FIRST??!!
It seems too much in quality be a first one!

So your a lazy bastard... I have NOTHING but the highest hopes for you my lazy compadre

I love this story so far and this is to good to be your first clopfic

A few errors, like when he opens the door 'too' the outside, Rainbow yelling look out 'Bellow' and the filly turning beet 'read'

But damn dude, awesome first clopfic, this is looking to be a good read! :D