This turned out just super! The chapter edits really helped form the story and I think their heartfelt conversation in this one added real solid depth to both their relationship and characters. The bit about being drunk enough to try anal was cleverly funny imo, in a realistic way too, and I think it leaves the story in a nice open position to include it or not (and I'm not saying you have to!).
From here on you can choose to focus on their new relationship, with all the joys and troubles one might experience on their way to maturing as a couple. But whatever you do, I'm excited to see what happens next! I really like it sor far, keep up the good writing!
Either Rarity's gonna sleep on the couch to avoid the noise or she's gonna join in the fun. I'm hoping for the latter, but I seriously doubt that's gonna happen.
7534778 Seriously. If you are gonna write smut PLEASE be at least somewhat realistic. RD should be in quite a bit of pain from unprepared anal. Ripping and blood would also be very likely, on top of the guaranteed shit dick. If things like this happen you need to show consequences. At least you didn't go the route of him blowing 4 loads in a row like some writers do.
I loved their little time together and can't wait to see them again
This turned out just super! The chapter edits really helped form the story and I think their heartfelt conversation in this one added real solid depth to both their relationship and characters. The bit about being drunk enough to try anal was cleverly funny imo, in a realistic way too, and I think it leaves the story in a nice open position to include it or not (and I'm not saying you have to!).
From here on you can choose to focus on their new relationship, with all the joys and troubles one might experience on their way to maturing as a couple.
But whatever you do, I'm excited to see what happens next! I really like it sor far, keep up the good writing!
You romantic bastard!
Came for the clop and stayed for the plot
Well done.
A down vote on a complement ? A troll bitch...
Love it! Love it! Love it!
If you ever need an editor or someone to bounce ideas off of, hit me up. Seriously, you got talent and I would love to see you do more and grow.
Please keep up the good work.
Either Rarity's gonna sleep on the couch to avoid the noise or she's gonna join in the fun. I'm hoping for the latter, but I seriously doubt that's gonna happen.
Now this is what I call taking it slow in a moderately fast speed.
YOU DONT GO FROM ASS TO VAGINAL! NO GIRL WANTS POOP IN HER VAG! THATS HOW YOU GET NASTY UTI's!!!
7534778 Seriously. If you are gonna write smut PLEASE be at least somewhat realistic. RD should be in quite a bit of pain from unprepared anal. Ripping and blood would also be very likely, on top of the guaranteed shit dick. If things like this happen you need to show consequences. At least you didn't go the route of him blowing 4 loads in a row like some writers do.
7537554 Yeah, I agree with the comments below, (you two, I see you), and a shit dick would definitely be in order for unprep'ed anal.
So... yeah. Realism or not, I don't really care, but still...
Poor Rare, such dispair.