Rainbow or rather Spectrum Beam as most folk called her nowadays was NOT having a good day. Somehow someone messed up the weather schedule for the lands around the capital and then some other guy messed up said weather by creating a storm 13 times stronger than the first guy ordered. It ended up with her being summoned three in the freaking morning, by some poor sop who pulled the shortest straw. Five minutes later, she was heading at top speed towards the ongoing storm, which stretched across 200 square miles and subsequently consequently affected the weather around the 200 square miles, which by then could easily be considered a complete and utter disaster stretching across the country. Even with her god like abilities, it took her almost all day, until she got it under control and finally dispersed of it completely. You’d think she’d be able to put herself a cloud bed together and take a nap. Well first off, as Rarity would put it, it’d be “uncouth” for a woman of her status to just nap at a random place. Secondly, her subjects needed her help in order to fix whatever damage the snowstorms, tornadoes and lightning bolts caused. And finally, after being woken up early, having nothing to eat for the entire day and working herself to the bone, she just wanted to blast the guys responsible for this entire mess. But as it just so happened, the Empress of Inconvenience and Annoyance had to show up from her hair (again!!) and told her to get back to the castle immediately. As in really, really immediately. As grammatically incorrect as that sentence was, when the Empress of Pinkness put anything like that, it was better to listen to her.
And so, completely soaked and with ice growing on some of her feathers, she made her way back to the castle. When she arrived, she literally broke through a wall, unleashed a shockwave, which knocked everyone to the ground who had been still standing. And then she punched the next best guy in the face for good measure. Being an evil ruler of the world had it’s perks all right.
“You!” she shouted towards a servant, who was getting back on his feet. “Get me some coffee ASAP!”
“Y-yes, my empress. G-gah!” The servant stumbled over a piece of rubble, before he caught himself and ran towards the kitchen. The Empress of Loyalty and Total Awesomeness in the meantime picked up the guy she punched and pushed him against the wall. “Where’s Pinks?” Spectrum growled, her eyes glowing brighter for a split second.
“T-t-t-the h-h-h-hospital wing.” the guy stammered, shaking like a leaf.
“The hospital wing?” Spectrum repeated dumbfounded, letting go of the guy, who crashed onto the ground. “Why would she go to the hospital wing?” the Empress of Loyalty asked herself. Her brain had a hard time drawing the obvious conclusion. It wasn’t until she took a sip from the coffee, which a trembling servant brought her that a metaphorical switch was flipped inside her sleep deprived brain. Her sore wings and overall chilly body forgotten, the woman tossed the coffee mug aside and sped through the hallways, leaving a rainbow trail behind her. The worker staff looked after their boss with a mixture of relief and disbelief and in one case pain, which came in form of hot coffee.
A guard looked over to the wall, which now sprouted a huge hole with additional rubble on the floor.
“Remind me again why we’re working here?” the female guard asked her male companion.
“Considering no one is stupid enough to attack the Empresses directly, it is the safest workplace?” her male counterpart offered.
“Safest? This is the third time this week alone that she did this!” the woman gestured with her arm at whole mess.
“Not like we can do much about it. I’m gonna call the cleanup crew.” he said and took out his phone. He already had them on speed dial and all he said was. “Hallway 28-3. We got another hole.” He could hear a groan on the other side, before he pressed the disconnect button.
Meanwhile the Empress of Hole Making took another sharp turn, knowing her destination was only about fifty meters ahead. However, she needed to make a full stop, as else she would have accidentally crashed into two of her fellow Empresses. She just arrived in time to see the Empress of Everything Sciency and Nerdy Stuff strangling the Empress of Laughter, who had a nervous grin on her face. And they were both in their human forms for some reason.
“Whoa, what’s going on here?” the newly arrived goddess asked.
Midnight let go of Dianna Pink (apparently no one had a good idea of an evil name for Pinkie Pie), made the breathing exercise her sister-in-law showed her all those years ago and then finally turned to the new arrival.
“What took you so long, Spectrum? It is unlike you to be this late.”
Spectrum Beam in return rolled her eyes, crossing her arms. “First of, Twilight, for the millionth time call me by my birth name. Secondly, do you know what was going on today?!” she asked, taking one of her wings and wringing the water out. She repeated the motion with her other wing and flapped them a little bit. “And third, when you’re done, can I strangle her? I’ve had a pretty shitty day and need some stress relief.”
Midnight raised an eyebrow, but didn’t comment on the statement.
“So what’s up anyway? Is she...you know...”
Midnight took in a deep breath. “First of you need to take on your human form, before you go see her.”
“She’s awake?!” Rainbow shouted and ran straight for the door. Midnight was just barely able to raise up a shield in front of the door, before her fellow ruler was repelled by it and landed hardly on her butt.
“Ow, what’s the big deal?” the woman on the ground asked with one eye closed. Pinkie Pie held a hand in front of her mouth, trying to muffle her laugh.
“Listen, Rainbow. Sunset is in a very delicate state. Her body is weak from literally doing nothing for four years. She can’t eat very well, she will need to relearn the obvious and her heart is so weak, any kind of stress might cause her to have a heart attack.”
