• Member Since 25th Dec, 2014
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The_Masked_Fox


I'm a writer who, prefers action over drama, and will take any advice from others as well as be critiqued or even have some constructive critisism aimed at me.

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Additional tags: Human; Displaced

Please read the entire description, it explains what I'm going through atm and why my story is rushed. The spoiler boxes are there for a reason as well, they contain minor/major spoilers.

This story takes place 40 years after the Crystal Empire's return, everything after the Crystal Empire episode is not cannon in this story.


Five friends are sent to Equinox to save the world from a catastrophe that not even the gods could stop, these five friends turned warriors are the final hope for Equinox and all of its inhabitants.


Also said 'Sex' tag is on it due to... certain things happening, but nothing will happen past a few references and such.

For those who might be wondering, my chapters will always start in the main character's (the focus of that chapter) point of view unless said otherwise.

The characters are;
(Revealed in Chapter 1) Imperial Gold is a displaced as a combination of Thyron, Sword of Truth and the Bandit from Risk of Rain, and turned into an anthro pony.
(Revealed in Chapter 2) Wither and Star are displaced as Xenoraptors which are cyber dragons and turned into anthros, but their main physical appearance is their armor, but these two are organic (not robotic).
(Revealed in Chapter 3) Chrome is displaced as the Miner from Risk of Rain combined with a Stalwart from the Broken Lords (faction) from Endless Legend and he is a Diamond-Dog spirit bound to armor.
(will be revealed in Chapter 4) Stro-hall is displaced as a combination of a Samurai from Black and White Bushido and an assassin from Assassins Creed and then turned into an anthro griffin.

Also, I would appreciate it if people could edit my posted chapters... I'm still a novice writer, or if you'd like you can pm me if you would want to be a major editor.
For those who don't like how this story feels rushed and has lots of errors and so forth I can explain, I am writing this as a project for one of my classes and since I have two weeks (including this week) of school left. :twilightsheepish:

Current Theme of this story is Skillet - Rise.

The original and old theme of this story is Two steps from hell Battlecry album

Note (EDIT): I added Discord as one of the main characters due to the backstory of him and Chrome, along with other parts of the story.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 15 )

You say it's Displaced, but don't even list what they're displaced as.

6946223 Ah, right I forgot I removed that... I'll put it in the author notes :twilightsheepish: thanks for telling me...

6946458 No prob, though it's best to put it in the story summary.

6946460 And I have multiple characters who have been displaced in this... yea I'll do so, thanks again.

6946462 No prob again.^^ I actually have many Displaced concepts in mind myself, but have yet to start on them due to focusing on a major project of mine. Once it finishes... well, got over seven concepts in mind to start.

6946475 Haha, I have many ideas but they tend to just fall apart when I try to write them... The few that I actually post are ideas that hold and stay true to me. I as well have large projects and this one is rather funny due to how this one is my creative writing project.

6946735 Well, best of luck with maintaining your story then.^^ Hope I also have luck with mine when I get started.:\

Hmm...this isn't my style of story...but this is quite decently written. It feels slightly rushed to me but that could just be my own opinion. I'll stick around and see where this goes. You should also try to ask for an editor or a artist for a title picture. I'm sure some people wouldn't mind helping you out as the community is (Usually) welcoming.

Anyway, good luck with all of this. And I hope to see some serious creativity. -Haven :moustache:

6948120 Thanks, just so you know this is really coming off the top of my head... :twilightsheepish: and currently I am working on the title picture. I'll look into an editor thanks for mentioning that, and with the creativity... the first few are kind of going to be different to the rest of the story in style so that will hopefully upgrade the creativity. :twilightsmile:

You could do with some lessons. But other than that, its GREAT!!:moustache::moustache:

6952666 Currently it is not well written due to the fact that I have to rush it, it's a project for one of my classes and my school is going to end six weeks from now so I am rushing it and hence the quality is being thrown away. I usually spend weeks doing a single chapter and only in spurts, but this is me forcing my imagination out of my head to make my project... so all chapters that I post when it becomes summer I'm going to revise.

Thank you, it's nice to have someone compliment it! Also, thanks for the watch! :pinkiehappy:

6952845 OK then....that explains it...... THE YOU ARE 100% GREAT!!:moustache::moustache::moustache:
:moustache::moustache: 5 OUTA 5

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