Celestia sat on her throne, peering down at her student, who had come running in shouting about a presence being inside the Canterlot Caves.
"Twilight, are you a hundred percent sure you felt a presence and it wasn't just feedback from your spell"
"Yes Princess, this energy was entirely different from my magic, it not only had a completely different color, and it was also much more potent than any other type of energy I have ever felt before, including you, Princess Luna and even Discord!" As Twilight spoke she constantly shifted from left to right, showing just how nervous she was.
Celestia frowned, hearing from her prized student that whatever energy she had felt was stronger than even Discord did not sit well with her, especially considering the fact that such energy was under HER city. It was at this moment she made a decision.
"Guards! Give the order for Squad 9 to mobilize, tell them that it is an unidentified entity though its power is much more potent than Discord's own, and so bring everything!" The Guards, having heard what their Princess said, couldn't help but be shocked as then ran out the door to do as they were ordered.
"Uhhh, Princess, what's Squad 9?" Twilight couldn't help but be curious and had to ask.
Celestia looked down at her student with a small smile.
"Squad 9 are a group of remarkable warriors each with abilities unique to them only that are to defend Equestria should the Elements Of Harmony prove unable to defeat a foe or if the foe being fought must be....eliminated for the good of all ponykind, though they are much more qualified to fighting foes with high levels of magic due to all of their skills being able to contain almost any form of energy. Now, come with me Twilight, we must go and wake my sister so we may go with Squad 9 to investigate."
Twilight couldn't help but be shocked, after all, finding out that not only the energy she had found would cause her mentor to call a highly powerful group of warriors to go investigate, BOTH Princess' of Equestria would be going with them. To her, it seemed far too much, even if the energy was more potent than Discord, the Elements of Harmony had easily trapped him back in stone.
'Wait a minute......The Elements of Harmony!'
"Princess! We could just send a message back to Ponyville to bring the rest of my friends and if it is required we could use the Elements!"
Princess Celestia stopped to think for a moment, before shaking her head.
"No Twilight, the idea has merit, but it would take too long to call them here. We do not know how this presence will react to being awoken, it might retaliate soon so we must make the first move."
It didn't take long for them to reach Princess Luna's room, and Celestia simply looked at the guards in front.
"Protocol Chimera"
Those two words somehow caused the white stallions to seem whiter than before, then one ran into Princess Luna's room just to come back out five minutes later with a fully armored Princess Luna.
"SISTER! WE ARE READY FOR BATTLE!" The force of Luna's shot blew back Twilight's mane while Celestia simply sighed.
"I had forgotten no-one had told you the meaning of Protocol Chimera....it does not matter, just teleport that armor somewhere safe, though be prepared to bring it back if the situation needs it" Luna just blinked, then in a flash of light she was in her normal attire.
Celestia then lead them towards the courtyards and when the door opened, Twilight finally got to meet the esteemed Squad 9. Straight away, Twilight's eyes went to the absolutely HUGE, muscular minotaur who stood towards the groups back, he had almost black fur down from his hips, and slightly blue tinted fur above, he wore a strap around his chest which held up on his back, from what she could see, a long bundle of bandages with a very large handle which went over his shoulder that had a small decorative skull as the pommel. Next, her eyes went to a small, female, smiling griffin, who had heterochromiac eyes, one a deep green and the other a vivid purple, the lion part of the griffin was a pale grey, while the eagle part seemed to give off a greenish tint and she was coated in silver armor which was highly decorated with odd symbols and gems which seemed to crackle with magic. Lastly, her gaze went to the only pony of the group, first seeing the semi-long blood red mane that was slightly spiked, then the bright silver that made up his body's fur, the odd cloth armor, which was also covered in the same symbols as the griffins armor, he also had scrolls tucked up on where his flanks would be and across his back, then she finally noticed the somewhat familiar blue eyes which shone with mischief.
"GLEAMING SHEILD?" Gleaming sheepishly smiled, hoof behind his head and eyes squinted shut.
"Oh hey there Twilight, didn't think I would be meeting you here, but what can I expect with you being the student of our Princess of the sun"
"Well you could have tol--"
"There is no time for idle conversations, we must go and investigate the energy first" Celestia looked around with a stony look
"Yes my Princess, right away"
Then they were off to the Canterlot Caves
Twilight led Squad 9 and the two Princess' to where she had felt the energy come from and they came to a massive wall of glowing red crystal.
