Everypony likes to talk about the beginning of a relationship, how happy they were, how romantic it was. But nopony ever talks about the strains and troubles. After two years of happily -and let's be honest, surprisingly- living together, Vinyl and Octavia are facing their first real relationship problem as life hits them with its harsh reality. Sometimes, its easy to forget how fast the things that took so long to make can be undone. Rated Teen for, well, occasional colorful language and innuendos.
Chapters (4)
This is excellent work keep it up
"Two years. Already, she though." its supposed to be thought, right?
Not normally one for shipping, but aside from a few grammatical errs it's not half-bad.
Keep it up. This could turn into something good.
802378
Yeah.. I knew grammar would be my undoing. Im French you see, I'm doing my best to proofread myself and correct what I can but there is only so much I can do. Still thank you for the comment.
802567
That's okay. I've looked at some stories written by native English speakers on this site and FanFiction that would make my toes curl and automatically try to punch the story in the face with my foot. 
Usually that would result in two damaged things: a foot and a computer screen, so I try to curtail my anger.
Yours was pretty good. If I wasn't working on another story right now I'd offer to help with yours.
802041
Changed it, thank you ! I'm really struggling with those (through, thought, though, they bucking all look the same !)
Good story so far.
Here are some grammar things for ya. (not sure about the last 2)
The mare closed her eyes slowly, rubbing her neck and lifting her mane a bit, trying to let some air to cool her neck.
Make it "trying to let some air cool her neck."
the pony allowed herself to fall unceremoniously on the couch, sighting heavily.
sighing*
How could she had been so cruel ?
How could she had been so cruel?
but after a while, they had grown so used to letting slide eachother quirks and manners
each others*
never going past the harmless tongue-in-cheek insults and occasional sulking of eachother over petty things.
each other*
Very good story.
I think you should end it here or only do an epilogue. I don't know why, but it just seem like this would be all there is. Or something along those lines.
If you want elaborate more maybe a sequel. Whatever you do it's your choice and that is just my opinion. Keep up the good writing, though.
Small thing: every time you have a ? or ! you have a space in front of it. And you kept putting "sighting" and "sighted" instead of "sighed" and "sighing"
804853
I'm currently torn apart between following your advice -which is something I definitively considered after finishing the third chapter- or sticking to the 4 pages left of story summary. Latter is what I really would like to, but the former just seems like a very good idea.
Considering the cautiously positive response I got from it... I really don't know yet.
I do need to find editors in any cases, so thank you very much for pointing out these mistakes. It never even occurred to me there was a difference between 'sighted' and 'sighed'. Like I said, English is still only my second language.
805000
Like I said it was really good. If you have more you should write it.
Also, if you want I will be a proofreader for you.
I am intrigued and also want more, but feel as though adding much more will... just... I don't know.
802696 I saw something like akat's thing, being really hard to read.
Also, at every exclamation mark (!) and question mark (?) there was a double space... kinda got pissed on those.
Anyway, great story!
I love the innuendo at the end of this chapter.
Great chapter! I love this story so far, and I have to agree with Vinyl about Octavia's mom. Strongly, strongly, strongly agree. Keep it up!
I like this depiction of Octavia's parents. You've kept the general view of her mother but it's more tame and easier to deal with; she feels like a more realistic character. I also like that her father is still around and the banter between the two of them is quite nice.