This is a preview of the sequel to Chaotic Harmony, Children of Chaos. The first part in the prelude, then some "trailer" scenes after. I hope this get's you interested.
After Into the Black: A Mare's Tale, I have one more story lined up and then this one will begin in full. ItB:AMT is half way done, and Star Bright (working title) won't be very long, so it won't be too long. In the mean time, enjoy...
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Twilight Sparkle, princess of the night, sat slumped on her floor, her husband Dohi Waya wrapped a wing around her in comfort. Her regalia was tossed unceremoniously in the corner. This was a bad day. It had been a week since the disappearance of her friend's children. What was supposed to be a fun summer road trip became a nightmare. Somewhere along the road, they vanished. The moment Shining Armor heard, he dispatched search parties to locate the six missing college students, but nothing had been found...until three days ago.
A report came in about a cave-in in the Crystal Caverns beneath Canterlot, one of their planned stops. For three days ponies searched, clearing rubble and scanning for life, but came up short, until an hour ago. A unicorn had burst into the throne room with a tiny piece of green cloth, and a blood spattered crystal shard. Twilight recognized the cloth as a piece of the green ribbon Surprise had in her mane when they left.
No bodies were found, but Twilight knew better. The crystals down there resonate with magic in strange, often violent, ways. Most likely, there was nothing left of them to find. Now Twilight had the daunting task of telling several of her best friends that their children were dead. Twilight was wracked with grief herself. Those colts and fillies were like family to her. A steady flow of tears streamed down her face.
Waya fared no better. He already said that he would break the news to Shiro. After all, he was his best and closest friend. But how does one tell someone that his only two natural children, the only two that could carry on his bloodline, were gone? And what about Midnight, Applebloom and their soon-to-be addition? Their unborn foal would never get to meet their aunt and uncle.
Twilight was thinking about how to tell Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie and Applejack. Applejack was strong and would eventually be alright. Rainbow still had Shizuka Arashi, her second son. Pinkie, however...that one was going to be especially painful. Surprise had been her whole life and Twilight feared for her friend's mental health.
“Should we go to Ponyville or invite them here?” Waya asked, breaking the long silence.
“I think we should go to them,” Twilight answered, “...it's going to be hard enough on them. It's bad enough that they need to be told their children are...” She broke, throwing her hooves around her husband's neck. “Oh, Waya. They were right here, just under our hooves. Why couldn't we have done something to stop this?”
The blue prince wrapped a wing around her and tried comforting her. “There was nothing we could do. It was an unforeseen accident.”
“I wonder if it was?” Twilight said accusingly.
“What do you mean?”
“Kataya...what if she saw this and never said anything?” Twilight asked.
Waya was silent for a moment before speaking. “If she saw this and said nothing, it would be because it was meant to be. Though, I doubt she did. Her 'sight' isn't as strong as Laalia's was.”
“And what if it wasn't an accident?”
“Then may the gods have mercy on them if Shiro ever finds out!” Waya answered.
Before they could continue, they heard the shrill sound of the guard's alarm. They gave each other a confused look and jumped up to investigate. They followed the sound of the commotion until they found a large group of guards with several palace staff watching. As the princess approached, the sea of ponies parted until she was met with a sight that left her confused...a little relieved, but mostly just confused.
There, being held against a wall, was a familiar, yet very different tigony. His face was pressed against the marble, while his right paw was twisted around his back. The guard already had his wings bound and were in the process of cuffing his rear legs.
“Razor?” Twilight asked breathlessly, “Is that you? Oh mother! Are the others with you?”
As she approached, she noticed four parallel scars running across the side of his face and head, and the hard, cold look in his eyes. She followed his gaze and gasped at what she saw. The body of Gentle Word, one of Shining's advisers, lay in a pool of blood with a blade buried to the hilt in his chest. An icy cold gripped her chest at the realization. Razor just murdered a pony.
“R-Razor...why...” Twilight looked at him with pleading eyes. “Why would you do this?”
His eyes softened a little when he looked at her. “It had to be done. For the sake of Equestria.”
“What do you mean? What did he do?”
“It's not what he did,” His eyes drifted to the dead pony again. “...it's what he was going to do.”