"Well looks like this is the place" Gleaming felt the need to point out the obvious and that caused the huge minotaur to glare at him, "What? I thought I would tell you lot!" The minotaur just grunted in annoyance.
"Hush Gleaming, we do not wish to provoke an attack from our unknown guest, Princess'" He then looked over to Celestia and Luna, “I think it would be wise for you two to use your magic to notify the creature that we are here to we do not surprise it, then could you please cut a doorway into the wall in front of us" This reasoning cause Celestia and Luna to nod, then look at each other. With a simple movement both Princess' shot a wave of magic out, and instead of the two waves fighting with each other, they both mixed together and melded into one form, showing the unity of the sisters. The new wave flew through the wall and nudged the great beast behind it.
Kurama opened his eyes, moving his head to the direction from where the nudge had come from and noticing a group of highly positive feelings coming from behind one of the walls of his den.
'I guess my little warning earlier didn't deter my little....intruder, seems like it's time to greet my new guests.....'The grin that accompanied that thought would have brought shivers down the spine of any onlooker as he stared at some energy cutting through the wall.
The group all took steps into the looming darkness which was revealed through the cave wall. Twilight was the first to notice and she had frozen in terror, Celestia saw this.
"Twilight, what’s wrong?"
"L...Look up....."
They all lifted their heads, slowly, it was then they all found themselves being stared down by a glaring pair of red, slitted eyes and a massive sharp toothed grin.......then it spoke
"Welcome to my parlour, said the spider to the fly, won't you take a seat?"
Twilight screamed as a leering fox's face came out of the shadows from above them.
7082562 They may not be knuckle heads(well, not all of them) but Kurama's going to be meeting a whole load of new people
oh I want more story this can lead to so many things and one of them I can tell is kyuubi using a tailed beast bomb also
creepy
7082640 Well of course Kurama is going to have to use the tailed beast bomb cause without it, there would be no big boom, and big boom is fun
MORE!!!!!
7082667 *looks at aching fingers then tries thinking of a way to continue* ahh crap im going to be here all night
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Is that the 'Easter Egg'? A quote from the poem 'The Spider and the Fly'?
7082685 Wait that's an actual poem? i just thought it was some thing said on the internet, while its not the Easter egg i was looking for, i'll let you in on it as well so congrats, you as well as someone else gets to have a peek at a bit of a later on chapter
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Sweet! And yea it's a poem. The line that you had Kurama say is actually a pretty famous quote. I think it's one of the most heavily quoted lines in the English language.
You should definitely check out the poem.
7082708 Wow....did not expect that, thanks for letting me know!
7082718 The Minotaur had Kisame's weapon, Samehada.
...That is what you were going for wasn't it?
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If you want some inspiration then I suggest you read "The akatsuki in equestria."It is longer but it is magnificent however it was never completely finished.It really shakes me up still.Also if you want to know how NOT to writ fanfic read the naruto EQUESTRIA GIRLS fanfic.
This is just my opinion but everyone of the ones I have read have been *******.
Awesome chapter. I'm curious are any of the other Bijuu still alive as well?
A very interesting concept.... but the chapters are far far FAR too short. Even combining all three existing chapters together wouldn't be enough to make a single solid chapter of acceptable length.
for a moment i thought the Minotaur sounded a lot like kisame with the sword description
7082674 Your damn right you are! Now get back to work or you'll lose your extra slice of bread!
7082839 and we have a winner, yes the minotaur has samahada, i thought including that would be a way to help people realize that some relics from the past world will be found, anyway congrats you get the prize as well
7083073 Well, i had hoped so as thats the effect i wanted to pass and and while it is the correct easter egg, you were sadly beaten on that one, maybe next time
7082970 im sorry i just find it really difficult to be able to keep a large chapter going, whenever i attempt to do one when i look through it, it seems either rushed or just doesn't connect well together
7082809 there, there, it's okay to sometimes show you have emotion, and thank you, i'll have to give those stories a read soon, so i can see what to do and what NOT to do
7083359 NOOO NOT MY BREAD *starts typing*
if i do good can i have butter?
