While expecting her first foal, Rarity finds her relationship with Big Mac tested.
Sequel to "The Lucky One," but can be read on its own.
I begrudgingly acknowledge the quality of that cliffhanger.
This still doesn't appear underneath your story tab.
I dunno why but I've always liked this pairing. Nice story. I thought your first one was cute but you definitely have a nice setup for later chapters. I cannot wait to see more.
okay I'll bite. since this is supposed to be a continuation, the characters feel a little different, but its another story. so lets see where this goes
Welp, I'm glad The Lucky One got a sequel. Can't wait to see where you take this.
Yay! Sequel! This is interesting... Carry on.
Oh Big Mac, she's suddenly seeing a new side to you, an angry side. It's scaring her and you're not doing anything to alleviate that.
Rarity's sudden revelation of what Big Mac is capable of is coloring the way she see's any and all of Mac actions, likely thinking back over their whole relationship.
Well, If I was as big as Mac here I would have done the same thing. I live by the 'old code' where a lady is treated like a lady.
My I inquire as to when we might get to read the next chapter... For you see I have been hooked.
*Retrieves Cleaver* Shunk here have a thumb. you've got me hooked ah can't wait to see where this goes.
A stallion of Macs size with anger issues, that'd be scary.
>>713541713541 Soon, very soon.
>>713581713581 Do you uh, maybe have a plastic bag I can put it in? It's kind of leaking.
"...but can be read on it's own."
You obviously understand nothing about OCD.
The stallion that under the influence of a love poison, dragged a two story house WITH ponies inside, broke a rope moments afterward just from how much strain was put on it and you gave him powerful anger issues.
Yeah, lucky to be all that happened in that section.
So, just got caught up with the story (Soulsilver's comment stands, you know nothing about OCD readers )
Considering the kinds of strength we've seen out of Big Mac, I'm honestly surprised that Blueblood even survived the experience. We've seen him love-tap a tree to the same effect as a full-on applebuck from AJ (at least, I think we have, sometimes get fannon confused with cannon) and as stated above he's dragged a house off of its foundation and launched ponies over the horizon. To quote another fanfic, Blueblood should have gotten his flank kicked so hard he'd need a telescope to see his own Cutie Mark.
He'd have been lucky to wake up if that was my wife. Just sayin'.
I understand both sides here perfectly. My wife was a little skittish of me because I had major rage issues when we were first dating, but she got to learn that it was to protect her. Unfortunately for Big Mac (but fortunately for the narrative!), communication is NOT his strong suit.
So far, Mac's only anger issues--that we've seen--have involved his reactions to the abuse of women.
Aww. Why'd you have to go and do that? My kind is now racing at the possibility of what might happen next. Good read so far, keep it up!
>>714944714944 i would but grabbing things has become difficult and as to the reason. i just can't put my finger on it.
Ahhhh just too short. But was a good read none the less keep e'm coming.
I absolutely have to say that you are doing a phenomenal job with this story. You are always leaving me with the feeling of wanting more. Keep it up!
A little short, but very good.
I'm loving this story but i can't express how much i hate cliffhangers right now!! ugh i guess i have to wait and see what happened. hopefully it will be soon.
Kinda makes me wish this chapter was longer
I am so confused! I don't remember them ever getting married in the first one, regardless, this is a well written fiction and I look forward to more.
They got married between when the first one ends and this one begins.
I am going to read this, but before I do I have one question:
Do you get mistaken for strangers by your own friends when you pass them at night under the silvery, silvery city bank lights?
A song by The National for the title and a song by Blitzen Trapper for one of the next chapters?
You're not just my hero, you're my super hero.
...if that happens to you, I feel really bad for you, man
EDIT: Or girl. Take your pick.
Another great chapter! Keep up the good work, and I have to say, I'm really excited to see how Big Mac changed his mindset
I'm liking the story, but I feel the titles are a bit contrived.
I mean, what does "Nasty Letter" have to do with Big Mac kicking a wall, and Ace having his Face rearranged?
Maybe the song titles would make more sense if you wrote out the part of the lyrics that pertained to it, because I don't know any of these songs. I did that with a story, once.
Anywho, I guess it's a good sign that I get so frustrated at the end of each chapter. Somehow 2200 words just goes quicker when you're enjoying the narrative, it seems
i think you two above ^ are a little too focused on the titles and not the story....
anyway, rarity is being rather round about in doing things, I was surprised with how raidly this is being updated
The plot thickens... I'm really enjoying your set up with this.
