716404 Apparently. It's like someone writing a story that has a title of My Little Dashie and people suddenly start disliking it. And the story isn't related to My Little Dashie.
Ehh.. I'm not much of a critic but I seriously think that a DECENT backstory on the current situation can help, along with dropping off the excessive cursing (along with some more personality for the characters than the cliché "badboy/girl renegade). Decent effort but you have a long ways to go.
716416 I almost forgot, ditch the words "Spec Ops" and "Black Ops" since the current (and pointless) bandwagon is to instantly bash anything that sounds like COD (like your title).
This is prity good.... Have to agree, even if their specOps, they don't swer that much. Other then that, ' señor pencil dick' better lay of that playpony before Gilda castrates his sorry ass.
716733 Ancient? People still whine on that 3 year-old game, you best use that word for something much more older than that.
Can't help you much with the title but at the very least, don't use any military terms that have been used to death thanks to the mainstream market. There's even a new game which had the gull to be named "Spec Ops: The Line".
Hmmmmm, i like it. There isnt an excessive amount of mild language and the characters can be played out quite nicely. My only critique is the title due to all of us making the same Black Ops connection. I still think that was on purpose so ill give this story 4.5 of Luna's stars. Keep it up and update often friend.
Anyone want to tell me how I f*cked up?
716329 Probably the title.
716399
What? Do people think that this is based off that sh*tty C0D game?
716404 Apparently. It's like someone writing a story that has a title of My Little Dashie and people suddenly start disliking it. And the story isn't related to My Little Dashie.
Ehh.. I'm not much of a critic but I seriously think that a DECENT backstory on the current situation can help, along with dropping off the excessive cursing (along with some more personality for the characters than the cliché "badboy/girl renegade). Decent effort but you have a long ways to go.
716412
Okay. I take your advice.
716416 I almost forgot, ditch the words "Spec Ops" and "Black Ops" since the current (and pointless) bandwagon is to instantly bash anything that sounds like COD (like your title).
716460
...but there never was a C0D: SpecOps.
This is prity good.... Have to agree, even if their specOps, they don't swer that much. Other then that, ' señor pencil dick' better lay of that playpony before Gilda castrates his sorry ass.
716670
Thank you, much appreciated.
716534 Ever heard of MW2 Spec Ops mode?
716708
...oh well that's MW2 and that's ancient history. Besides what the heck am I supposed to call it?
716733 Ancient? People still whine on that 3 year-old game, you best use that word for something much more older than that.
Can't help you much with the title but at the very least, don't use any military terms that have been used to death thanks to the mainstream market. There's even a new game which had the gull to be named "Spec Ops: The Line".
In short, just think of something more original
716733>>716773 don't forget MW3
and I have no advice I like the story so far... Just don't forget it's your story. No-one elses
716903
Thanks,
No problemo716907
Hmmmmm, i like it. There isnt an excessive amount of mild language and the characters can be played out quite nicely. My only critique is the title due to all of us making the same Black Ops connection. I still think that was on purpose so ill give this story 4.5 of Luna's stars. Keep it up and update often friend.
Dangit, reading back on this now shows me quite a few errors.
1094790 Hello, Past Pingas. Future Pingas here, there's still errors, numbts and I ain't fixing them.