“Wow.” Rainbow got back up from the ground and looked over to Pinkie. “Is that why she tried to kill you?”
Pinkie looked down to the ground guiltily. “I...I didn’t know...I thought I could finally make her smile again…” She summoned a tissue with her magic and snuffed her nose clean, afterwards burning it in pink fire. Rainbow put her hand on the girl’s arm giving her a kind, but slightly strained smile. “Don’t worry. This is Sunset we’re talking about. She can shrug off something like this with ease.”
“Back to the point” Midnight intercepted “we need to take on human forms around her, since she doesn’t know what happened the past four years.”
“Er...hate to break it to ya, but she’ll find out eventually.”
“Yeah.” Pinkie agreed. “I mean she just needs to look outside the window and it’d be like I gave her a 21 Party Canon Surprise Salute™.”
Midnight frowned. “No matter. We have to break it gently to her, else we risk her health.”
“Hey Twi, why don’t we just fix her with our magic?” Rainbow asked.
Midnight crossed her arms, her frown deepening both because of her friend’s lack of understanding magic and the use of her shortened old name.
“Healing magic as you imagine it is even impossible in Equestria. If you would have studied magic properly, like I told you to, you’d know that so far the most we’re capable of is healing small cuts. Everything else has let to some admittedly interesting mutations.”
“Yeah, yeah.” Rainbow shrugged it off. “I got all eternity to catch up on that. Besides, why study anyway? We just snip our fingers and get what we want. It’s always like this.”
“It’s not that simple!” Midnight let out a sigh, putting her hand on her forehead. “You know what? Forget it. Let’s go inside. Gem surely managed to calm down Sunset by now.”
“I still say Black Diamond would have been a fantastic name.” Pinkie stated before following.
“Come on, Pinks. That’s so cliché.” Rainbow said back, following her friends inside.
So, our mighty god-empresses are unashamedly evil...but still friends? Well, that's nice.
so what are they names,
also will sunset fall and join them or will she try to redeem them.
This story has potential but i feel like the prose are bit...weak....and very less defined lack of world building, i mean i don't understand the context, they are evil...Ok why? Why evil? I mean being evil for evil sake is something i adore in a villain but what's the mindset what's the reason here. Also you kinda just jump into without really showing that they are flying demons apart from the picture in the title of your summary. IDK I feel like a lot of this feels very...not so well thought out. A lot of this story is just very hard to follow and i really feel like there is no build up or follow through, it just sorta starts and it makes it very difficult for me to read.
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7538059 Alright, I've been rereading my own shit here and...I have to agree with you here. It is hard to follow without my knowledge of where this story is going. Now, since I'm too lazy to rewrite my stuff, I'll just separate the past from the present by writing a prequel. That way I don't have to forcefully stuff it into this story. Huh, wonder how much I'll confuse people by writing on both stories at the same time.
Don't worry. I'll make sure it'll be understandable and it will have more demons
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7538841 My problem isn't necessarily we need a prequel (Though I gues one would be interesting if written well) We just need a better understanding of the world as it is right now. I mean for example you open up with Rarity getting a message...Ok...well you don't describe what Rarity looks like, or that she has servants now...or that she's a demon...why is she a demon?
You just need to do better WORLD BUILDING in the here and now! Give us context....and isn't not re-writing it kinda the easy way out here. Come on dude....I think writing a prequel just complicates things more. No harm in re-writing. Effort man...It's your work show some pride and show your willing to go all the way.
I just need more context, description and definitly a bit more o a concrete world. I mean a lot of these chapters could stand to be a lot longer and more in depth.
Also why should I the reader have to read a completely different story, just to understand the world of the present. That seems like mandatory story instead of trying to make the story stand on its own.
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7538849 Damn, you're persistent. F I N E. One world building chapter coming right up. I was planning on doing this later, after the six have visited Sunset. I'll put it after the Prologue, but I'll still write that prequel.
I need to get to work now, so I won't be able to answer anymore questions, since fimfiction is blocked by their firewall.
7538877 Oh I hate it when that happens.
Well dude the thing is not a giant chapter....it needs to come gradual, through the chapters not just in one giant chunk. That's writing 101 dude. You tell it through the story...through the dialogue....You set it up you let the world breathe naturally so it doesn't interfere with the flow of the story. Take your time...look it over get Beta readers. Learn, evolve grow, from your mistakes.
If you want help, you should maybe ask for a Co-writer or a editor...or both.
Though I don't begrudge a prequel story only to see how the heck we got here and why they decided to turn evil.
7538886 Eh, don't worry. I noticed one chapter ain't enough, but thanks to you motivating me, I managed to write something nice. Far from world building, but a start and a little bit of fun.
7539737 no problem. I like the concept of this story.
This is an interesting story I can't wait for more. Also I wonder how Sunset is going to find out that her friends are now evil demons. Are they going to tell/show her. (Of course, after she recovers and is back at full strength) Or is she going to hear it from the castle's staff and other people.
Them being caring friends and evil overlords is just...incredible.
Rainbow Dash would have to fight me.