>>730722730722 You have no idea how happy this comment makes me. You're the first person to mention my song references.
Lyrically, you're right, there's not really any direct relation to the story. I picked the songs based on the kind of mood they set. I actually started doing because I felt any titles I came up with were too contrived.
>>730985730985 I actually had the story mostly finished the story before I started updating it. I'm just putting the finishing touches on each chapter before putting them up. If I put up each chapter right after writing it then it would be waaaaay to long between updates. Plus, doing it this way allows me to edit it more.
I like the titles. They're all unique and give me a little insight on what kind of music Evan here likes.
I like knowing more about people.
a side of big mac more imaginable after season 2. everyone has a breaking point
Wow. I actually haven't any sympathy for Rarity in this fic. All she has to do is talk to Mac, and this could get resolved.
Trust me, I'm married, and (unfortunately) I've been in circumstances that are sorta similar. It just don't work that way.
I wish it did, but it doesn't, and emotional stuff is hard for both, just in different ways.
That and some people don't want to talk about unpleasant things from the past.
Why do you do these things to me? Now I have to wait for another update. You don't have to leqve me hanging all the time I promise I'll come back.
Ok wonderful story but the song name titles to me are starting to get out of synch with what is happening in the story itself
>>736960736960 Don't feel any pressure to listen to the music if you don't want to. They're more supposed to little... bonuses, as it were, than actually part of the story itself. If you like it, great, but if not, then feel free to ignore it.
Wow, I can hear Rarity's VA breaking down and it's breaking my
On another note, I read the wikipedia article on preeclampsia all the way down. Oh my...
I... I did the same.
Wow! I shouldn't have started reading this one before it was finished!
Little details like Big Mac looking up, hoping it was Rarity, and being disappointed when it wasn't are so true to life. I need more of this story!
Also... from what ponygrad and KitsuneNoYomeiri said, I'm scared to read that article now. Even though I can't figure out exactly what you're trying to express with those emoticons.
.... this is why I shouldn't read incomplete stories....
But after previously reading "The Lucky One"... I must, I Must, I MUST!!!
So now I wait... checking my email everytime I get an alert hoping it is an update to this story.
Oh please don't tell me that after all that Big Mac and Rarity have been through that they're going to lose the baby, I know I'll just have to wait to find out but if she does it'll be heartbreaking
MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! pls update soon
*sees chapter titles*
*hasn't read previous story and it's 4 AM*
*adds to Read Later anyway for The National and Blitzen Trapper references*
Well done, sir.
I am pleased with this.
Very good, very good indeed, sir! I would very much like a sequel to this one.
OH BIG MAC YOU GIANT LOVABLE SOFTY YOU.
I liked this story, in case you hadn't realised. Can we please have more?
Oh thank Celestia
Now onto the final chapter, cannot believe it's almost over
Guilt is a hell of a thing. When past sins come back to haunt you, it seems like you can't drive them away....
This is one hell of a story. BRAVO.
Causing cutie marks and disasters since she was a filly.
So... many... feels! But wait it's over? Grrr... Please tell me that there is going to be a sequel!
Very nice ending to a wonderful story. I just wish we knew the gender of the baby, such ambiguity drives me mad.
I should have gotten angry. I should have yelled at you.
Typo demon strikes at the least opportune moment!
Also, the paragraphs right before that are pretty ambiguous; it took me an extra read to realize that the voice had switched to Rarity.
But yeah, I think this was a great tale. On to the end!
Should have gone with Explosions In The Sky for a title for the last chapter, lol.
What a great story. I wouldn't change much of anything about the plot.
You might consider in the future, though, using italics to denote internal thoughts. Helps differentiate it from action and narration.
So many thumbs up!
A beautiful story. It's a shame it's over now.
Do you plan on writing some sort of epilogue?
I don't see the typo.
“Can ya believe that sumbitch?! He’s lucky Ah didn’t whup his ass!”
Is he black? I read that in a stereotypical black person's voice.
Shouldn't instead of should? I think? If not, then I'm confused, I admit.
I shed so many manly tears. Great ending, my friend. Short and sweet.
It's supposed to be "should." Gives it a whole new meaning, doesn't it?
