7264314 I am trying to now, thanks for telling me. I was going a little to fast tough, One problem was that I couldn't describe a few scenes but I should be fine now
Wow. Okay. Time to drop the bomb here. So... Look... Im not a PRO SUPER story maker myself but, as a criticising asshole I must do my job. The story is INCREDIBLY rushed, the character randomly learned ALL of equestria's history in 2 minutes, the character doesn't seem too fazed about randomly appearing in a world that is completely unknown to him, and lets not forget the overpowered character, It looks like Nick is turning into the show's main character. He says EVERYTHING Twilight was sopposed to say as if he was the new Twilight. Oh and you are telling me this guy got bucked in the face, stabbed in the stomach, blasted by the elements of harmony and DIDNT die? Seriously? Not even Discord survived that c'mon.
7261378 next chapter is posted...check the new chapter...is the pace more to your liking?
7264314 I am trying to now, thanks for telling me. I was going a little to fast tough, One problem was that I couldn't describe a few scenes but I should be fine now
(NO IT IS NOT AN INUENDO....asshole)
I feel like this would be a better song.
Also.... SLOW DOWN A LITTLE!
Wow. Okay.
Time to drop the bomb here.
So... Look... Im not a PRO SUPER story maker myself but, as a criticising asshole I must do my job. The story is INCREDIBLY rushed, the character randomly learned ALL of equestria's history in 2 minutes, the character doesn't seem too fazed about randomly appearing in a world that is completely unknown to him, and lets not forget the overpowered character,
It looks like Nick is turning into the show's main character. He says EVERYTHING Twilight was sopposed to say as if he was the new Twilight. Oh and you are telling me this guy got bucked in the face, stabbed in the stomach, blasted by the elements of harmony and DIDNT die? Seriously? Not even Discord survived that c'mon.
Ok.
Im done
I like the Undertale reference though