Twilight, following a mare closely resembling herself, winds up entering the more adult section of Ponyville in her quest for answers. When the mare goes to 'The Perfect Plot', a strip club, Twilight sneaks in after her. What could possibly go wrong?
7129507 I'm just going to assume that I didn't do a good enough job showing that the strip club's "theme" is mares dressing up to look like high-profile ponies, leading to some confusion over the end (where the mare who kinda-sorta looks like Twilight comes out to perform), hence a comment like 7129471. My bad!
Well, I, personally, taking this story in stride, (unlike some people,) despite the concept, it worked really, really well. He took a Concept and rolled with it. I can appreciate that. Keep on writing, James. Don't pay attention to idiots who can't go to a story and forgive shrewd language in a story whose concept is shrewd.
7129586 You don't have to worry about Nothing is Constant. He's a troll. As I've seen him leave comments like this and worse for no reason on multiple stories.
Now this is an interesting story. Dealing with lookalikes and body doubles who do, rather provocative things, causing a great deal of confusion and scandal. Not surprised that they have women who look like celebrities, if people can't get the real thing, a good looking substitute will work just as fine. Just be thankful that this is a strip club Sparkles, you could have just as easily entered a brothel or even the filming of porn. Now that would be awkward. Anyway don't let the naysayers get you down. This is a good story with a hilarious premise.
7130136 Might also have something to do with the fact that Twilight spends the majority of the chapter completely lost inside her own head, while stumbling about like a drunk in the outside world. Not only is that not the type of neurotic behaviour that Twilight typically displays, the repetition also gets annoying. Combine this with a lack of any payoff for the built-up tension, and I can see why some readers might be put off.
If I didn't know James Light's other stories and thus knew I can trust him to deliver a good (and hot) story, I'd probably have put away this story after the first chapter and never checked the second one. Luckily, I do know his other stories, so that won't be a problem.
7129586 Personally I wouldn't be surprised if at least half the downvotes are some combination of "Anthro! Eww!", "Clop! Eww!", "Anthro Clop! Double Eww!" and then they downvote without looking at it.
Sadly there are far too many people on here that seem to downvote things solely on their premise.
As for the story itself. An interesting if somewhat disturbing premise (A strip club featuring strippers that look like famous people. ) Seems to be well written so far. (Of course I didn't see the original so I can't compare it to that.) And I look forward with intrest to see where this goes.
7399054 Nope! Both Chapter 2 and Chapter 3 are all written up, I'm just holding them until the story is finished. Until then, you can check out my progress on my user page!
7406923 Well, Chapter 4 has ~6000 words written already, so that should hopefully be finished in a day or two (Both Chapters 2 and 3 are already complete and are around the same size). Chapter 5 is basically pure clop, and I tend to write the ol' sexy-times much quicker than the non-sexy parts so... soon-ish? The only reason I'm not posting them as I finish them is that all the real cloppy-bits happen in Chapter 5 and I don't want there to be too big of a wait for it once I start posting more chapters. But, I guess I could start posting something like one chapter a week... I'll think about it.
Which, as she had grown into the mare she was today, left her a little apprehensive when it came to anything pertaining to the dreaded three-letter word starting with ‘S’ and ending in ‘X’.
I know, Twilight. I'm not a big fan either, but it's better than rooting for the Yankees.
Only one chapter in, I'm not sure how far this fic likes to dip its toe into comedy, but I kept hoping that any time Twilight thought "Thank Celestia!" a Celestia look-alike with serious assetts would walk past
.....wait......what!?
Who's the real Twilight Sparkle!?
You must continue
*Glances at story and at the like-dislike bar*
Is there something I missing? This looks like a promising story.
Would the real Twilight Sparkle please stand up?
Oh dear. This ain't about to turn out well at all
7129471 Twilight Sparkle is the real Twilight Sparkle, obviously...
7129489 Just need to finish editing Chapter Two!
7129507 I'm just going to assume that I didn't do a good enough job showing that the strip club's "theme" is mares dressing up to look like high-profile ponies, leading to some confusion over the end (where the mare who kinda-sorta looks like Twilight comes out to perform), hence a comment like 7129471. My bad!
