This is a second person Romantic fic involving you, as Silverbolt - a renown Wonderbolt who is the colt of many mare's dreams. You meet Rainbow Dash and Applejack, two lovely mares at the Running of the Leaves, and when Dash finds out that you're a Wonderbolt, she takes an instant fascination towards you. However, when she introduces you to her friend Applejack, she blows yu away with her beauty. What would you go through to woo the love of your life?
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A ship with Rainbow AND Applejack? AND putting yourself in the pilot seat?
AUTOREAD 8D
....I thought I was a dude?
“A cloud-house?” you think to yourself. “The last time you were in one of those was when you were a filly.
Isn't the character a male?
37710 Beat you to it by about 30 seconds xD
I see numerous grammar errors, but the story itself was great. :)
37714
Dang.
this started out great, but you started rushing this really fast, as if you were going to forget the plot.
and why did he have a hart attack? he is a professional Flyer with the wonder bolts and you said he runs a lot and for fun? I don't see why he would almost die?
Maybe a re-write, you have a great plot Idea, and the makings for a great love triangle story. but you need to take your time, and think things out a little. this Idea can still be fantastic if you take your time.
I wanna say I don't even...but now....
*derp*
37606
It says Romance as the genre....
37710
Fix'd
By the way what's with all the shocked feedback? Didn't you read the synopsis?
37731
He had a heart attack because he carried a full grown mare most of the way and still came second, which would definitely take its toll on your body.
There's no way I'm rewriting this. Sorry.
This is the second time since yesterday I have found a fic in second person where Rainbow Dash and Applejack share a guy.
37710 Yeah, it should be colt, first of all, or foal if you want to make it non-gender specific.
That... Felt rather rushed, no offense... It's just Trevor's opinion, but Trevor like a relationship that takes just a little bit longer than this to form, and it felt somewhat... Awkward. First of all, how did AJ get up into Dashie's home? She lives in the sky! It... Just got kinda muddled and quick in this last chapter, sorry. Still a good story! Just not five star material...
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
Hmmm...continue :3
How did Applejack get to rainbow's cloud house?
38046
I can't remember too well, but I thought I heavily implied that there was a spell on her? Maybe not.
ok....now continue, lest see what happens next
38233
It wouldn't have made a great fic if he turned up to her house, and then left.... You at least have to make it a bit spicy. Stop acting like I've let you down, this is the first fic I've submitted here.
Also, am I the only one who is seeing the "Conpleted" badge underneath the description?
This story is finished. No more is needed.
38604
Well this was actually ported from a Gdoc I did, in a Sensual fiction thread.
great story
wait so your saying the mian character is a girl
well i must say it was a little rushed but still great story
57039
No, it's a dude.
Well actually it's supposed to be "you". So whoever is reading it. But I intended for this fic to be directed at guys.
57051 ok i was a little cunfused
Well I was put in an awkward situation [what the heck] I was in another pony's bedroom being raped by two ponies. That is the would be weirdest what would you do question ever!
i am trackin you! 
me!!!!
ps. What were you thinking?!
I never expected a threesome in mlp that includes me!!
This... could get interesting. I'll be keeping an eye out for more.
LOL