Fireball, a blind filly is left at a castle by her parents and is raised into a loving family consisting of a dad, mum and a pair of triplets in Lyngway. As she grows up, she hopes to achieve her goal at finding her real parents and demanding to know why they abandoned her. This is going to be based off a dream I had and Lady and the Tramp 2.
Um. I like the name "Lyngway". But you did not have to tell me that it was a spoof, or, if you did, you could have done so in an "Author's Note".
There should be a comma after the word "times". You make this grammar mistake quite often!
In addition... I don't think Santa Hooves is a thing in the show. Not a big deal, but it should also be an easy thing to rectify if need be.
Lastly, I want to recommend paragraphs. They're great. Trust me.
It's shaping up to be a cute story so far. I look forward to whatever is next.
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When it comes to the way I write, I just don't want any new sentences after a full stop, it's just if the story will not be accepted for submission (even though since, I've used the auto-approved instead of the moderation one). That's pretty much my style of writing on this website but I use paragraphs on FanFiction.net
Where in Snowdrop does Fireball appear? I don't remember seeing him.
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Fireball never appeared in Snowdrop. This is a character I created myself and I got an idea from Snowdrop to write something like this except a little like Lady and The Tramp 2. By the way, Fireball is a filly not a colt.
I write fan fics with just original characters that I make uup and I get an idea for a name by thinking with my head or just looking at all the MLP character names G3 and G4, then trying to change it to something different so that no one thinks I'm putting in an actual character.
Lack of Braille In this world?
The cover art was changed, right? Why?
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because the picture I used was just of Fireball and it seemed good at first then I asked my boyfriend to make a cover of it. I thought it was good so I used it.