The story centers around Steele Bolt. An earth pony, whom for his entire life has always dreamed of being able to fly. Determination; and borderline obsession, has forced him into solitude as he works tirelessly to achieve his goal, causing no small amount of physical harm to himself as each attempt fails miserably.
But now he stands before the latest iteration of his invention, convinced that this time things will be different. This time he will be able to take to the skies - Where he feels he belongs.
Unbeknownst to him, this feat will open up a whole new, unfamiliar world to him.
Author's note: This isn't my first rodeo, but it is the first story I've posted online. I'm eager for any constructive criticism so I can improve, so lay it on me and I hope you enjoy the story!
This story draws some inspiration from the song "Loyalty" by MandoPony, for anyone that's interested.
okay.... I just came down from the top of the page, from the first line, as I couldn't hold this back.
See the problem here? Is the main character a guy or girl? A stallion or mare? Filly is a female young horse, while a colt is a male young horse. So, he was a filly, but he's also a he?
6594658 Heh, woopsie daisy. I must admit that my knowledge of MLP is rather basic, I've only had the chance to watch up to season 4 and that was quite a while ago so a lot of what I did learn of the universe has been forgotten. Thank you for letting me know and I'll get it changed when I have the next opportunity.
6594658 Thanks again for pointing out the mistake I made. I've gone through the chapter and made the necessary changes. I hope it's an improvement!
6596768 You're welcome.
You've got a very good idea here and I'm curious to see how it ends. But for some more advice, maybe not bold the dialogue between characters;
And maybe not color rainbow Dash's words and bold all the words when their talking. Just writing stuff like;
"Y-You're... Rainbow Dash, right?" He asked her with a shaky voice, gulping down a mouthful of saliva in an attempt to regain his composure.
would better without the bolding and coloring.
6596787 Ah, doing that had become a habit for me so that it's easier for the reader to distinguish dialogue. But if it's not necessary then it just makes it easier for me when I'm writing, haha. I've removed the colour and bold highlight now.
I'm relieved that you like the idea behind my story though. I was worried about how it would be received, but just one person showing interest is enough to give me the motivation to continue!
Shouldn't you link to the song?
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I had expected that basically everyone had heard it already, my apologies. Enjoy.
moar! I require moar fic! It's really good btw. Keep up da awesome work! Plse post moar I needs it.
Yas!
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Hello there! I didn't say so two years ago, but I'd like to say that I appreciate your feedback, and I'm glad you're enjoying my story. It also makes me really happy that you'd read my new chapter after waiting two years! It means a lot to me. Thanks!
Tis a lovely little story you have hereI look forward to seeing the next chapter.
Love this yesss! Nice job!
Yes! It really does live again! Hurray nice chapter too
I kinda hope scootaloo ends up asking bolt for help once he gets his jet pack working. I'm so glad to see this story get updated too
This was a fun chapter. I liked it a lot. It's always fun to have luna get involved in some way. I'm glad I put this in my read later tab or i might have never seen this get updated. Glad I did!
For anyone interested, I made some changes to the cover art for the story! I was never very happy with Bolt's cutie mark, so I've changed that, as well as shortening the fringe of his mane. I also didn't like how neat his scarring was, so I messed it up a bit! Lastly, I corrected his hooves, since they were always supposed to look like that. Must have been an oversight when I created the piece originally. Haha.
Yay scootaloo! Noice job here. Still loving it. It's fun reading stories like this one. No two of them are alike and that makes it all the better
Story instantly made me think of this.
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I wish I could watch it! But sadly, it says it's unavailable for me.
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It's a song called Learning to Fly by Tom Petty.
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I looked it up! I can definitely see why my story might remind you of this! I find it kind of eerie actually, since I'd honestly never heard of Tom Petty before. Thanks for sharing!