scene. That HAD to hurt.
But, as a positive, I could picture Sweetie Belle being just beautiful in makeup and stuff. ^^ *sighs* It'd be pretty cool if somepony fell for Rarity (cause it looks like in the series, Rarity doesn't really feel much for Spike any more than a friend), then someone fell for Sweetie Belle. I LOVE YOU SWEETIE BELLE!!! 8D
Awesome story. Can't wait for the next chapter! ^^
wow!
now i wonder how will spike react to this!
hell how would everyone react to it! X3
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I think the term Grammar Nazi is offensive. I use the term Grammar Ranger. I'm one myself
"umm Twilight?"
"yeah spike what is it?"
"i feel a disturbence in the force."
"spike, be quite and go back to sleep."
821327 I could understand that, and in all reality, it israther offensive. However, my friend Pailhorse have an inside-joke going where a Nazi is simply an inter-dimensional being (they come from the 3rd dimension and above) and during WWII, Adolf just happened to gather the 3rd dimensional ones, which is why he did so well during the war.
There's a lot more to it than that, but basically, I'm from the 5th dimension (so I'm a "Nazi") and such... So, the term has become a null point that means something completely different to us...
I apologize to any and all who may be offended by this. 'Tis simply a gag between my friend and I.
821368
I was just joking. Nopony woulld ACTUALLY feel offended, but my friend and I have an inside joke also. Our Biology teacher told us not to use the term Nazi, so he said he was a Ranger instead. It was hilarious. (Unless you're Jewish or Polish)
And actually, I'm part Polish
821424 Ah, see, the irony behind ours is that I'm actually German (and French, and of course little bits of a bunch of other stuff, as is our modern culture, but German and French are predominant).
And I could see that being rather amusing, yes...
Really good story coming! Godspeed and goodluck!
820789
Thank you for your critique. Yeah, pacing is something I'm still trying to work on. For this fanfic, I've been making an outline of events for every chapter I write. But I think starting with my next fic, I'm going to write a full outline of the entire story and then get down to writing. Hopefully, that'll improve the pacing a little more.
What kind of 'mistakes' are you reffering to? Grammar mishaps, I'm assuming? I'll see if I can work on that too.
821348
PFFFFFFFT.
821479 Yeah, just little things here and there... I can't remember at the moment and I'm too lazy to go back and find them, but just little things like comma placement (or lack thereof) that ends up hindering readability and flow. *shrug* Just the little things.
And yeah, pacing is very difficult, I think, for many authors (myself included) because you want to get your ideas out, since you're excited about them/tired of dragging on the current development. Though, a lot of the time, you send them out too quickly or don't transition from one element to the next properly so it just creates an odd jumpy feeling for the reader... (And I mean most every author; there are only a select few who manage to get around that really well and they're authors like TAW, AbsoluteAnonymous, etc. etc.)
So, I'm just saying, for future chapters and stories, attempt to make better transitions. It's not so much about slowing down, either, as slow sometimes = boring. It's just transition work.
You know, I thought that it would be an interesting twist. There was a few fic about Apple Bloom having a crush on Spike, but I thought it might be interesting if Sweetie Belle got one and got jealous of the current object of his affections: Rarity!
There aren't enough Sweetie Belle fics. Sweetie's Mansion I kind of dig, but the author really needs to stop confusing Past and Present tense.
810086 Well, the problem is that as children, their characters generally AREN'T as deep as.
In "Not all who wonder are lost", a certain commenter brought up how Scootaloo usually is defined by how her whole universe revolves around Rainbow Dash. I felt the complaint was a little unfair.
Children are simple-minded individuals. Note I did not say stupid, but simple minded. TV execs and apologists always make the same defense of their terrible programming saying "its not supposed to be gold, its just a kid's show." While some things can be too
But it still adds up to not so much Rainbow being the center of Scootaloo's universe, but rather that Scoot's universe was much smaller in a way, and as not just a celebrity, but a local one that all the kids see flying around in the sky leaving a distinctive colorful train behind her, RD was a BIG part of that universe, which had so little room to give...and depending on the story, Scoots' universe might even have a void to fill.
And that story begins with Rainbow Dash being dead, and all the other characters around Ponyville still coping with the loss (Fluttershy in that story is taking it much, much harder than Scoots is, interestingly enough), and it being heavily implied that Scootaloo was actually there when it happened...
So yeah. In that environment, Scoots might just have Rainbow Dash on her mind. The only way she could get even more fixated on her is if all of a sudden she thinks that a way to resurrect her might be REAL and oh...right.
My opinion on Apple Bloom is...actually a little hard to describe. There have been more episodes about Apple Bloom exclusively (Bridle Gossip and Call of the Cutie before the CMC were even formed.) And when you want a child protagonist for your fimfic, AB is usually the go-to filly that springs to mind. Apple Bloom is somewhere in the middle of Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle, being willing get into danger (and occasionally call Scoots a chicken....over an argument on how to call a chicken), but isn't as full of absolutely insane ideas like Scootaloo ("Know where we can find a CANNON at this hour?" You called THAT a chicken? Question this filly's bravery at the peril of the entire world, folks.) However, she usually takes initiative to do things to prove something. Or get out of embarassment. She's the most "main character-y" of the fillies, but that's mostly because we know more about her family and we've spent more time with her.
