I liked this chapter better than the first. You made the plot more...together is only how i can describe it. The action in the story is great!!! I would suggest you work on the character development. I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
692317 oh don't worry friend the first two chapters are the 'prologue' Three is rather big and 4 is probably going to be one of the largest chapters. 5 I'm aiming to make EPIC.
I liked this chapter better than the first. You made the plot more...together is only how i can describe it. The action in the story is great!!! I would suggest you work on the character development. I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
692317 oh don't worry friend the first two chapters are the 'prologue' Three is rather big and 4 is probably going to be one of the largest chapters. 5 I'm aiming to make EPIC.