Interesting chapters, but I feel that it when way too fast in the gathering of male fluids, I think that it would have been better if Twilight/Chrysalis had been more active in selecting the potential sperm donner and her seduction of them, like using pheromones or mind controverting magic, in instead of seemingly just standing there and get rutted so passively.

Possibly the strangest origin for changelings I've ever read.

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Eh, I'm kind of glad it was quick. Save all the interesting stuff for her friends.

7016221 Yeah I am still trying to get a pre reader, good ones are hard to come by

7017911 I don't think Twilights happiness is on her mind right now

7023117 Yeah I spent a while on this chapter trying to find ways of making it more... dynamic? The thing is Gloryholes are hard to write in an active role and I did have a limit of how much time could be spent on the scene in the world, rarity was waiting after all.

7023182 XD yeah I am actually proud of it a little bit, its slightly silly but there is nothing else like it in the fandom as far as I know.

Not really seeing the applicability of the 'romance' tag here...

7024358 It has not come into play yet but just you wait

It would be a good idea to get an editor to go over the chapters you have up. It's nothing major, just fixing the run-on sentences and maybe a few missing words.