Scroll Pen, a rather nerdy guy, transferred recently to Canterlot High. He quickly found his antipode - athletic and cocky Rainbow Dash. But as time went on, their relationship transforms from constant ribbing to something else...
As he approached, a more... lecherous side of him surfaced in his mind.
And it doesn't hurt that they are quite good-looking, either, it added.
If you read about a chracter saying something like that, it often sounds much more dirty then they probably mean it. However you already told me how he is.
Flash Sentry
give him a personality and make him a person, then I'm okay that he is there, I just got used to hate him after a while and some talks with other people.
"Well, the three of us play Dungeons & Dragons..."
"Dungeons & Dragons?" Scroll's face brightened. "Awesome! I didn't think anyone at CHS played any tabletop RPGs!"
Okay okay, forgot my last wish, if you make a scene about that, let Flash "play" a person with personality.. To be honest that he is playin that and wasn't Twilight addicted so far looked pretty good.
still not to much with the blushing as an overreaction, and everytime one could think it would start to get to much it is suddenly no more. Long story short, in chase my writing doesn't makes any sense, I liked it.
If you read about a chracter saying something like that, it often sounds much more dirty then they probably mean it. However you already told me how he is.
While I am trying not to write Scroll as a pervert, he still has hormones and an eye out for good-looking girls, so some potentially dirty-sounding moments are inavoidable - however, he tries not to make his whole life revolve around that.
give him a personality and make him a person, then I'm okay that he is there, I just got used to hate him after a while and some talks with other people.
Okay okay, forgot my last wish, if you make a scene about that, let Flash "play" a person with personality.. To be honest that he is playin that and wasn't Twilight addicted so far looked pretty good.
I don't personally hate Flash, even if he is the cliched "popular boy that the girl protagonist falls for" incarnate, and I am a shameless TwiFlash shipper (lol I'm such a heretic ) - but I do recognize that Flash's depictions in the movies and shorts are not really defining, and sometiems even contradicting, so he does need more personality. I can't honestly promise much personality for him, since he is not the focus of the story, but I'll see what I can do.
Twilight addicted
awesome epithet, I give you a moustache that was funny, in a good way.
still not to much with the blushing as an overreaction, and everytime one could think it would start to get to much it is suddenly no more.
I'm trying my best, glad that you believe so.
Long story short, in chase my writing doesn't makes any sense, I liked it.
While I am trying not to write Scroll as a pervert, he still has hormones and an eye out for good-looking girls, so some potentially dirty-sounding moments are inavoidable - however, he tries not to make his whole life revolve around that.
it works so far, and I promise not to judge to fast.
If you read about a chracter saying something like that, it often sounds much more dirty then they probably mean it. However you already told me how he is.
give him a personality and make him a person, then I'm okay that he is there, I just got used to hate him after a while and some talks with other people.
Okay okay, forgot my last wish, if you make a scene about that, let Flash "play" a person with personality..
To be honest that he is playin that and wasn't Twilight addicted so far looked pretty good.
still not to much with the blushing as an overreaction, and everytime one could think it would start to get to much it is suddenly no more.
Long story short, in chase my writing doesn't makes any sense, I liked it.
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While I am trying not to write Scroll as a pervert, he still has hormones and an eye out for good-looking girls, so some potentially dirty-sounding moments are inavoidable - however, he tries not to make his whole life revolve around that.
I don't personally hate Flash, even if he is the cliched "popular boy that the girl protagonist falls for" incarnate, and I am a shameless TwiFlash shipper (lol I'm such a heretic ) - but I do recognize that Flash's depictions in the movies and shorts are not really defining, and sometiems even contradicting, so he does need more personality. I can't honestly promise much personality for him, since he is not the focus of the story, but I'll see what I can do.
awesome epithet, I give you a moustache that was funny, in a good way.
I'm trying my best, glad that you believe so.
Thanks
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it works so far, and I promise not to judge to fast.
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Thanks
7564287 is this going to be updated?
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Yes, I am working on the story, although very slowly. The last three weeks have been madness for me.