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The original story was fine by me but, I am fully open to the idea of a rewrite. After all there is always room for improvement.
Well so far so good on this Remake of the story, I can't wait to see what else has changed from the original, also who of the Mane 6 would you hook him up with in this story, also if Scootaloo is an orphan in your story can you have your character adopt her or maybe get Rainbow to become her adopted big sister.
this is fun
fun
"Take my Oghma Infinium, and spread it's influence throughout your world..." It's foul speech echoes in your mind's ear, replaying from recent memory. The book was odd, like a poorly bound and constructed art project, left to sit in the arid desert of the Badlands. It's spine appears to be just that, bones mould together, as are the covers of this... thing. The thing is bound in what looks to be various pieces of wings, mismatched colors as varying as Discord's, and stitched together like some Frankenstein's Monster. The pages seem to be constructed from some kind of pale leather, and the oddly scrawled writings and sketchings you've glimpsed at are in some rusty hue of red... The book, if the eldritch tome can be called such, shares the same dimensions one of the largest college level texts one can find in a library. It's script is so alien, not even the Princess has been able to recognize it. However, the one hint you received is a phrase that echoes in your skull, whenever you look back at the grimoire... "Azathoth mygh'nyeh." It pulls at your attentions, and never seems to be far from your field of vision for long, even if it's just hovering in the corner of your periphery...
The calls are getting louder, more insistent... When will they stop...?
And thus begins the first Hard Reset... On that note, the previous message is an extension, should you desire some Lovecraftian fun...
Well this is interesting! I can't wait to see the rest of the rewrite!
plasma disipate in the air very quickly in an explosion of sort...That's why the military kinda stopped researching plasma weapon technology and switched to laser and railgun.
Well, better than the previous version for sure.
7294186 Dude. Magic.
10/10 would read at 4am agean
I have no idea how to respond.
that just happened.
7303267 what exactly?
Huh, well that happened. Hey Switchlock, Do you want any changeling or pony OCs in your story? Because I have a whole changeling hive that you can use if you want to, its called the Shadow Hive.
ummmmm no
Damn... That actually caught me off guard
And now i'm friggin blushing X3
Today is just full of surprises
You really need to add spaces between paragraphs. The current formatting of this story makes it very hard to read. Wall of text is very intimidating, just saiyan.
So no Mare Do Well oracle? Kind of a pity since I liked that one. On the other hand I'm quite curious how this will play out now!
This doesn't make any sense. Why isn't Twilight surprised by his knowledge? Especially that he knows about her plans on defeating Nightmare Moon. Another thing is, why is she questioning about how he can help, instead of asking herself how he knows this.
I hope this critique helps you.
7312215 yeah... I admit we could have handeled that part differently, but there was some good reasoning behind it playing out that way, problem is, most of that is hiden behind the scenes. When writing interactions like this, we consider how a character would act based on a number of factors, one being past interactions.
This isn't the first time Summer mentioned Nightmare Moon to Twilight, but during the first time, she didn't leave a great impression and things Summer said made Twilight more likely to at least partially ignore that Summer is saying. Also, Twilight figured the whole Nightmare Moon thing by herself from a publicly avalible book, it isn't a stretch to assume she wasn't the only one to figure it out, hence not questioning Summer. Next thing, Twilight is at the time overstuffed with food (I admit, it should have pointed out) and not really thinking straight, also still buisy with Celestia's assignment which currently takes priority.
Hopefully this sheds some light on why that scene was done that way, if you still find something wrong, not explained or not making sense in there, be sure to point it out for us, so we can avoid such things in the future.
...So...What is the update rate?
7324979 Random. I honestly have no idea when I'll release chapters, but it happens when I get done with a chapter.
7327388 Well, at least I know your stories won't die half way through...And this rewrite was more a result of crash and burn than dying.
Well, that was a barrel of laughs!
*waits for the inevitable reference*
That was pretty interesting. So we have the TF 2 characters in Equestria now, cool. Hey Switchlock, are you open for having OCs in your story? I can think of a way to either have my OC changeling Shadow Hive and/ or my main pony OC Emperor Prince Gargon showing up at some point in your story.
Adding in the TF2 gang into the story.
Well this is an interesting enjoyable development.
7339546 Only if your OC can be integral to the story. I tried being a lot more open to OCs in the last version of this story, and it ended up being one of the major causes of a train wreck.
7340089 Ok. Well what kinds of OCs are you looking for? If I knew what you are looking for in an OC than I will see if I have any that you can use.
7340111 Well, The first thing is frequent capable use of the OC in the storyline. For instance, the moment they appear, they become frequent additions to various chapters. Or at least regular occurances.
New chapter yeah!
7340417 Hum, frequent constant use what exactly do you mean by that? Do you mean that they would be used a lot during your story? Or something else? If you can tell me it would be helpful.
7340780 Yeah, something like that. They'd have to be used in more than just a few chapters, and not forgotten almost as soon as they show up. I did that with too many OCs in the last version, like the Raptor.
The one thing he'll probably miss? Human endurance and recovery... I suppose he could just shapeshift into a customized human, allowing for an appropriately larger phallus... Then, he'd be able to introduce a lucky creature to the pleasures of hours long "sessions" with a human... And the fingers would doubtlessly help!
Ok. That was interesting, but not the worst sex scene in stories that I have read on this site so far.
7343395 Thanks. It's the first one I've written for a fic.
7343449 Your welcome! You should give Thadius0's story Shifting Melodies a read, it has a lot of sex scenes like what you have here and more. Tell me what you think of his story after you give it a read, I find it very interesting. Here's the link to it. There is a Cloptional story that I think has a lot more sex scenes then the main story, I don't know if you want to read it but here is the link for this one
7343449 This doesn't make my top 15 list...
But, I guess it is...enough.
By the way...Is he transgender or something? He seem to dislike his "flag pole".
Yet, the previous chapters had him using Summer form because of pervert reason. So, fetish? Bisexual?
Just curious...
And being a shipper...I want to pin down his sexuality. So I can ship. I'm less wild than some other shippers.
7295073 OK Sans, take a break now.
7344243 You could say he just prefers being female. He likes being the submissive one in sex.
Well that was interesting, who is the new person? I have a feeling that we will find out in the next chapter.
Shouldn't the villains who appear in the picture get tags too?
Everyone is perverted. Some just hide it better than others. Or haven't been exposed enough.
And if a guy isn't perverted in someway, then there is something wrong or being completely asexual.
Hehehehehehe.
Shipping!
It's funny that Shining Armor is being a dick to his follow solders right now.
7371794 They aren't soldiers yet. They're recruits. And he's not being a dick without reason.
Soul swap troll :D
You get the idea i'm going for, right?
Hahahahahahahaha....