No...
this can't be it...
I NEED TO READ MORE!
821437
And MLP unites us all...
821675 Agreed.
821686
I read the descriptions on your fics. Wow.
821710 Yeah, My Little Snout was okay as far as fics go, Fluttershy's Little Dashie... Well, that one was a request and I'm not even really into that, but I'm not going to lie, it was rather fun to write...
SPEAK TO EACH OTHER COMMUNICATE DAMN IT IT'S NOT THAT HARD THIS IS NOT THAT BIG OF A DEAL STOP MAKING THIS DIFFICULT JESUS CHRIST THIS IS GETTING OLD...
Huh? Oh. Sorry, I do that sometimes.
Anyway, do you get the point? I'm starting to get tired of these characters avoiding each other and by extension a chance to solve their problems at every available opportunity.
You're on really thin ice. Pick up the pace.
Poor Spke's in trouble now.
Man, there isn't anything scarier than a filly scorn.
I have to say I do feel bad for the little guy and hopes that he can find a positive solution to all of this before anyone is hurt either emotionally or physically.
Ophelia? Also It's finally happened Sweetie Belle has officially snapped.
820738
No, it's actually Japanese. The term "tsundere" is used to describe a female character who acts abrasive and loudly most of the time, but also has a softer and sweeter side, usually displayed around the protagonist. Notable "tsundere" include Akane from the classic Ranma 1/2, as well as Chisame Hasegawa and Asuna Kagurazaka from Mahou Sensei Negima.
The term itself comes from the twin Japanese phrases "Tsun-Tsun", meaning to turn away from or be disgusted by, and "Dere-Dere", meaning to become lovey-dovey. It's a very popular character development device in Japanese media, and so it has probably spread to other nearby Asian countries.
Example-
"Ugh, stupid commenter. Fine, I'll show you what it means, since you don't know. But I'm only doing it to set you straight, _not_ because I like you or anything! S-so don't go getting any ideas! Okay? Geez..."
For more information, please check out the following link-
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/Tsundere
And now that my short Twilight Sparkle-esque lecture is over, I hope you have a nice day!
Mannnnnnnnnn, the whole story is love triangley like I think Fluttershy likes Rarity, Rarity likes Twilight and um Twilight likes uhhh, well anyways, Im excited for the nect chapter!
yeah, Spike is FUUUUCKED
Sweetie Belle finally snaps!
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821535
Got it.
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Lol, I dunno. Needed a middle name for SB, 'Ophelia' was the first thing that came to me.
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*starts twiddling fingers* MUHAWHAWHAWHAWHAWHAWHAW‼
823114 You understand that makes her an unlucky Sweetie Ophelia Belle, right?
also, grats fav'd fic #50-something.
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I don't follow. Is this a reference to Hamlet or something?
Cutie Mark Crusaders Monks! LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is good stuff, I look forward to the next chapter and hope it comes out soon.
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Sorry to say, but I don't use OC's. That's the one thing I'm going to have to dissuade you on.
829116 what I was going for was that she's an unlucky SOB.
Damn, sweetie snapped
Anyhow, you got potential, this is some good stuff here. But something's bothering me... I guess sweetie belle going for a hail mary kinda killed it. Too soon maybe. I mean, if I add the "she's a kid" factor as well as "she's completely lost at what to do", then it's fine, but that's still pushing it a bit. Also, I'm waiting to see exactly what do you plan for sweetie and rarity while Spike is gone. The talk should be really entertaining
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What's a 'hail mary'? If you're referring to her whole plan of fancying up her appearance and trying to charm Spike into loving her instead of Rarity, you have to remember that she's relying on the romance novels she took from Rarity's bookshelf on how to deal with her crush.
As we'll learn further on, these novels present a VERY skewed idea of what love is, especially for a younger character like Sweetie, but having never experienced love before, she believes that these books are an accurate encyclopedia on the subject, when one should ideally be taking what they say with a pinch of salt.
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Hail Mary stands for Hail Mary Pass. It's an American Football play were you go all out, basically sending everybody forward and just throwing the ball as far as you can. It's commonly used as a "Life or Death" play. But yeah, I know we're getting at with the romances and Sweetie. It's really good so far, but I guess I'm just being picky.
If I ever figure out what's bugging me I'll let you know, ok?
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Um... okay.
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Yup. That's what I love about our community. We give the spotlight to all the under-appreciated characters and add whole new character to the minor ponies that never get a say otherwise.
Something tells me you're all going to HATE the beginning of the next chapter.
ooooooooooooooooooh D: !!!!!!!!poor !!!!!!! Sweeti u.u !!!!!!! ma gad this fic is really damn awesomeeeeeee :DD
*finally got down to reading this :D*
Aww.......poor Sweetie.....