A Day with Daring Doo

This story is a sequel to A Day with Vinyl Scratch

Rey a young adventure explore the ever free Forest to find a answer but the thing he found what just trouble. what will he do to get out the trouble his in. well to say who will get him out the trouble his in.

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Dash32

Dash32 #1 · Mar 31st, 2016 · · ·

I love this story. I also love the subtle Uncharted 2: Honor Among Thieves reference. Well done!

Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #2 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · ·

Where did you get the cover art?

Raikiry

Raikiry #3 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · ·

7082621 Google ^^

Light Spark

Light Spark #4 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · ·

That's Cool Nice Ending Raikiry Nice.

Maytime58

Maytime58 #5 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · ·

Being a bit pedantic a bit here but noticed this really needs more proofreading, especially as the tense (past/present) is inconsistent.

Also corrections as follows. Assuming for brevity here that you are going for present tense:

"Rey smirk and look back at Daring."
Smirks

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"“THAT’S IT!” Daring scream and jump off the tree and pulls out a whip and whips Eddie’s hand to make him drop his gun."

“THAT’S IT!” Daring screams/ed, jumps off the tree and pulls out a whip and whips Eddie’s hand to make him drop his gun.

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Rey decided to help her out. He inspects the camp to see what he needs to do to help her get out. Then he sees beside him an extinguisher and it gave him an idea.

-sees an extiguisher beside him

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Right now he is thinking of getting out of the forest and go home and take a long bath.
-going home

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As she get close she pulls his shirt and put him up-close to her and her face expression was just terrifying like he just cross a road of no return.
-crosses
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“Yep I know Eddies jeep anywhere. Come on.” Daring went and leads the way.
- Eddie's

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Raikiry