The amount of hatred and venom in his words made her flinch. This was not the same sweet innocent young cub that would still shed a tear when he killed an animal for food.
“What’re you talking about? What's going on? You were gone for a week, and now you show up looking like you've been in Tartarus for a month. As if that's not enough, you decide that the first thing you should do is murder one of my brother's advisers!” she demanded, “You’d better start talking right now, because I'd much rather have told your father that you're dead, than to have to tell him you're a heartless murderer!”
“Look in the pouch,” he gestured to the bag by his hooves.
“What?” she asked, still fuming.
“Open the pouch and look inside.”
She levitated the bag and removed a solid black crown, and cringed. It felt wrong...evil. She looked up at him in confusion. “What is this?”
“You got somewhere we can talk?” asked Razor, “It's a long story...”
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“No way...” Razor and Surprise crested a hill and froze in shock, “Did we take a wrong turn?”
“No, see there's the Everfree. Raz, are we even in our Equestria?” asked the changeling.
Before them, rising into the sky, was a metropolis. Over one of the roads leading in was written, “Welcome to Ponyville”.
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“I've been waiting for you, Razor.” an elderly pegasus mare with a faded yellow coat and long gray mane stood in the door to the cottage.
Razor rubbed his eyes in disbelief, “Kataya? Is that you? Y, you're old?”
“Yes, well a thousand years does that to even a dragony,” she said with a playful smirk.
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Snow drove her hoof into the soldiers skull again and again, screaming obscenities. Blood splattered on her otherwise pristine black and white coat from the multiple open wounds on his head.
“Snow... Snow stop!” Autumn pulled the filly off the stallion, “Yer gonna kill'em!”
“Good!” shouted the half-unicorn.
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“I love you for who you are,” Razor said as he looked into Surprise' baby blue eyes, “I think you're beautiful in your real form. Your velvety black fur, the way your wings shimmer.”
“I know you do,” she said, “But admit it... the fact that I can change into anypony you want is a plus.”
Razor grinned, “Like Pinkie?”
“I'll cut you.”
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“You sure they're in there?” Oak asked.
“Yeah,” Blaze said, “I can smell them.”
“How are we going to do this?”
“You're gonna sneak in,” said the pagasus.
“What are you going to do?”
Oak gave him a cautious look, and flinched. Claws were replacing the cyan colt's hooves. His snout elongated. Feathery wings grew and flattened into leathery sheets. Black scaled formed along his sides and legs, contrasting with his fur.
“I'm going to teach these guys what happens when you fuck with my family.” He looked at the earth pony. The fire in his eyes made Oak start to pity the soldiers standing guard. “Slip in when their focused on me.”
Me gusta already!
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Now, make it happen
Hmm. This promises to be interesting, exciting, and all-around emotionally fulfilling...
DAMMIT!
No, don't get me wrong; this is great and everyone is going to love it. It's just that now we have to re-read Chaotic Harmony, and it was hard enough to keep the plot, crossovers, and OC's straight the first time. Seriously, it took me like eight full seconds to remember who Kataya was.
Can we have a cast list or something in the beginning of the story? Maybe a quick Bio for each character that we already know so we can remember them and what they look like?
something like Bob: Son of Mary and Gary. Half zebra, half lion, green fur. Powers include invisibility, super speed, etc, etc.
Just my two cents
-Addict
2114980 That's a good idea. CH did get kinda crazy
I'm just going to leave this line here, sorry I could not find it on its own... Go to 4:00 even.
Oh god YESSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!
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excuse me while I eat a few
Is shiro ( the OC not you) gonna go adventuring and knock some heads?
2121434 Nope
well... reading this fels like watching movie trailer (or, in this case, series trailer) short, cut out of whole, scenes that neans norhing to us but making as want to read this, I have to admit, I never thought that it is poasible in written form. you are genial.
I thought he was going to be a tiger
2127512 You mean Razor? He's half tiger half pony. He has the mane, tail, rear hooves, and wings of a pegasus pony.
see, this is the fic that i miss. your other more popular fic sucks in my opinion. i guess im just weird like that. still awesome teaser, can't wait for this shit to start making sense though. your trailers make my brain hurt.
