The Journals of Magical Rocket

by aricaitlyn

Good Night, Magical Rocket

The night we met Tara was a restless one. We heard her rustling awake every five minutes, and then we heard the toilet flush afterwards. I suppose creatures like her have really small bladders, or she's just in the business of raising our water bill to the hundreds.

Or maybe Snoodle Guy was right to have his suspicions about her.

No.

Wait.

Snoodle was being a total jerk! Tara did seem nice, but also a bit melodramatic.

But it does seem a little off that she showed up right after our powers were switched.

Maybe she had something to do with it.

Anyway, this morning I got up at about 3 A.M. and stumbled into the bathroom to, you know, do my business. The door creaked open and I could see Tara in there, standing over the toilet with an absolutely diabolical smirk on her face. She wasn't vomiting or doing anything disgusting. It was much worse. She was flushing our valuables down the toilet, and by that, I mean our wings and horns! But silly me, being the half-asleep pony I was, assumed it was just another one of my crazy dreams and fell asleep on the carpet. In my sleep, I'm sure that I heard the toilet flush yet again and Tara saying, "Good night, Magical Rocket. It won't be good anymore when I'm around."

In my actual slumber (we're talking Rapid-Eye Movement, people), Princess Luna appeared. I know it's her duty to visit dreams, but I never realized that she'd visit my dreams sometime. I only expected that sort of thing in the human world because I tend to have dreams that make no sense, but are always strung together like a story of sorts. In the dream, she told me to find the princess of light and forget the princess of night. I immediately shot up and began to think on that. It was 8:07 a.m. I stepped into the kitchen and put toast in the toaster. I considered making fried eggs for everypony, but then I remembered what Tara was doing last night. A thief and liar like that doesn't deserve eggs or toast. She deserves to sleep out in a thunderstorm, just like she mentioned the other day. Heck, she deserves worse, but most everything I wanted for her would land me in the Ponyville Penitentiary, a jail that‘s anything but sugar and spice. I shrugged it off and recalled that I was a sleep-zombie who was probably just dreaming.

The sun outside the kitchen windows seemed brighter. The light was so powerful that I felt no need to even flick a light switch on.

Then it dawned on me. Light = Princess Celestia. That means she is the princess of light. And Luna clearly presides over night, so, yeah, we'll just forget about her. But what exactly did all of that crazy stuff mean? I kept thinking about it all morning, as I fried the eggs, buttered the toast, and woke my friends up.

Author's Note:

I'm finally finished with this story! Who knew that listening to Paramore for three hours straight could get you completely pumped to finish a fanfiction!

Well, this was originally a comic written by my friend Ivy Art (she's on FimFic, too) in the sixth grade. I thought I would expand it a little, explaining into more detail about how and why Magical Rocket's friends all had their powers switched around. Well, this is a better explanation than my cat could have come up with. That cat's a dummy.

Now to start a new story....Any ideas that haven't been done to death? I don't want to be beating a dead horse.

If you want another good humanized MLP read by the same author *rocketslug gestures to herself*, try "My Little Crazies". It's short, it's nonsensical, and it's the same genre and rating.

Now to bug EQD about having this on their website. *mumbles something rude about Sethisto under breath*

Stay brony, my friends.

~RocketSlug

P.S.: NO SEQUELS.

Comments

[CartsBeforeHorses]

Congratulations, this story has good enough grammar to be included in the Good Grammar Directory, a comprehensive list of gramatically-correct stories on Fimfiction.

[Dragonborne Fox]

I really liked this, but obvious foreshadowing made it mediocre at worst.

Extend and revision, please!

[aricaitlyn]

3361406 Glad you liked it. I'll try my best.

Can you give me exact examples?

[Dragonborne Fox]

3368621 I would, but for those who haven't read it, I refuse to give spoilers. But I will anyway:

Why take the New Elements of Harmony and not use them in the end?

[aricaitlyn]

3368636

Oh, god. I forgot about that.

I really don't know. I think I'm funny.

But seriously, if you know of a better way to incorporate them into the story (or leave them out completely), send me a private message.

[Dragonborne Fox]

3368648 Will do once I think of something

[aricaitlyn]

3469912

Well, now I realize where I have failed, so, dare I say it, "what do I do now?"

EDIT: Now I get the reference. I still can't tell if you're trolling or not.

[Nox Knock Jokes]

It's... well a good STORY. The WRITING is nice... It just needs um... extension.

The story kept jumping from one thing to another and there wasn't much of a build to grab a reader's attention.

The first chapter was good, I cannot deny that. Afterwards however... That's where everything just jumbled up.

Each "significant" moment wasn't stretched out long enough to throughly explain.
For example: getting thier cutie marks. They just got to Equestira and already get their marks? There wasn't much explanation to why they deserved that mark and why it should be thier special talent.

The one thing I really did not like in this story was Celestia. Yes, I do understand it is the future. However, rulers still need to maintain a certain status instead of just not caring; especially if the matters regard to a being. Celesita doesn't care, we understand. But why?

These two are just a few of the many parts that could use a lot of extending. The story as a whole needs to be extended. Your writing is great and so is your grammar, but that would be a waste of potential if the story does not turn out to the best of its potential.

Please do not view this as any hate. I simply want to point out a few things and give some constructive criticism.

[Fistfire]

I just couldn’t get into it.