7083763 I won?
...I-I mean of course I did.
I don´t know why I think there went something wrong, shouldn´t they more or less fight first? This is like they would be stronger than the elemenst, or this is just the killing Squad, in chase it doesn´t works otherwise.
I think with the Backstory I´m okay with the Team (I somehow had to think of them, as some weird Cartoon Villains, looking like some really badass people)
Well his speach seems odd to me, but I still open for everything. Sometimes you have to wait for another chapter, it maye looks much better that way. However if that Team 9 is around for a while, and even if I thought it would be Main six and Kurama mostly, I'm a bit wary about what is supposed to happen.
Till now I like the story.
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Not gonna post any spoilers from the prize, but for those of you who are on the fence about this story... stay tuned, because epic shit will be going down.
...At least none anyone will notice until it happens
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Hmm. For me, when they're short, it's pretty much what you say there for long chapters. They seem rushed. Like you're trying to finish them as well as fast as possible. With shorter chapters, when you jump scenes a few times, it doesn't connect well together in such short chapters. It feels.... choppy I guess? Hard to think of the right word. And with shorter chapters it never feels like you accomplish much with them. Both as a reader and a writer. Because as the writer, you're trying to accomplish more in less space, you have to compact things and that, for me, affects the quality of the writing. For me as a reader, with such short chapters, it feels less like I'm reading a story and more like I'd be reading a movie or play script. "X speaks line and moves over here. Y replies with line". Hope that makes sense. As a reader it also affects immersion into the story world. You start reading, you're just getting into it and then... it's over. Kinda hard to really get into a world when you, well, can't get immersed into it.
If you feel you have trouble with longer chapters, I'd suggest working at it gradually. Aim for two thousand words, and I'd suggest not switching scenes or perspectives too much... maybe once a chapter. Once you get comfortable at two thousand words... push the barrier to two thousand five hundred words. Once comfortable there, push it to three thousand. Keep pushing the barrier once you get comfortable at a certain word count. With time, you'll get to feeling more natural with longer chapters.
*shrugs* Food for thought.
7084363 Alright, i'll have a go at writing longer chapters, thank you for your opinion in all this
7084081 I'm sorry that adding of the Squad 9 ruined the story for you, but it was the only way i could actually show some aspects of the new world of Equestria i am making...cause in this universe, all the problems WON'T be solved just by friendship and that is the purpose of Squad 9, they'll be the strike team of Equestria, the ones who have to go into the darkness to keep others in the light (Always wanted to say that) but don't worry, it will still mainly focus on Kurama and the main six, just Squad 9 are there as watchers to prevent disasters
7084552 nah not really ruined it, this is just one of the moments where I think it can either be pretty good, or really akward.
However I´m glad to hear it.
Um... Correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't the Nine-Tailed Fox suppose to be a bad guy?
7084773 Do I sound like I don´t want it to happen? It sounds like I write it in a way to make you understand it like this. I´m really curious.
I just hope that they don´t just go pleading one chapter, and then he is allowing them to drag him anywhere. You maybe know how I mean it, not really bad and somehow cheap.
I want it to look at least like he wants to give them a chance because he wants it.
7085237 OHHHH, sorry for misunderstanding your comment hehehe....i aint very good at this....
7085182 maybe i should put this in the description, but this is set after the whole anime, so if you haven't watched it all, you might get a bit confused
Huh good thing ponies don't wear pants or underwear. Can't wait to see what happens next. Watch were you step!
nice story
The premise is nice. Personally I could do without all the OCs.
MORE!!!
MORE If......um.....you don't.... Mind....*whimpers*
Please update
I just love the premise of this story! but i think you could do without the Squad 9 thingy.
7082708 can you tell me which poem that quote belongs to?
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It's called 'The Spider and the Fly'
7142043 awesome i love this poem
WHEN THE NEEEEEEEEEXT?????????
Oh fuck they met the fox please tell me they wouldn't fight him but can you please make it longer.
I love those moments.
Then Kurama is gonna get sealed inside one of the Mane 6 I bet on Twilight.
I need to see this squad 9.
He’s about to have a ball with them.
Ok, he’s having too much fun.