has potential, with great style.

Tracking and T-up. let's see where this goes

Thanks for your support. The next (and last) chapter will be up soon, and it'll guarantee the rating, so I'll stick with it, but your advice is well received.

awww Dash cant teach her kid to fly :(

It's not bad, but something in your writing keeps stuttering. It's mostly very good, but some of the sentences don't flow very well.

oh geez you know she'll climax watching the love birds.
and they'll have to do it again

I had to google biological clock. I feel stupid. I thought it determined when you died.

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Well, we're working here with the social definition of biological clock, which is when a woman wakes up her motherly instincts. Fluttershy is one that would be bound by such a concept easily.

It's sad that they their foal can't be a pegasus.

Maybe a special case this time?

Though I thought the whole visit to the castle in canterlot was a bit rushed, I am enjoying the dialogue and want to find out MOAR!

“Listen, Twi, Flutters and I’d like to speak to you… in private, if that’s fine, Spike,”

Spike was left in charge of the Library the next morning, as Twilight got in the train to Canterlot.

whoa there, run-ons and superfluous commas