Nightmare Lunch

*New edited version by Night_Shadow12.*

Cheerilee has a plan to control overcrowding in detention and sooner than later, students from different ages start to disappear in the kitchen... but what comes in, should come out, right?

Right...?

Written before 'Crusaders of the Lost Mark.'

Warning: contains gore and cannibalism

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Smashology

Smashology #1 · Feb 18th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Please like, share and comment. Constructive criticism is accepted.

Silver Shadow Mirror

Silver Shadow Mirror #2 · Feb 18th, 2016 · 1 · ·

6947662 It was a good story overall! I liked it!
But it's a shame we all knew what was going to happen since the very beginning... Maybe you should try changing the description and putting something else in like "(Something something) start to disappear in the kitchen... but what comes in, should come out, right?
Right...?"

I don't know, just throwing random things around here. But anyways, I also wanted to point out the fact that you should write 3 in letters as for other numbers, but that's a minor detail.

You did a great job on the rest though so a nice 7 Moustaches out of 10!

Smashology

Smashology #3 · Feb 18th, 2016 · 1 · ·

6949916 Thanks for your suggestions, in fact, I change the description so it could fit better.

Yes, since the beginning I knew that was going to be the problem so I did a lot of tricks to try to avoid it being more predictable than usual. If the road is a straight line, the only thing left to do is enjoying the ride.

Teksune_Studio

Teksune_Studio #4 · Feb 25th, 2016 · · ·

6949916
I'm going to have to add another mustache to that!

Silver Malice

Silver Malice #5 · Mar 5th, 2016 · · ·

I like this, you know what this reminds me of the simpsons Tree-house of horror episode where Principle Skinner and the faculty start turning kids into food to save on food costs.

TheArquius