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While expecting her first foal, Rarity finds her relationship with Big Mac tested.
Sequel to "The Lucky One," but can be read on its own.
The stallion that under the influence of a love poison, dragged a two story house WITH ponies inside, broke a rope moments afterward just from how much strain was put on it and you gave him powerful anger issues.
Yeah, lucky to be all that happened in that section.
So, just got caught up with the story (Soulsilver's comment stands, you know nothing about OCD readers 
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Considering the kinds of strength we've seen out of Big Mac, I'm honestly surprised that Blueblood even survived the experience. We've seen him love-tap a tree to the same effect as a full-on applebuck from AJ (at least, I think we have, sometimes get fannon confused with cannon) and as stated above he's dragged a house off of its foundation and launched ponies over the horizon. To quote another fanfic, Blueblood should have gotten his flank kicked so hard he'd need a telescope to see his own Cutie Mark.
He'd have been lucky to wake up if that was my wife. Just sayin'.
I understand both sides here perfectly. My wife was a little skittish of me because I had major rage issues when we were first dating, but she got to learn that it was to protect her. Unfortunately for Big Mac (but fortunately for the narrative!), communication is NOT his strong suit.
So far, Mac's only anger issues--that we've seen--have involved his reactions to the abuse of women.
Maybe the song titles would make more sense if you wrote out the part of the lyrics that pertained to it, because I don't know any of these songs. I did that with a story, once.
Anywho, I guess it's a good sign that I get so frustrated at the end of each chapter. Somehow 2200 words just goes quicker when you're enjoying the narrative, it seems
Lyrically, you're right, there's not really any direct relation to the story. I picked the songs based on the kind of mood they set. I actually started doing because I felt any titles I came up with were too contrived.
>>730985 I actually had the story mostly finished the story before I started updating it. I'm just putting the finishing touches on each chapter before putting them up. If I put up each chapter right after writing it then it would be waaaaay to long between updates. Plus, doing it this way allows me to edit it more.
Wow! I shouldn't have started reading this one before it was finished! 
Little details like Big Mac looking up, hoping it was Rarity, and being disappointed when it wasn't are so true to life. I need more of this story! 
Also... from what ponygrad and KitsuneNoYomeiri said, I'm scared to read that article now. Even though I can't figure out exactly what you're trying to express with those emoticons.
.... this is why I shouldn't read incomplete stories.... 
But after previously reading "The Lucky One"... I must, I Must, I MUST!!!
So now I wait... checking my email everytime I get an alert hoping it is an update to this story. 
I am pleased with this.
I should have gotten angry. I should have yelled at you.
Typo demon strikes at the least opportune moment!
Also, the paragraphs right before that are pretty ambiguous; it took me an extra read to realize that the voice had switched to Rarity.
But yeah, I think this was a great tale. On to the end!
Should have gone with Explosions In The Sky for a title for the last chapter, lol.
What a great story. I wouldn't change much of anything about the plot.
You might consider in the future, though, using italics to denote internal thoughts. Helps differentiate it from action and narration.
So many thumbs up!
That was a pretty cute story, and pretty well written, but there's one thing that just doesn't sit right with me.
Titles. I don't know if it's just me, but I don't see how any of the chapter titles fit with their content, nor how the fic's title relates to what actually happens. Additionaly, a little author note poking up at the end of each chapter just to say "Oh and I named the chapter after this song." just plain snaps the immersion every time. It's kind of a whiplash every tme going from "aw that's so sweet" to "Look at this song everypony!"
I've noticed this seems to be an ongoing thing with your fics, and I would suggest moving away from that and into using titles that are a little more connected to the chapters' contents.
Otherwise, your writing is quite good, though some indentation might make things easier to read.
Keep up the good work! 
Big Mac uncomfortable in a bow tie?
Bow ties may be tight at times, but the minor discomfort is totally worth it. After all, bow ties are cool.
Also, this story has been on my "Read Later" list for way too long. I have read the prequel (is it really a prequel?), and I salute you for writing an uncommon pairing.
Nice story, but I do have a problem in the time-scale department.
AJ was gone for just a day before the Rainboom?
That's not a lot of time to cross Equestria.
Or to become a socialite.
Or to become so homesick, you're reduced to tears.
That's my only real niggle with this, so well done otherwise.
Absolutely LOVED the story!! Just all these emotions...UGH can't handle them all!!
But other than that, I truly enjoyed reading this story. And of course, I rarely see this shipping for characters, so it was interesting to think about how this would all play out.
Well this already got a fav and a like from me so have a Big Mac and Rarity. 
Agreed here, the timeline doesn't quiiiiite work. Unless Mac went on one hell of a bender!
Still, the way you wove this story in with Cutie Mark Chronicles and even Ace's appearance deserves applause. You've done very well adding to and expanding canon, and the minor inconsistency with Mommity and Daddity doesn't take away from that.
Both of these stories are the perfect length, in my opinion. They convey great emotional depth without overstaying their welcome. And they create believable romance without being sappy or inventing instant attraction.
Top-class romantic fics, with excellent accompanying music as the icing on the cake. Thanks so much for writing!
And, I finally got around to reading this. And I'm glad I did.
Even though I never read the first story, I absolutely loved this one, and now I'm a bit tempted to actually go back and read it. It's nice to see a fic that gives a lot of backstory and character development to Big Mac for once, and allow me to look at him in a new light.
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Causing cutie marks and disasters since she was a filly. 
It's a shame it's over now. 
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