I'm Not the One Who's Mad

I felt I should try and explore the mind of our far-famed hero/villain Discord, who greatly enjoys causing mischief at the expense others. I believe there is a "method to his madness." That he has an alternative purpose to causing trouble than merely for the sake of his own enjoyment. So, why don't you join me as I delve into myriad of insanity that is the mind of Discord.

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alarajrogers

alarajrogers #1 · Sep 29th, 2017 · · ·

I'm sorry to have to say this, but this was so annoying, even my great love of Discord was almost not enough to get me to finish the chapter. I know you probably think that having the narrator and the character have conversations with each other, and having frequent asides from the narrator breaking the fourth wall, is wacky and hilarious, but in fact it is just unbelievably irritating. In very small doses, like one paragraph, it would have been fine, even kind of funny, but the way you did it here it's just like one of those bad sketches on a comedy show that goes on and on and on while you're dying of boredom and second-hand embarrassment. It came very close to completely ruining your story, which is unfortunate because the other parts of it, the actual story itself, seemed strong and interesting.

I really hope that you don't continue the interruptions by the narrator in future chapters. I'm not giving you a downvote, but I do hope you improve.

Aventicus

Aventicus #2 · Sep 30th, 2017 · · ·

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That's fair. My plan was actually to have the author wholly integrated into the story, but what you're saying is understandable. Having such an unorthodox character is an awkward thing to handle and I'm still experimenting with it. To be blunt with you, this isn't a mistake for me. An odd thing to do and incorporate, yes, but I intended and do still intend to keep that a major facet of the story. If it doesn't suit your tastes, then don't read it. I have an idea and I'm going to roll with it and if it doesn't go the way I want it to with the audience, then oh well. I can't alter your opinions, nor do I have any wish to. But regardless, that has no affect on me trying to make this work. And keep in mind this is only the first chapter. I would have loved it if you had liked it, but hey, it's no skin off either of our backs if you don't.

Skittlebug