Demons of Shadow: the demons that Johnathan mentions here will be explained in a later chapter. I don't wanna spoil anything this big.
Nightrunners: People cursed with the Night's Rune. Basically the equivalent of being turned into a Bat pony.
Runes: There are three main branches of runes, Dark runes, Neutral runes, and Light runes. (Which are the ponies cutie marks if you ain't guessed it. But they are done entirely in black ink. Like tattoos, but certain words and events must be done before the runes have any power.)
Dark runes: Dark runes are basically the equivalent of dark or black magic. Often times they are required to help the humans to survive certain threats. (Dragons and timber wolves for example.) However they carry taint.
Light runes: The polar opposite of the spectrum from the Dark runes. Used mainly to heal wounds and create armor.
Neutral runes: Grey magic. Main uses include, but are not limited to, telekinesis, telepathy, and music.
Taint: The aftereffect of using, or being subjected to the use of, a Dark rune. Johnathan has three dark runes himself. One is his own, the other one is on the base of his head. It is shaped, and colored, like a cotton candy cloud with chocolate rain going into it. It allows him sense of coming danger. Though he never can discern the source or magnitude of said danger. The second is weird. It protects him from the taint of the other one, but causes him to go into unexplained fits of anger or sadness.
You really put your soul into yours. I love the way you made Princess Luna's language all old sounding. This story has the potential to become something rather awesome! Or at least I think so. I'll try my best to help in any way I can, but I might miss some things as I'm a newbie too. But one helpful thought. What does Jonathan look like? Is he tall? Is he short? What is he wearing? Any magic accessorizes? Unusual features? Telling about things like that could help speed along the story, while feeding the reader added depth to the character. (By the way, I have no idea why some people dislike A Thousand Years. If they think there is a problem, I wish they would say so.)
7048696 I agree and I tried to do the best I could to make it line up with the show as possible. And thank you!
7048711 No problem!
7048870 If you are willing to do a rewrite, you could have it start with a vision or dream of the younger Jonathan kneeling beside a dying family member, guardian, old friend, you choose. Then have them explain to him about the marks and such, so the reader will learn about it in a way that captures their interest. There is a chance to do some world building here. Mention the ruins near the house, the ancient railroad, the depot. Maybe instead of having a pit randomly open beneath him, have the dying person give him a magical item, but refuses to explain why. Only have them tell Jonathan to do some sort of ritual, you choose, and leave it there. Then have older Jonathan walking around the forest, thinking about the recent attack of the things, and how the railroad just stopped. Have him wonder about one or two of the mentioned legends. Here is your chance to tell us what he looks like. Then suddenly the item glows and opens the pit. Jonathan falls into it. The rest will fall perfectly into that. But this is just an idea I came up with while vacuuming my room. Do with it as you choose.
7049056 That sounds awesome! Um... Would you like to take over...? I'm great with the ideas but terrible with the execution... I'd like to see how it would look like that... Plus I'd like to keep writing on the line I have planned...
7049267 Sure! I'd love too. The idea has been continually growing in my mind. I'm cool with it as long as you are cool with it. I'll still ask you questions, as this was your amazing idea to begin with. But, I have been wanting to ask, is it okay if I put in my own human OC? I have a small idea how she and Jonathan meet.
7050144 Sure thing! I wanted others to get involved in the story before. I've always hated doing things alone, and that applies to my writing as well!