As the three thousand year anniversary appears for the victory of one of Equestria's greatest battles, all is well until a past allie comes back for vengeance. Princess Storm, the only pony powerful enough to control the weather as her Sisters control the Sun and the Moon, was once thought to be defeated in battle and her death mourned. Known for her peace, tranquility, and love for all, she was highly revered as a hero - but was forgotten as time passed on. On the day of the celebration, she returns, with nothing short of pure hatred for those who didn't try hard enough to remember or save her.
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I like the concept of a forgotten princess back to take revenge. Storm's power set and history intrigue me, and I'm hoping she can be pacified... I'd be sad if the Mane 6 had to destroy her.
The spelling and grammar is a bit rough; it's not unreadable though. Probably the biggest one is where you say "main" instead of "mane".
Also, I'm not sure why the elements of harmony wouldn't work on her- besides "the story would be over too soon" I mean. The elements took out a creature of pure chaos; why would the Mane 6 believe they can't handle a Princess?
I'd be more convinced if the ponies tried to use the elements, and then found out it didn't work. I'm not happy that they're giving up before they even try.
Is the real reason they won't work because the elements create a rainbow and rainbows are weather, so they fall under Storm's control?
Looking forward to more!
>>Magic Step,
Thank you, I'm so glad you like it! I actually got the idea from a Pony Creator game - though I'm sure I'm not the only one here who has - and I decided to jump with it.
Thank you for notifying me on the grammar aspects of my story - sometimes I write so fast I don't pay attention to the words I'm using. And I'll have to look our for the use of my 'main/mane', especially when going back over it, XD
And don't worry about the Elements of Harmony, a full explanation shall be coming soon. There still more to be unraveled about Princess Storm and the history of Equestria.