You have been tasked with the job of watching over Rainbow Dash in her cloud house as she nurses a hurt wing. Initially, Dash is not very happy about this, but over time, both of you learn to make the most of the situation and learn what you can about each other.
Then, as Dash begins to open up, she reveals what's really hurting her deep inside far more than the wounded wing. Together, you and Dash will share what matters to you, as she reveals just how much she has been hiding her true self from others all along. You will help Dash see just how beautiful she really is. And in turn, you'll feel what it's like to experience love from the most beautiful mare in all of Equestria.
Rated T for Moments of Intimacy. If you've ever wanted to read a sweet pony story where you read from the intimate, but safe non-sexual, role, then look no further.
--You might like this if you also like:--
Stories about emotional intimacy rather than romantic passion
Tending to Rainbow Dash as she nurses a hurt wing
The Delayed Gratification of Getting to Know Someone Before Experiencing Love with Them
Spending time playing games with Dash
Seeing Dash get flustered when she says something adorable...over and over
Physical intimacy including hugs, cuddles, massages, nipping
Emotionally-moving moments revealing Dash's secret loves
Dash revealing her true, beautiful self to the only person she trusts...you
Learning what it's like to see Dash truly happy and sharing it with her
Perfect story for an audio-book reading /)(^3^)(\
Ayy, these aren't so bad, m8.
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Hey thanks! I worked really hard on this one. Totally different than the "quick and go" style of the pinkie pie version. Thank you!
This is good i mean like really good and i can tell you've put alot of work into this
AWWWWWW
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Thank you! I don't think I've ever worked as hard on a 2nd person fic before this one came around! Thank you so much for your compliment! :D Glad you liked it :)
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Thank you! <3 I'm super happy you liked it! This story means a lot to me, after working on it for nearly 8 hours. :) Thanks again!
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7329798 Rainbow Dash was adorable
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YAYYY! That means I SUCCEEDED! :D
I'm submitting this story to the group "The House of D'aww" right now! :D
7329861 YAYYYYYYYYYYY
Absolutely friggin adorable!
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YAYYYYY! Thank you so much! <3 Your comment means a lot to me :D I worked SO hard on this story and was aiming for an even richer relationship than the pinkie one!
Now I need to see which of the remaining mane six I can work on next...after my upcoming sci-fi story starring bon bon and twilight...and a certain spaceship and crew... :P
Thanks again!
7332461 Ya I can definitely tell you put a lot of work into this! It's really good, hope to see more!
Hm, not too bad overall. Rainbow was very cute and the way you handled the ambiguous human was much more interesting than the standard "you did X" with "Anonymous" as a non-name format which tends to come off as blatant lazy wish fulfillment and really hurt the story. I think the narrative would still have been stronger overall with a more traditional writing style to give the human a name and some character, but this was at least strong enough to hold up under its own merits and is unusual enough to make up for its shortcomings that way.
That said, I feel like the way you used the cosmetic stuff really detracted from the story because it resulted in you spending a lot of time on superficial details instead of Rainbow's real emotional insecurities stemming from her bullying as a child. The result is that the entire story feels very superficial with irrelevant cosmetic details used to hide real character and emotional depth which is very disappointing when you are working with the deepest and most complex character in the show. This setup could have been an absolutely amazing character piece if you had ditched the cosmetics in favor of truly meaningful conversations, but these shortcomings reduce it to a mindless bit of fluff so all you get is a thumbs up from me.
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Thank you for the in-depth and analytical comment as well as the like! *hugs*
My goal with this story was to try and find something that could be addressed as an insecurity right away and provided with an emotional solution just as quickly. Insecurity about beauty is usually one of those things that can be addressed by providing forms of encouragement almost immediately, so it was perfect for a story that was this short. Also, I was doing a more updated variation of the Rainbow Dash fashionista trait from an earlier MLP generation, thinking that if it worked there, we could try it here and see how it fit the current character.
It is a good point you bring up the bullying issue. I'm wondering how much of a storyline it would take to really address that problem. From my own personal experience, getting over such a thing would take quite a while and multiple forms of addressment before any leeway could be met. It is something I can now think about for another story staring Rainbow Dash, which you know will eventually happen. :)
Thank you for your fair and complex critique! :D *Hugs*
7357294 I'm happy to help, and I think your point is very valid. It would be very hard to address her real deep seated insecurities in anything even remotely concise because fixing those issues requires building up her self esteem from basically nothing which requires lots of continuous reinforcement over a long period of time by multiple people she trusts to fundamentally reshape the way she thinks about herself so it would really have to be one major plot thread in a large, long running story to work right. You might be able to make a one-shot about one big conversation on the subject which makes significant progress and shapes a relationship to at least partially get around this, but it would still only be one of many steps on the road to recovery and the ending would have to make that clear.
Nicely done! I enjoyed from beginning to end! It was amazing!
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YAY! Thank you! I'm so happy these pony intimacy stories are really making a positive impact on people's lives :D
rainbow dash sure is sappy
I liked the slow build up of the relationship, it was sweet.
it took me a while to even notice that the sentences technically aren't 2nd person... even though we know it really is. interesting style of doing that.
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Awww thank you! *hugs* Rainbow Dash is definitely sappy :P
Yeah, I wanted to try a covert 2nd person point of view, where "You" is never used in narration, but is used in dialogue. I consider it a success, because it read coherently and managed to imply what a reader did without saying it directly.
I hope to write another one of these romantic pieces again soon. I could definitely use the chance to focus my attention on them.
Thank you again!
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I'd like to read more of them!
what character would the next one be about?
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Hmm...I kept thinking about that. And since this is romance, they have to be a character I feel that I truly "get." I've done Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie. I WOULD like to do more of the mane six. I've also considered background six like Lyra.
But I think the one that is most likely for me to write about next in line at this point would be Vinyl Scratch. I just have this special connection with that character. Fanon version, with speaking, btw :P
Shouldn't it be "...been understood" ?? Great story so far though
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oh shoot! Thanks for catching that and reading my story! :D
This was pretty good. I found it pretty interesting to see another side of Dashie.
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thank you for the comment and for reading my story! I wanted to try something different and I appear to have succeeded :)
I am currently in the hospital due to cuteness overload and excessive feels.
In all seriousness, excellent job.
I Wouldn't mind blowing my waifus belly button!
Yeah, uhh, Bow, I really don't think that helped the situation much. If it was ever awkward in the first place, which Bow is barely capable of from what I've read, that first statement alone would have been only slightly more awkward but the correction afterwards made it, no, I will not do it! No percentages for you! Because Shut Up.
What, I said barely!
I never said Bow was incapable of awkward, I said she was barely capable of it.
Okay, this is epic. You put a smile on my face. I love this. Frickin' awesome. You made my chest all fuzzy and stuff.
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Awww thank you! Im really happy this story continues to inspire :) thank you for reading! Dont forget my short pinkie pie story version of this ;)
Kind of a dumb question, but why did he blow into Rainbow Dash's belly button?
Beautiful story!