when a mysterious colt arrives at ponyville from the glooming harbors buckingham for a mission not everything goes as planned 100,000 gold coins.....the mission: deliver a experimental "plasmid", a peculiar liquid that is currently not known to the public and could be fatal to equestria if in the wrong hooves...
Too short, interesting idea, First letter of new paragraphs need to be capitilized, names need to be capitilized also
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Too lazy to post as myself, so I'm bein' a guest
39481 Thanks, im working on the next chapter witch will be less lazy and longer......emoticon spam
39642 I see, but with ideas such as this, 2500-4000 words is the standard.
42984 ahem, like per chapter
Lot's of errors even in the Title.
Makes me not want to read it. Clean it up and it may attract more viewers.
Equestria doesnt use golden coins, they use bits.