7129586 Well, I don't speak for others, but I think this might have potential.
Well, I, personally, taking this story in stride, (unlike some people,) despite the concept, it worked really, really well. He took a Concept and rolled with it. I can appreciate that.
Keep on writing, James. Don't pay attention to idiots who can't go to a story and forgive shrewd language in a story whose concept is shrewd.
7129586 You don't have to worry about Nothing is Constant. He's a troll. As I've seen him leave comments like this and worse for no reason on multiple stories.
Now this is an interesting story. Dealing with lookalikes and body doubles who do, rather provocative things, causing a great deal of confusion and scandal. Not surprised that they have women who look like celebrities, if people can't get the real thing, a good looking substitute will work just as fine. Just be thankful that this is a strip club Sparkles, you could have just as easily entered a brothel or even the filming of porn. Now that would be awkward. Anyway don't let the naysayers get you down. This is a good story with a hilarious premise.
Don't know what the dislikes are for. This is actually pretty decent. I wanna know what happens next.
7129586 it's probably because of the cliffhanger and lack of clop even if it's got a good taste for the plot.
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Might also have something to do with the fact that Twilight spends the majority of the chapter completely lost inside her own head, while stumbling about like a drunk in the outside world. Not only is that not the type of neurotic behaviour that Twilight typically displays, the repetition also gets annoying. Combine this with a lack of any payoff for the built-up tension, and I can see why some readers might be put off.
If I didn't know James Light's other stories and thus knew I can trust him to deliver a good (and hot) story, I'd probably have put away this story after the first chapter and never checked the second one. Luckily, I do know his other stories, so that won't be a problem.
Hahahahaha this is awesome, I cant wait for chapter two
I expect at least one of the fakes will turn out to be the real deal in disguise. Err, so to speak.
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And watch the "real" Celestia be pretending to be a fake. Imagine that: the teacher giving the student a lap dance.
Is Twilight going to sue for copyright, go crazy or just sit and watch?
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There is option 4, run away as it would be too embarrassing for the girl to admit she even found a look alike do those things. Just a thought.
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Personally I wouldn't be surprised if at least half the downvotes are some combination of "Anthro! Eww!", "Clop! Eww!", "Anthro Clop! Double Eww!" and then they downvote without looking at it.
Sadly there are far too many people on here that seem to downvote things solely on their premise.
As for the story itself. An interesting if somewhat disturbing premise (A strip club featuring strippers that look like famous people. ) Seems to be well written so far. (Of course I didn't see the original so I can't compare it to that.) And I look forward with intrest to see where this goes.
is this dead?
7399054 Nope! Both Chapter 2 and Chapter 3 are all written up, I'm just holding them until the story is finished. Until then, you can check out my progress on my user page!
7399065 Are the next chapters going to be posted soon? Sorry if my question seems redundant.
7406923 Well, Chapter 4 has ~6000 words written already, so that should hopefully be finished in a day or two (Both Chapters 2 and 3 are already complete and are around the same size). Chapter 5 is basically pure clop, and I tend to write the ol' sexy-times much quicker than the non-sexy parts so... soon-ish? The only reason I'm not posting them as I finish them is that all the real cloppy-bits happen in Chapter 5 and I don't want there to be too big of a wait for it once I start posting more chapters. But, I guess I could start posting something like one chapter a week... I'll think about it.
7407468 Post them when you feel like it, you shouldn't feel pressured. I'm just happy you are continuing it at all.
I know, Twilight. I'm not a big fan either, but it's better than rooting for the Yankees.
...
What?
Only one chapter in, I'm not sure how far this fic likes to dip its toe into comedy, but I kept hoping that any time Twilight thought "Thank Celestia!" a Celestia look-alike with serious assetts would walk past