That was a pretty cute story, and pretty well written, but there's one thing that just doesn't sit right with me.
Titles. I don't know if it's just me, but I don't see how any of the chapter titles fit with their content, nor how the fic's title relates to what actually happens. Additionaly, a little author note poking up at the end of each chapter just to say "Oh and I named the chapter after this song." just plain snaps the immersion every time. It's kind of a whiplash every tme going from "aw that's so sweet" to "Look at this song everypony!"
I've noticed this seems to be an ongoing thing with your fics, and I would suggest moving away from that and into using titles that are a little more connected to the chapters' contents.
Otherwise, your writing is quite good, though some indentation might make things easier to read.
Keep up the good work!
Big Mac uncomfortable in a bow tie?
Bow ties may be tight at times, but the minor discomfort is totally worth it. After all, bow ties are cool.
Also, this story has been on my "Read Later" list for way too long. I have read the prequel (is it really a prequel?), and I salute you for writing an uncommon pairing.
So... he didn't dream about her for 29 years before he saw her?
I hope you have a sequel planned!
Stupid heart, starting up again when it has not worked for six centuries.
Big Mac's speech was particularly heartwarming.
Just excellent. I read the story in one sitting, and now I am in a rather cheerful mood.
In the words of Maggie Simpson:
I'm glad you mentioned italics, because I hadn't realized that not all the formatting had carried over from Microsoft Word to Fimfiction. I could see how it would be confusing.
Nice story, but I do have a problem in the time-scale department.
AJ was gone for just a day before the Rainboom?
That's not a lot of time to cross Equestria.
Or to become a socialite.
Or to become so homesick, you're reduced to tears.
That's my only real niggle with this, so well done otherwise.
Absolutely LOVED the story!! Just all these emotions...UGH can't handle them all!!
But other than that, I truly enjoyed reading this story. And of course, I rarely see this shipping for characters, so it was interesting to think about how this would all play out.
Well this already got a fav and a like from me so have a Big Mac and Rarity.
ahhhhhh my heart! so many feels you must make a sequel good sir
So much emotion!
So many feels! So... much... happiness! :D I truly loved this story. Redemption is probably my favorite literary theme, and this story is on my favorite's list. Bravo, I say!
So I just have one question: Will we ever get to read about the baby after it's born, maybe in an epilogue?
Overall, I still loved this and thanks for writing it.
Absolutely, genuinely, beautiful ^^ bravo.
Too bad Hasbro messed up with your world, with parents and such, with "Sisterhooves social".
Oh well it still is a great alt-universe story indeed :) and certain parts of it were pretty moving.
"I missed you for 29 years..."
One of my favorite songs, and this is an outstanding story to match. I'll add more once I finish, but I needed to get that out now. Much love!
Agreed here, the timeline doesn't quiiiiite work. Unless Mac went on one hell of a bender!
Still, the way you wove this story in with Cutie Mark Chronicles and even Ace's appearance deserves applause. You've done very well adding to and expanding canon, and the minor inconsistency with Mommity and Daddity doesn't take away from that.
Both of these stories are the perfect length, in my opinion. They convey great emotional depth without overstaying their welcome. And they create believable romance without being sappy or inventing instant attraction.
Top-class romantic fics, with excellent accompanying music as the icing on the cake. Thanks so much for writing!
*Flops on back and flails hooves in the air wildly*
Why Why WHY!
I want to see the foal! How can the story be over... the foal wasn't born!
I hope there is a sequel. I've been reading your work for a while already, and I would like to meet their son. (Because, as Big Mac said, there's enough fillies running around.) Great story! Hope to read more! Praise RariMac!!
very nice storie enjoyed it alot.
My heart. You borked it.
Excellent, I just finished both of the stories and cannot help but wonder, will there be a sequel? Stars and Thumbs-Up all around.
And, I finally got around to reading this. And I'm glad I did.
Even though I never read the first story, I absolutely loved this one, and now I'm a bit tempted to actually go back and read it. It's nice to see a fic that gives a lot of backstory and character development to Big Mac for once, and allow me to look at him in a new light.
I read The Lucky One and then this story immediately after. You've gotten two greenthumbs and a watch from me. Great stories, keep up the great work!!!
So much adorableness....
Will we be expecting a sequel? I DEMAND A SEQUEL! ...please?
It's a beautiful story even if there wasn't a sequel I wouldn't mind