Well, I feel good. This is going to be fun.
2150976 I make a ton references to games, movies, TV shows, and fan fics in this.
2282297 i know, i know
2300526 Nope, Diablo
2300641Ah, cuz Hellgate has a kid with a peg leg named Wart.
2409337 I actually wrote that before I even saw that movie.
P.S. My psycic powers tell me your real name is Darren Green
*Stretches* Oi...Such a LONG story...But awsome it was. What a ride. Took me over a week(Longer due to in-laws in town). Enjoyed every moment of it! I'm SO looking forward to the sequel! Hopefully soon, but no rush Looking forward to reading you're other stories, but I hope around to different authors then come back to previous ones. Mostly to keep things fresh...Thankfully I have so much time to read...At work...When I should be working... Favved, thumbs up, and followed!
2579577 Thanks for the suport. I'm getting ready to start on a whole new story as well as a coloab. The colab probably won't take up all my time and the new story won't be that long so the sequel shouldn't take too long to start.
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Dude, its just a Troll rage comment :P
this is the FIRST BUCKING STORY that hasnt had a comment in it from skeeter the lurker. seriously, it was getting freaky. And I meant litearly EVERY.SINGLE.STORY. even over twenty ummmm heheheh clopfics
2719761 which one is that?
2719829 i have it here some where aha here it is
One of the best stories I've read so far
Keep up the good job
2796780 I'm glad you enjoied it. To be honest, the sccess of Into the Black is thanks to this story. I gathered enough followers with this that when all of them read, liked, and favorited ItB when I posted it, it got featured. It's funny concidering I just started this for shits and giggles.
for why the name shirotora
now i need to think of a video/television serie/game
where did you get that name from ??
if you made it up than
HOW DID YOU DO IT
well beside that now i'm going to read hope its a good story
2800451 Shirotora is Japanese for "white tiger". The white tiger is the symbol or the noble warrior.
ok i read it whole
WTF GREAT STORY
ok i didn't sleep becouse it
it was just too great to stop
bet tell me plz do you know when you start on the sequel
or is the sequel already being writen so yes plz link/say name
well beside that GREAT STORY
AND KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK
2807025 I'm working on another story fist, but then I'll be working on Choldren of Chaos.
2830049 The sequel? Yeah. I have the first couple chapters written out, waiting for editing. I'm going to write out a few more so I have a buffer in case I get stuck.
am i the only one who has read this at least a hundred times?
You know what I love most about this story? Even though there is a lot of randomness and insanity inducing details, the story takes responsibility for all of them, and leaves no stone unturned.
2895419 Reference? No, that was down right plagiarism... and fun as hell to write
Oh goddess this story was amazing i finished it yesterday and it was AWESOME
going to read the second one now and a few thing about this i would like to say
Jynx doens't know a good gundum when she sees one i mean come on Death Scythe best hands down
the comedy through out was amazing and so were the action scenes
love your concept of chaos magic and can i use it for a HiE im trying to write? pweeeeese
and finally I'm reading your other stories now you have offically caught my attention
2900221 Thanks. I'm glad you like it. Go ahead and use the chaos magic concept.
2796801 so when will CoC come out
2905029 After The Broken Soldier rewrite.
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Why even bother replying to a comment made 57 weeks ago?
2906089 because i can besides i got a new computer
2942421 Ponies would have evolved from wild horses, not domestic ones. If anything, they'd be MORE adapted to meat. Granted, in this they're still herbavores.
2942421 True, but that makes it all the more likely ponies are omnivorous, or at least tolerant to omnivores. Before humans were humans, we were apes who were mainly herbivores but dabbled in occasional meat eating. As we gained sentience, we took our meat habits to a whole new level.
If early ponies, with no intelligence, were omnivores, isn't it assumed that the sentient ones are too?
2993635 Congratulations, you're the first person to catch that.
2997432 Actually, he ripped off both. Don't worry, he'll get what's coming to him.
2997678 This story is already done. There's nothing to add him to.
2997732 OC stands for 'original charicter', a charicter you make up. No, unfortunately, the story is finished and no new chapters will be made.
2998687 hello did you read the other one too
2998969 one night fuels me for two days
3000017 Same here, one night two days.